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Review of Winter Speech  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a sweet poem, it shows that you really care about her.
And that you are devoted to her no matter what.
I like that.
I love the honesty in this poem, and how you poured your heart out to her.
You're imagery is very nice as well.
I like the line "I'll follow like moths to your flame"
Interesting word choice.
I hope you made it to her that night.
Thank you for sharing this poem, it brightened my day.
Best of luck writing and have a nice birthday!



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Review of Stripes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ha, what an entertaining little read.
I love the humor in this, yet seriousness as well.
You have some real attention grabbing lines in here,
which keep the reader interested in reading it from beginning to end.
You also make your feeling very clear in this.
Now maybe I'll watch out for how I act around my boyfriends Mother.
I hope she doesn't feel the same way you do haha.
Thank you for sharing this cute piece, it scared me, but it made me laugh.
Best of luck writing.


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Review of When Love Dies  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the way this is set up,
it's a nice take on poetry.
The way you have the rhyme scheme set up is also interesting,
but it works well with it.
I loved the last stanza, very cute and gives love hope.
This is a poem I'm sure a lot of people will be able to connect with on some level.
As everyone has felt love, and lost love at some point.
I also like the fifth stanza, it's funny and adds a nice sense of humor to the poem.
I'm not sure how I felt about the last stanza not following the same rhyming pattern,
it took away from the flow,
but other then that it was a nice poem.
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing.



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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
What an entertaining article, I love the heavy does of sarcasm you can sense throughout it.
What's sad is girls probably do half these things already.
Non the less you did a good job keeping a steady tone through-out this.
Sometimes it seemed you were trying to hard at being sarcastic,
but that's not really a big deal, the article was still funny.
I hope your English teacher enjoyed it and gave you a good grade.
Anyway, thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Clouds  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem would make a good child's poem,
it has the sound of one.
It also makes me miss when I had time to look at the clouds and see what I could find in them.
Some of the rhyming was a little off, but barely noticeable.
The only thing that really stood out to me was the first stanza has an abab rhyme,
then the rest just have a b rhyme, not that it's bad it just threw me off a little.
Other then that though this was a great little poem, I like your word choice
and the animals you chose, create great images, it's such a simple poem.
I think kids would really enjoy hearing it.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.



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Review of Flying Lesson  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh what an interesting style to write a poem,
it's what drew me in to read it.
Very unique, which is something as a poet you always have to do,
be different and grab the readers attention.
Now to the poem, I like how you repeated the line
"She sits perched on the branch of life"
It really adds a nice emphasis to the poem,
But I found some of the lines sounded a little off,
that just might be me, and I am just a writer so feel free to ignore my comments.
Some of the lines end kind of blunt then start the next line,
for example, "Every once in a while she becomes captured by someone who wishes
To imprison her;"

It ends hanging there with the word wishes, maybe end it at captured. So it reads.
"Every once in a while she becomes captured,
by someone who wishes to imprison her"

Other then that its a very well rounded poem, having a story to it, that ends well.
Glad she learned to fly, that was cute.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.



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Review of Calling Out  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem,
and the rhyming keeps the same style throughout.
But I feel this poem is missing something,
I don't mean that in a negative way,
You write the poem in two different perspectives, the person your talking about then yours,
It kind of changes the mood of the poem, and the pace.
Maybe try to blend the two perspectives together so it can keep the same flow.
That's just my suggestion though, I'm just a writer like you.
But other then that, you get your emotions through clearly,
and strike an emotional cord with the reader.
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing.



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Review of To Bryan  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a touching piece.
I can't imagine the pain of losing a kid, blood related or not.
We all develop bonds over time until we eventually become apart of each others lives.
This poem really shows a lot of your emotion, and how you miss him so much,
but at the end you seem to have some sort of acceptance of it all.
I really just like how your put a part of your self in this poem,
it makes it very easy to see where you are coming from.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!



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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I use to live in Chicago,
I hated the traffic there it was awful.
I like this poem though
And I like how you used "dream city"
Very fitting, Chicago isn't always what it seems but no big cities are.
You have a nice use of imagery in this poem, showing what Chicago really is.
Nice rhyme and rhythm in this, all the rhymes sound pretty solid and not forced at all.
It seems like you have a great dislike for Chicago, or at least what it stands for.
Anyway this was a nice poem, thank you for sharing it
and best of luck writing.


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Review of Tears  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Nice, short little poem.
This poem is good, but it leaves the reader wondering,
what are you crying about? Why are you scared?
These are just my suggestions, you can ignore them if you'd like I'm just a writer like you.
I feel if you expanded on this it would be better, give the reader something to connect with more.
Right now it's has some level of personal connection, but it's very vague.
It has a nice flow though, pretty solid through out.
I noticed in the line "But i'm still scared" The I in I'm is not capitalized.
Also in the line "Pouring out my eyes"
I feel this line might sound more complete if you added "of" so "pouring out of my eyes"

Anyway again this was a pretty nice poem and with some work would be great.



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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello there and welcome to the WDC, you have great taste in music, and your from PA too, way for horrible weather.
Anyway to your story.

I liked it, I enjoy how you have already started to develop your main character, her stubborn sarcastic characteristics are amusing, yet she also has sensitive elements to her, making for a very well-rounded character.

You also had nice dialogue interaction, giving some of the minor characters a voice and insight to who they are and where the story is going.

