This is one of my favorite forms; acrostic. Your wrap around was in perfect timing and I felt the rhythm and the passion of the beat as it melted into the flow, of the theme simply beautiful and leaves the reader in awe and lingering around waiting for lots more....Thank you for sharing and I'll be back to read more from your port very soon.....Perfect and a great read….
I think you have fallen the way of many over forty and aren't you lucky....so many of us have forgotten where we live or where we left the car....not to mention the kids and the hubby....and to tell you the truth you don't even have to be forty or over....Doctors say dementia can start as early as five or six years of age....just depending on how much we've over packed the mind with junk....I land in all of the above categories...Thanks for sharing and hope your husband had a wonderful birthday...........
What a beautiful and heart wrenching piece...it is the vision of the dripping water, cold and wet falling into my face that I love so much...your poem is quite masterful and has so much that I can relate too! Yes, life does have these daily chores and constant battles, but it is my belief that these each have a lesson to be learned and in the learning we also teach....Thank you so much for sharing this totally beautiful journey and I look forward to stopping this way again................
Sincerely
Mduci
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I can relate to your poem for a young person who has been lost before his time due to auto accidents...my heart goes out to you and everyone who has lost because of it....I myself have lost due accidents three of my love one's so I know how this hurt stays with you forever....lovely tribute and God' bless....And welcome to Writing.Com.
Like you I'm a sun person too!!! And this little ole sun was right up my alley tonight...very cute and I love the visual in this one...we don't need the picture you've made it quite bright with the context....Thank you for sharing and I look forward to visiting you again very soon....
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a wonderful story and I loved the way you expressed your characters unhappiness with the lady who loved cows....when you pointed out those brown shoes and the grown up dresses she brought along when she left her mothers house I could see them that is how clear you made me see it...thank you so much for sharing this short story and welcome to Writing.Com
And I look forward to seeing more in your port very soon.....keep writing....
What a beautiful painting you've painted here...and the 'colour's' are so beautiful, I truly love the greens and blues because they come with so many hues in the tent....Somehow his being blind doesn't make a difference towards the painting....Thank you so much for sharing and I'll be back to visit very soon....
Sincerely
Marlena
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Oh! My how I love this piece! I love the flow and the beat....it is perfect in every way...I love the way you phrase your words! And I love the opening with....'Soft, Morning rises on tips of toes,' and these are my favorite lines...
'Rain falls heavy, its gift to the ground,
Flowers wave welcoming spring.
All over Earth, nature is waking,
Morning, just before the blackbirds sing.'
Thank you so much for sharing this lovely piece and I'll be dropping by again very soon....
I love this little cutie, and what a delight it was to read....I love the flow and the beat and your visuals bring it right into the minds eye...I could almost feel the arrow as it pierces the heart and fills it with love...I like the style of your writing...and I'm so glad I had a chance to stop by your port this evening....Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com...
What a beautiful piece, the gentle flow and the mystic of the live oak is such a favorite for me...
I have been under such a tree many years ago and I
do believe that they speak to us for even though we
don't often listen they can tell us things that only
they with their wisdom and great knowledge can possible know...I love this story and your gift as a
poet is of no surprise....thank you for sharing and I'll be back very soon to read more from the files of Lisa Powell....
Sincerely
Marlena
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This was quite a very sweet write....Sometimes it takes time for the heart and mind to open up at the same time...but when it comes it will come pouring out like rain water over rocks...I enjoyed it very much and I truly appreciated you jumping in there and bring a dish to the table....thank you for sharing with the Circle of sisters and good luck in the contest...
Sincerely
Marlena
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This was pure delight and I enjoyed every moment of this piece....the thing I loved best was the last stanza it had me on the floor laughing so hard....You made my day….thanks
'In the upper corner of the room,
a spider preys on a fly.
The fly sees no real reason
to resist.
Thanks for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a beautiful story of finding true love and how God' intervened and let you know what a beautiful thing this was, and that he'd sent you your help mate...your story brought tears to my eyes and I'm so glad that I had an opportunity to read this chapter in your life...thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com....Keep the love shining bright forever...hold on tight.
Sincerely
Mduci
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What a lovely contemplation on how to heal the pain and scares left from the past...and that is what we have done during contemplation...we have let go and let God' make all the decisions in our life and got ourselves out of the way so he can work through us...I loved reading your work and look forward to reading much more in the very near future....Take care and welcome to Writing.Com....
Sincerely
Mduci
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This seems to be a very good read, and you're not even into the chapters as of yet....I've enjoyed what I've read so far and just one little suggestion...this being the prologue is quite long...maybe you could put a little break here and there and it would take it right into chapter one and maybe half of chapter two....just a suggestion...and let me welcome you to Writing.Com....looking forward to reading you completed work.
I truly feel that you are going to be a budding
and gifted writer…and this piece shows your
potential good luck with your writing, keep it
up and welcome to Writing.Com. I see that
you’ve a number of works in your port and I’ll
be back to read again very soon.
I sure that this piece is a particular form and maybe you would do well to post it in your descriptions just what form it takes...I enjoyed what I read and would greatly love to have some kind of knowledge as to the form...thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com...
What started out as a pretty good piece, suddenly turned into a blood bath, which I’m sure there were no winners some find sharing very hard to do, while others fine that the best answer is to not walk away from the situation but to end someone’s life…I found no errors and appreciate your sharing with us and welcome to Writing.Com.
I think that the best rating would be to change it from 13+ to 18 & over…
What a wonderful little story...I couldn't let a word slip by! As each was more exciting then the last. I love tales like these and wish that I could gather them all together for happy keeping...thank you so much for sharing this fine bit of writing and welcome to Writing.Com. I promise to sail into your port again very soon.
What a sweet little poem and the flow and the beat have all the right movements....I truly love your
last stanza the best, even though I love every line
it captured my heart...too true....
'Freedom isn’t a luxury
It is something that is done
On purpose for the ones who live
Now, and for generations yet to come.'
Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to
visiting again very soon....
I'm so sorry about your loss, and I wish there was more I could do to ease your pain....I've been there
and I know what you're going through and having had that loss you know I'm sure of what a loss can be...but with the help of loving friends and Writing.Com...I have myself been able to cope with the hurt...and so I hope and pray that you will let your new friends here on WDC....help you through the grief and pain....This tribute was surely a beginning...Take care and welcome to Writing.Com.
This is another beauty by you, and the message is ever so sweet...what a wonderful person this is that walks that walk with you and fills you with warm sunshine...I love every line and I promise to return again before the night is done to get another message from you....Never stop Writing.....
Now and than one comes upon something so sweet and so precious such as this sweet promise of love and one which includes a reason to learn to dance...I love it and you've made my day as sunny and bright as it should be...thank you so much for sharing this lovely
poem and I look forward to reading more of your heartlight messages very soon....
Sincerely
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This is truly beautiful...I love every line and I can tell that you are writing from your heart...and this more than anything is the way to touch and reach a persons soul and spirit...Thank you so much for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your work very soon...have a wonderful day, my friend....
What a little darling piece, it was right up my alley…and held me captive from beginning to end! I love stories with and about animals, adorable…very well written and very worthy of the read…I’d like to wish you good luck in the contest, and thank you for sharing this piece with The Circle of Sisters….
Sincerely
Marlena
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