I can relate to this story and I'm sure many women can relate to it. I don't recall ever being in such pain but my sister now that is another story--much like this cutie, she, is unbearable when she comes down with it...so much so -- I take one look at her face and know it is not going to be a pleasant morning, noon or night. I hope the time has passed for me to have these itches, but who knows I may have them and just not know it! Thanks for sharing, happy writing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I love this story of the noisy mouse, and you had me right to the end. I had a perfect view of the cat and mouse and believed like Missy that the reward for catching the mouse would be great. But things are not always what they seem/or are, for that matter. Thank you so very much for sharing this little cutie, and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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What a very sad life for someone so young to leave this path and have nothing nor anyone to remember her, how lonely this sad being.
Even her death which could have been avoided had she had the right medication or surgery, didn't mean anything to her. She'd used herself up or so she thought, still young and able to contribute so much more to life and living. Such a sad story, thank you for sharing this and welcome to Writing.Com!
Sincerely
Marlena
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What a little darling poem, well written short and to the point which speaks very well for you!! You have said more in such a short piece than most could say in a lengthy piece of several stanzas. Thank you so much for sharing and the words that I'll remember well: "My tears are a release of my fears
Casting away the hurt and the pain
Leaving the dew like a morning rain."
Sincerely
Marlena
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I like your words and clearly understand the meaning and for sure who is speaking, without your telling, you've shown Him clearly, very nicely done and welcome to Writing.Com. If ever I can be of any help finding your way around the site...please drop me a note, and I'll come running. Keep on writing you're doing great!!
Sincerely
Marlena
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“The miser now was dead you see.
The servant man at last was free
To tend the poor who now were living
In Turnberry Street on this Thanksgiving."
I closed my eyes Meg, and the vision of what you’d written stood there plain and clear for me to see—it was a site to behold. I love your writing and I feel the beating of my heart for such writing as I see it as truth and not just fairytale. Beautifully written and I enjoyed every last line. Thank you so much for sharing with our Circle of Sisters and good luck in the contest.
Oh, my dear little Anne, I am so happy that you are back and feeling so well---I am so happy that you are now doing fine. I love this piece and Kiya, is so worthy of your sweet devotion and love. Wonderful piece and so wonderfully written. I really love these lines even though I love the whole piece:
"I am shaken and can no longer stand.
The angel comforts me with a loving hand.
Her broom lies safely nearby.
Her voice sounds like heaven's lullablies."
Take care dear Anne, and stay well...
Hugs
Marlena
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You might say we don't know what it is we are seeing, or feeling when we are dead, but in fact we certainly will look pretty as we're being thrown into that hole six feet deep don't you think? Now of course for those who will be cremated which is my final wish, I won't need jammies at all will I? I like how you bring some sunlight into matter. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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Thank you for this little cutie! I love it like I love my coffee and espresso all through the day. Wonderful rhyme and timing did flow. Even though I do love each and every verse this is my favorite:
"There is one thing that unites us, come one and all,
Though some be good hearted and others smug,
And even if pride does come before the fall,
It does not precede the steamy liquid in my mug."
Thank you for sharing the truth and welcome, to Writing. Com, I look forward to visiting your port again very soon.
Sincerely
Marlena
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What a deep and heart felt piece! My heart goes out to you for this one. I love every last word of this piece I feel you chose your words well and it does not sound like a plea for help, but an outpouring of ones self for cleansing. These words found their mark for me:
"But there’s not enough perfection
Just not enough to show
She follows all the rules
All the ones they say
But life can be so cruel"
Please continue the great writing and I'll be back to read more very soon.
Sincerely
Marlena
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What a wonderful thought to have a tumbling rain; living in So. California I don't have the opportunity of this tumbling miracle very often, and when I do I feel so blessed and joyful. This piece gave me the feeling of running, playing, sloshing about and of being soaking wet and loving it, then topping it off with a beautiful picture show in the sky a gigantic rainbow across the sky. Absolutely beautiful and I'm so glad my WDC sister Kimchi awarded this piece and which gave me the chance to read it. Thank you for sharing and I'll be back to read more very soon.
