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Review of Memories  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello! This reads as a diary/journal entry with a sad ring of truth about it. What a miserable, horrific childhood you describe. You spare the reader all the gory details, but you paint a terrible picture. Never mind feeling depressed, that is more than understandable. You must have been terrified. You never knew what to expect. All I can say is that some people do not deserve to be parents and they never should have been. Kudos to you for being resilient and rising above their treatment of you. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello! I chose to read this because of the title. I have two daughters and a son who all played t-ball and then baseball. My eldest daughter earned the nickname Dusty because she liked to slide into home plate instead of running. Neither of my daughters has ever been girly-girls. They loved and excelled at sports and I could relate to Taylor aka Lizzy. This is a well composed story with a lesson for both Mom and daughter. We cannot and should not force our children to do or be what we wish. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of Short Story  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello! This is a short, but succinct piece of poetry. With the two opening questions action and a dilemma are introduced. Yes, why is the poor character sitting in a tree? Did the writer misplace him? What is he to do with this scenario, this scene? A writer holds all the cards, eh? Whimsical or not, a writer controls the setting and the plot. A hero may not be suitable, or well-placed. I laugh at the idea of a writer throwing rocks to drive the hero from his perch. Being a hero is apparently not easy. Thanks for the laugh and for sharing!
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Review of Tennessee Summers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello! I've never been to Tennessee, so I was curious. I like the flow and rhymes of this piece of poetry. For many of us childhood is a wonderful time and it evokes sweet memories. you've captured that innocence and worry-free time. All you had to do was enjoy each day whether you were catching fireflies, or sipping lemonade, or wading in a creek, or swinging from a glorious tree, or picking blackberries, or eating watermelon. What an idyllic childhood. I like the repetition of " it was a Tennessee summer and we had it made." Thanks for sharing!
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Review of A Wicked Radiance  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello! This is a tight, fast-paced piece of writing. So much happens in the space of limited words and a short time frame. Keck is a different, unique name. I find no fault with your grammar or spelling. So, a thief is himself robbed. I suppose that is plausible. Easy come, easier go. I also suppose the stolen item could be something not only valuable, but of vital importance to the victim. Don't mess with certain creatures/entities. They will hunt down their lost property with dire consequences to the thief. I like the surprise ending with its swift karma. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of The Garden  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello! I like gardens and so, I decided to review this piece of writing. First, let me state that some spacing would be nice here, like neat, orderly rows of plants. All the words are a bit tangled together. You seem to have written this in a stream of consciousness type of way. Your thoughts tumble and collide which enhance the turmoil you felt. I believe you are describing change and its pain. It occurs with or without our bidding. We may retain memories, but we must move on, try again, mourn, but not go backwards. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of At Wal-Mart  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello! With your words I feel the dread and despair of Jeremiah Grumpus. He worked all his life for a meager pension and money is tight. Of course he wishes to spend wisely, but he still has loyalty for his former employer and disdain for the upstart, intrusive Walmart. I can picture him in his disguise hurrying through the aisles. He begrudgingly marvels at the cheaper prices that are to his advantage. What a quandary. I noticed that 'he' is missing from the sentence "But if ran into someone he knew." Does the word twins need a capital? Does the word came in that sentence need a capital? Thanks for sharing this story!
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Review of November  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello! I chose to review your poem because it was an ode to your Mom and she died in November. My Mom died several years ago and her birthday was in November. We know that a parent must die some day, but we're never fully prepared for that actuality, are we? Your poem is beautiful and melancholy. The rhyming scheme is different in that each stanza is not the same, but I like it. It's sorta similar to the vagaries of speech and our memories. Perhaps that's just me. The third stanza is my favourite. The idea of being hugged in your sleep by your mother is comforting. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Amy! First, I'd like to mention that I too am a Canadian residing in Ontario. Newfoundland is on my bucket list for travel. Some day I'll venture there. I believe most of us writers discover inspiration all around us in the everyday, the everything. Sometimes, it's our senses that trigger a story idea and they always contribute. Our senses are closely associated with our emotions and our memories. So much lurks in our brains waiting to resurface. Ideas do not always appear at will. They seem to need to percolate, simmer, ferment if you will. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of Fingerprints  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This piece is informative. Of course I am aware that individual finger prints are unique and may serve to identify each of us. I have learned that other wonderful creatures have unique features that are their own. When I looked at a zebra or a cheetah I noticed their respective stripes and spots as being the same for all of them. Now I will see them with new eyes and marvel at their beauty.Thanks for sharing and reminding me not to take anything for granted. Memorable line:"we are all connected by the prints we leave on the world.'
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This story is hilarious.I congratulate you for incorporating so many of the prompt lines. It's a challenge you accepted and bested. That poor husband couldn't say anything at first to banish his wife's funk. She seemed immune to humour. The chili explosion broke the stalemate. One can only laugh at the unintended mess. Your dialogue is spot on and believable. Tension is like that. It blows in, rumbles, and then dissipates. Even the fact Ray almost smothered Laura attempting to protect her is hysterical. Thanks for the laughs and for sharing this tale.
