Ooh, your poem is so scary-good.
You've given your readers a vivid image with your excellent descriptions.
There is something eerily quiet and strange about nighttime. Now I know what it is.
Very good!
Oh, your poem is so hauntingly sad.
Your use of metaphors and descriptions to convey your innnermost feelings
are excellent, and I've no doubt that such an honest and heartfelt entreaty will be heard by God.
Very, very nice!
I just love your positive attitude; very infectious!
Some of your sentence structuring was a bit long without punctuation and, therefore, was a bit confusing.
Overall, you did a splendid job.
You've presented a very intriguing and interesting story, but I can't help but wonder why God would choose to have Will be born again as someone different with different parents. It would seem that God made a mistake, and I prefer to believe He never makes mistakes. But, of course, I respect your point of view, and enjoyed reading your story.
Although your poem evoked feelings of despair, you manged to incorporate hope, courage and love--three very powerful forces. I like how you were able to use lullaby as a metaphor.
Very nice!
I have reviewed the following item, "Moments I couldn't Save," towards the entry fee for Five Star Poetry contest.
Your poem is hauntingly sad, and you are a briliant emoter of feelings.
You convey your connundrum so very well. I think most of us have been in the exact same place as you describe, and your decision to lie in the silence until you receive an answer is brilliant.
Your poem is so hauntingly sad. I think most of us would like to know that someone cares enough to cry if we should suddenly depart from this Earth.
You convey your innermost emotions brilliantly.
Your poem was a pleasure to read. You expressed your innermost feelings in a very sensual and joyful way, which allowed your readers to experience being in the room with you.
I found your mystery man to be very intriguing.
Great entry!
I like the message you've wrapped inside your poem, which I found to be filled with palpable emotions.
Did you intend for your formattting to be unequal?
I'm a bit confused with your first stanza. Maybe if you clarify what that something is that is close to you. I can't quite put it together.
You have a great sense of style of rhyme.
I found your story to be a quite an amusing read. You possess a fecund imagination and convey your stories brilliantly. It was so easy to get lost in your easy flowing, flawless writing. Excellent!
I found your story to be a very engaging one because your writing is flawless and flavored with a hint of excitement for the moment. It was a pleasure to be this, and I've been rewarded with feelings of peace.
Thank you for sharing this story. You've shed light on a subject that for most is taboo, and it shouldn't be. People like Mr. Robinson should not be teaching children because he's a pervert. Excellent!
Your poem radiates with such a poignant nastalia. I think most everyone at some some point in their lives stops to question their journey, especially the lesson that should have been learned. It reads as though you are very insightful and respectful of life's gifts.
Bravo! You are obviously someone who has learned from their mistakes, and more importantly, you are totally aware that a hubristic attitude leads to no where.
The opening of your story was very alluring and drew me in immediately. Your style of writing is very unique. It was so easy to hang onto each and every word, and I did see the ending coming. Wow! You created quite a twist!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story, which was hilarious. Some people have all the luck! You are a very talented and prolific writer. Hope to read more of your work.
Your story is emotes palpable feelings about a love that left too soon. You have espoused your state of mind brilliantly, and I've no doubt that many people will be able to relate. You are a very talented writer, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story.
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