Sincerely
Marlena
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What a tender moment this was! I love this wee piece; it touched my heart so very much. I feel as if it was written for one who is no longer with you in the flesh but who walks by your side always. Thank you for sharing this lovely moment and I'll be by to read more from your port very soon.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I know I'll be coming back for more, thank you for having such a wonderful gifted way to give back for a year of receiving such wonderful offerings from Mr. & Mrs. all year round in helping to support all these great writers on WDC. I hope that everyone will find just the right prize for themselves or someone else in this great raffle.
“Delicacies mirror life’s fortunes
Redolent with spice, tasty treats
Sweets exchanged denote good wishes
Festival of light, Good triumphs."
What a very nice piece you’ve written for us this month, I so enjoyed the freshness of bring the festive season into it. The visual was quite clear and picture perfect, and the fact that you used the event or holiday using all five senses was an added bonus. Good read and good luck in the contest.
Sincerely
Marlena
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This poem brings to mind such sadness and aloneness in the mind of the reader. It seems that someone dear went away and it’s as if someone had died, and now this person is alone with nothing but a memory to carry within the mind and heart.
"She cried, she sobbed, she wept, she roared,
Until the tears they came no more,
And all was left of what remained;
A memory within her brain,"
I hope that she can find some closure and a peace within her being. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I read this once on your dad's port and I thought it beautiful, and again today it seems even more beautiful than ever. Thank you for those words and for having such a loving heart. This poem touches the very core of the heart.
Sincerely
Marlena
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Very nice read and life truly is about learning and learning is about living, and a combination of these will be to live life to its fullest. I like your poem and these are my favorite words:
"And the more you choose, learn and care,
The better will your life be."
Thank you for sharing and welcome to writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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What a sad account of what can happen; when a person plays too much, and the circumstances that could lead to their death from teasing! And how sad for the sister, who took the life of the brother she loved so very much. I could truly see the visual image of this scene and it brought tears to my eyes just thinking how this could happen, thank you so much for sharing this story and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I look forward to hearing about these different points of views. These presented here today sound interesting and so far I've enjoyed what you had to say. Please do continue your outlook and I'll be back to finish the piece. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I love the way in which you wrote this piece! I love it when a poet writes a poem that can be used for both sexs. I could use this poem and a guy could use it. Very nice, and the feeling was great and I love the nice rhythm. Thank you so much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I loved this piece written in dedication to your mother...it is a dedication to all the woman of each and every tribe who brought their children through the perils of war, fear and starvation. Beautiful piece with a lot of feelings of love and admiration--encased within each line. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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Very lovely words and so intertwining that
two for sure can become one. I enjoyed this
love affair and the picture you painted is
filled with bright and colorful visuals for
the readers mind to envision. Thank you so
much for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
My question would be the word: "Enterwinding"
only my opinion but I could find no excistence for
the word 'enterwinding.' But it sounds good to me.
Sincerely
Marlena
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Very lovely poem about the ocean. Glad you enjoyed your trip to the Carribean. One of my favorite places is at sea, the rocking of the ship and the rolling waves. I love these words:
"You’d tell of when you led the way
Across your treacherous sea
Into a land so far away
Where everyone is free."
I could very much relate to your words thank you so much for sharing, and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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A very sobering thought this piece you've written it has some very strong words and mixed with quiet wisdom. I like this piece very much and see your talent and gift for using and expressing your words.
I like these lines very much:
"as it trembles your vocal chords
and falls from your lips
with the roll of your tongue."
Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.Com.
Sincerely
Marlena
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I think I've been to lovely Summit in Colorado, if this is the same place you are referring too! I like your poem and I could see the trees laced with snow and the rocky edges of the mountains, where the skiing is one of the best. A lovely visual and very peaceful thought.
Welcome to Writing.Com and keep up the wonderful writing.
Sincerely
Marlena
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