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Review of The Tragedy of It  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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hello! First let me say that I like your username, Puddle Diver. Creative, unique. Yes, I agree, this tale highlights a tragedy of sorts. Two people maintain a twisted relationship. Who permits their partner to refer to them as a puppy? This Alice certainly seems to be manipulative. This reads like a scene from a movie or television show. It moves at a quick, tense pace. I found the dialogue to be believable and it contributes to the story. Yes, now I wonder, too. Did they do this to each other? Enabling at its finest. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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I was intrigued by the title of this piece. Your mother seems to be a no-nonsense sort. "There was a world according to Mary and that was that." That sums up a straight shooter. She really believed in the whole corporate scam thing. Sensible and not one to spend money frivolously. I'm glad she celebrated two holidays. As a mother I too appreciate an any time phone call. It need not be a special occasion. No mother wishes to lose touch with her children or be remembered only because 'corporate' says it is so. I salute your practical parent. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello fellow Ontario writer! You pose an interesting question in this piece of writing. What would or could we do without the use of words? Even sign language makes use of words at times. It's not all symbols or gestures. We rely upon words to communicate. Look at the slang or short forms of this digital age. They are too easily misconstrued. We need actual words. Pictures or art work could also be misunderstood. Interesting idea to mention animal instincts. This would be very basic communication. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of What Shall I Say?  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry. People are complicated and this attempts to address that. They are never one-sided or simple. We are not perfect and we exist amongst different characteristics. This unveils naked, brutal honesty. To question our purpose, our intentions, our actions is to be human. That question, what shall I say is haunting. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I think it's wonderful you still possess that special doll and appreciate the sacrifice your parents made to gift it to you. Sometimes kids want so much in the way of toys and things. They're too young to understand what they really need, love and attention. So, you remember your doll smelling like chocolate? Something else you really liked? I like the final lines you wrote. "I can see all of my past in her eyes and I cherish every moment of it." A loving childhood is a powerful memory. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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So, this is a sweet-this-is the-new-and-improved-me-revenge story. Who doesn't fantasize about revisiting someone who has hurt or disappointed them at some point in the past? This is a look at me now tale. Reconnection does not always happen. Life gets in the way. Caroline is starting over with her life and she wants some attention. She seems to have become a stronger woman. This could be the start of a continuing story. What happens next? Cue dramatic music. The ending is a tease. Thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm still laughing! Of course this incident of airport security would happen when the character was running late and very preoccupied. Who does give the contents of their luggage a second thought? Packing is but one step of many in the travel process. What a clever and practical addiction cure created by a ten-year old. I for one, however, would not relish poking my hand into that coffee can. Just a suggestion: in a few places you wrote the word 'to' and it should be 'too'. As in "the humor in the situation is too much." As in "too much coffee." Oh, and it's a " voice says." Thanks for sharing.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is a tale of resilience and courage. You never gave up and accepted that you'd be paralyzed. You fought for your care and your voice was not silenced. Bravo! I cannot imagine your fear, your anxiety, your frustration. Of course you had questions! What a testimonial to love. Your family and friends plus your spouse never deserted you. They encouraged you and supported you. I am so happy for you that your efforts to become independent again paid off. Thanks for sharing your story.
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Review of My Campfire  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello! I'm impressed. You not only are familiar with this Johnny Cash classic, but you dared to spoof it. Now I'm singing this familiar song in my head. I have an ear worm. My parents were country fans and thus I was treated to this particular tune and many others on a daily basis. Thanks for the laugh(s)! This is amusing, but of course not funny if it's based upon an actual event. I believe Weird Al would be impressed with your parody. For the future I shall remember your particular/peculiar lyrics. I shall introduce this to my family this coming camp season as we sit 'round our own campfire. Thanks for sharing. Keep fanning the flames.
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Review of Mighty Oak  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello. I'm reviewing yout poem in a quest to discover and read works from fellow writers. I was drawn to your poem because I admire oak trees. The fifth stanza is my favourite. You speak some truth there. Yes, change is often subtle, but inevitable. It's true sadly, loved ones may disappear. I like the second to last stanza, too. Memories may be brittle like branches and they may be scattered. Lovely, poignant imagery. Thanks for sharing your insights in this poem. I enjoyed my visit to your Port.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello! I like the name of your folder, Crumbs of Cheese. Creative, cute. Your affection for Boo shines through in this piece. I must confess I never before considered a rat could have a personality and you've changed my perspective. It seems as if the two of you bonded and he'd play with you. I once lived with a male cat who chose me as his person and he too would nip or scratch anyone else who dared to touch him. I'm sorry you felt it necessary to give Boo up. Oh, the sacrifices we are forced to make are not always pleasant. Thanks for sharing this story!
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Review of Time Slips Away  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I'm answering a call to review anniversary writers here at WDC and it's a pleasure. Hello. You raise some serious questions in your poem. You have a contemplative nature. I cannot fault this poem's form. I like its flow. As the title states time does slip away. It cannot be stopped or even paused. It's relentless, isn't it? I'm sensing this could be a yearning to connect, to form a relationship. The idea of anger and war being waves creates intense visuals. They possess great power/force. the final line says it all. What can you do but be yourself. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of In the Night  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Hi! This title intrigued me and so I came for a peek at you story. This is the stuff of nightmares and more specifically a mother's nightmare. Mothers worry about losing their children and/or harm to them. Mothers also seem to have super-natural hearing to alert them to everything. That black bear is spooky, malevolent. The eyes seem to be eery and frightening. I enjoyed reading this story and it appears to be something you could develop further. It raises questions. What happens next? Cue the dramatic music. I noticed a few issues, words missing here and there. this time could hear needs a she could hear or Jade could hear. Describing the search of the bathroom needs a verb: "there was no other sign of life." It should be "the covers slightly moved." "The room started fading to black." These are a few fixes. Thanks for sharing this story!
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Review of The New Baby  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Well, this is indeed about a different birth. I've seen the emergence of butterflies, but never the birth of a caterpillar. It's beautiful, but not as harrowing as the birth of a child. Nature is a marvel. Life exists everywhere. Yes, I still view many insects as creepy crawlies. Thanks for sharing!
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