You've very aptly described so many girls who are on the path of finding their way.
You seem to be very intuitive and bright, and I've no doubt you will be successful at whatever you endeavor to do.
Best wishes,
Lola
The metaphors and descriptions you used to describe your feelings certainly paint a person who has been impaled by the transient nature of turbulance and fear.
I'm convinced you are highly intellient, courageous, and a conqueror, and I've no doubt you will ride this wave of discomfort for a very short while.
Best wishes,
Lola
I'm able to extrapolate a bit of your message from the really short story, but I would suggest you offer more details about your protagonists; i.e., their beliefs and why. I'm having a difficult time connecting this to the Chick=fil-A controversy and the recent stoning of a couple caught in adultry.
You are obviously a very passionate person, and I particularly like your use of daudy characters, but I need a bit more persuasion as to why you feel so strongly about your convictions.
Lola
Your expressions of claustrophobia and being swallowed up by a non-existent reality are quite brilliant, and convey the feelings of so many walking, wounded souls.
Your poem should be published in medical journals all over the world as I'm sure millions can relate.
Bravo!
For someone who is only sixteen-years-old, you are a very wise person.
I wish I could say that I was as mature thinking as you at that age.
You proffer some excellent advice, but don't be too hard on yourself because the only way we learn is through our mistakes.
Excellent writing.
Lola
You write about your innermost feelings so brilliantly, and I totally agree with your concept.
We all have thousands of thoughts/daily, and to grab a few and expound upon them, is not only therapeutic, but can be greatly rewarding.
You are indeed a very talented writer.
Bravo!
I applaud your passion for humanness.
Just because one person stands on a soapbox and preaches to the people does not mean they are in the right. It is up to each and every one of us to adopt our own philosophy, and unfortunately, millions of people around the world cannot enjoy the same freedoms as we Americans do.
Thank you for your courage and support of women of everywhere. You lone voice will be heard and your words will help to provide healing.
I awarded you less than five because of your punctuation and capitalization.
I'm sure when you read over your brilliant pice of work, you will immediately zoom in to what I'm talking about.
Wow! Your wrapped an explosion of truth inside your poem, which I found to be high caliber.
You certainly know how to emote your innermost feelings, and I agree with about certain places, but not all.
Great piece of work.
Your poem is absolutely stunning!
The descriptions you orchestrated are simply divine, and caused this reader to pause and just drift into a picture perfect world.
You are indeed a very talented and prolific writer.
The message you've wrapped inside your poem is one that is heartbreaking.
The delicate poignancy with which you relate your innermost feelings, has definitely
unraveled my heartstrings.
In today's society, unfortunately, it has become acceptable to just walk away from a scene of poverty.
Thank you for writing this poem and injecting a sense of urgency into your readers.
You've emoted your passion brilliantly!
We all should strive to chase after the English language and make it our name tag, but unfortunately, most are chasing the American dollar with performances that are simply degradable.
I admire your tenacity and your creative writing style.
Your poem is wrapped with so much emotion, but for clarification, you need to spell your words; otherwise, it appears to be a text.
You are obviously a very talented and prolific writer, and I enjoyed reading your thoughts.
Your analogy of life is quite impressive, I think.
Obviously, you are a very deep-thinking individual; someone who is able to articulate their feelings brilliantly.
I really enjoyed my journey with you and hope to take many more.
Happy New Year!
Lola
Wow!
I've always believed that poety. like anything else, is very objective and usually appeals to one's own sense of style. However, I do believe that particular styles of poetry must adhere to particular rules.
But, you are right in your assessment, some people who believe themselves to be a literary scholar are oftentimes just a label.
I like your passion
Your words are palpable, and I'm sure jump off the page for many. The message wrapped inside your poem is one shared by millions, and you express yourself brilliantly.
You are very talented.
I like the message you've wrapped inside your poem.
Your descriptions and expressions are emotionally palpable.
It was my pleasure to read your poem and take away a feeling of positivity.
Lola
I love your storytelling as it reminds me of days gone by.
You have a vivid imagination, and I'm impressed with how well you are able to draw from our life experiences.
I would caution you to check your spelling and pov; otherwise, I think you are on the path to becoming a very notable author.
Have a great day!
Lola
You definitely possess a fecund imagination; one that intrigues me.
Your poem is absolutely delicious with all the flavorings of a magical Christmas.
It was a delight to read your poem, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Lola
My contest entry is 1833411, which I will post in your contest
Your poem is so appropos for today's special occasion--the return of our troops from war.
You've expressed emotions that most of feel or have felt at one time or another so briliantly, and your conclusiion is highly contagious.
Thank you for sharing your amazing talent with us.
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