I think on your last line you forgot to put the first ".
In case that didn't make sense. I'll show you,

Never.” is what you have when I believe it should be "Never.”

Other then that I think this story has great potential.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Open ears  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This has nice rhythm, the flow was pretty solid.
And it was an easy read. The rhyming was also very good,
it didn't sound forced, and it fit very well with the content.
This poem is also very true, a lot of people shut out what they don't want to hear,
but open their ears to the things that perk their interest.
If they listened to everything they might find out things that they aren't prepared to hear.
Anyway nice poem,
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Hell bound  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey there,

I have mixed feelings about this poem, it has it's good qualities.
Like it keeps you interested from beginning to end,
but then I find some of the lines sound stiff.
Like.
"Even though I try
But I still lie"

Maybe expand on that add some details, to me it just sounds kind of left hanging.
This is just my opinion though, I am just a writer like you.

"Dont let sin take its toll"
This should be Don't.

"Thats when know your hell bound"
I believe you meant That's and You're.

With a few tweaks this poem could be great.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.



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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a nice poem,
A lot of vivid imagery used throughout it, it gives the reader a nice insight to the poem.
I feel like this poem would benefit from punctuation. Such as commas or periods.
I might make the statements said more direct and leave more of an impact.
That is just my opinion though.

I like the line
"Emotions are as useless as Cars without gasoline"

I don't think that cars needs to be capitalized though. as your talking about general cars not a specific one.

Also in the line "I wish you all could plainy see"
I think you meant "plainly".

Other then that this was a nice poem that serves a purpose.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.
Very creative word play.



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Review of Piano  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This has a nice rhythm to it.
It made it enjoyable to read.
I like how you break up some of the words
it adds an interesting and unique element to it .
It seems like you have very deep passion for the piano
and that shows in this piece.
I personally am horribly music inclined, so it's nice to see some people that have a passion for it.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of A Merry Rant  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I had to take that class last semester.
It was my own personal nightmare and I enjoy technology.
I find it horrible that the professor didn't slow down to help when clearly kids are lost.
You do a nice way phrasing the pain of the class.
And gave me a few good laughs when reading this.
Well I hope your Mondays and Fridays get better
or at least more tolerable with time.
Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice rhyming in this,
not forced and sounds good throughout the poem.
I like your word choice, it hits with your senses, how things sound and taste.
Very nice.
Also very relateable, I think a lot of people share these feelings in one way or another.
We all crave thing we can't have.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Hour Glass  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Good use of imagery in this.
I'm not sure about the format, I feel that all the...... take away from the poem
and distract the reader, making the piece difficult to follow.
I might break it up to make it easier to read, but that's just my opinion
I am just a writer like you.

Other then that the style is nice, and it is a nicely written piece.
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing.


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Review of The Potter's Hand  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is written in such a simple and graceful way, it makes it captivating to the reader.
The concept is an interesting one, and you put a good story to it, which makes it a great one.
This is a kind of slow to warm piece, it starts out slow, but the more you read the more you get into it.
The imagery in this is extremely good, and really helps build a picture and connection between the potter and clay.
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing.


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Review of Nothing Personal  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I love the concept of death,
it is always interesting to read others interpretations on it.
This was a really nice short little piece.
The fact that you don't really give the main character a name, makes it more easily relateable
You also made great use of the prompt for this,
it would be interesting to see where this could go if you ever decided to expand on it.
It has a lot of potential,
Thank you for sharing it and best of luck writing.


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Review of My Monopoly Hat  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a really amazing poem,
I love the rhyming it fits so perfectly.
And I love the story that is told,
you describe the game of monopoly so well,
and the ending was very cute.
I didn't think this was going to be a romantic poem of sorts
but I was glad cause I'm a sucker for cute endings.

Again this is a very nice poem, with a cute story and message to it.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a really nice poem,
it has many different elements to it,
I like the idea for this "A wave of hello"
So simple but holds so much more meaning to it.
The tone stays the same throughout the poem,
even when you switch from an optimistic view to pessimistic
it all went together very well.
Everyone can relate to this poem as well,
as we have all waved and said hello to someone
whether it be someone we know or a complete stranger.
Anyway thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing!


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this
I like the repetition of the words,
it makes it more emotional and much more memorable,
The premise for this is good as well, losing and finding love,
we've all experience it in someway, which makes this poem easy for people to connect to.
The way you worded things is very unique and I like that
You don't see to many poems written like this.
It has a good flow, and nice word play as well.
I like who every stanza ends with the same last two lines, it again makes it more emotional and adds depth to the poem,
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing.



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Review of Today  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like how you use embers as a message of hope.
And how we should live for the moment,
and that tomorrow is just another day away.
It's a very unique look on life and the good and bad of everyday.
The whole poem has a feeling of hope and overcoming to it,
like how you wrote about it being dark but eventually we'll see.
Very nice.
You have nice imagery allowing the reader to visualize the light.

Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Pianist to paper  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting poem,
The concept is one I've never read before.
But I liked it, I'm a huge piano enthusiast.
That's what drew me into reading this.
The flow is nice, I feel it gets a little choppy near the end.
Like it just changes pace in the last stanza, like it belongs to a whole different poem almost,
that's just my opinion though.
Other then that it was a very enjoyable poem with a unique concept
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.



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