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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This has such a dark tone to it, yet the words are very inspiring,
you do well at phrasing things, creating lovely imagery.
I loved the last stanza it was very intriguing and well worded.
You do a good job at holding the readers interest.
I'd watch your capitalization of I's unless you did that on purpose, if so ignore my comment.
Other then that as I stated before it is a really emotional poem
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of A Promise  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This might be just a simple poem,
but it also is much more then that.
I really like it,
I loved the last sentence. "A promise from, an inner voice."
That's a really wonderful line.

I like how it flows its really catchy and a nice fast read
that leaves an impact on the reader.
I'm not to sure about the format though,
It was hard for me to follow at first,
then I just re-read it as all separate sentences which made it easier for me to follow,
either way it was really catchy and a nice read.
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!


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Review of Complete Serenity  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Lots of imagery here.
It really helps make this poem.
I loved the line
"As the tide rolls in and out again to sea, a wave of bliss envelopes me"
Very creative.
You really show how the ocean makes you feel and how much you love it.
The ocean is probably one of the best places to go to rediscover yourself,
it's so tranquil there and almost perfect.
I love the tone of this, it really kept me interested in reading it.
I can almost picture the ocean too as I read this.
Makes me wish it was warm enough to go down there.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Loss  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You've done an amazing amount of reviews.
So I thought I'd return the favor you have done for so many with a review of one of your pieces.

This poem starts out rather sad, going into the subject of loss,
and how you lost someone due to different paths chosen,
but then in the end you see that you will always have a bond.

Its a good poem, the flow is nice and the rhyming isn't to forced.
I like the theme for it, gives hope that maybe friends we've lost we'll be able to find again one day.

Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing!!



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Review of Ink Bleeder  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the premise or this, it is a really good concept.
Some of your lines are really well-written and catchy like the last three,
but then I find some of them to be kind of stiff, and don't really flow well with the way you have it written.
These are just my opinions though you don't have to listen to them I'm just a writer like you.
I just find some of the lines like.
Words that flow onto
Black and white.

It kind of just stops with onto and takes me out of the poem and back to reality.
I'd combine them into one line maybe. Either way. It's a decent poem with a lot of potential to be great.

Thank you or sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You did an amazing job with this, your encouraging, and thoughtful.
It's easy for every writer to relate to, and you open up a passage for up and coming writers.
I love the part at the end about the dreamer.
Because it is very true, and I don't think a lot of people realize that.
I think you have a talent for writing, and that you will go far not only on this site, but with you're who career.

Thank you for sharing, and best of luck writing.


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Review of Little Questions  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really like the idea of this,
the questions are well composed and make the reader think,
and whats great is everyone's answer to the questions or thoughts about it are different,
which creates a piece that can relate to a wide variety of people with different thoughts on the questions.
You really have a knack for making people think in an abstract way, its a true talent.
You've managed to affect people with only a few short questions.

My only question is, is there a common theme between the questions,
or where you just trying to draw a reaction out of people and get them to think?
Either way it was a lovely piece.

Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.



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Review of Interactive Art  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Oh interesting story,
very suspenseful,
I love the ending, it didn't expect it, but that's what I love endings that aren't very predictable.
You do a good job at creating suspense it flowed very naturally and made the story interesting.
I hope you do well in the contest, thank for sharing this.
best of luck writing and welcome to the community.




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Review of Sun shadows  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is interesting, I've never really read anything like it.
It's kind of like your own twist of a stream of consciousness
I liked your description of what it's like behind "closed" lids
It was very detailed and wonderfully written.
You do a good job at putting words together to create an overall feeling.
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing!




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Review of No Self  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an interesting poem,
it really gets the reader to think about whats real and whats not.
In such a short piece, you created a deep poem bound to get people to think.
It is a little up to interepertation, but every poem can be seen in a number of different ways.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
What a nice short little story.
It had a great plot with good character development and character interactions.
I loved the ending, never saw that coming, but thats what ever good story needs to build supsense to a suprise ending like that.
I wold recommend seperating your paragraphs though, or spacing them out a bit, just to make it easy to read.
Other then that great story, and thank you for sharing it.


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Review of Who Will I Be?  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is short, simple, and wonderful.
I like your word play, it makes the poem very enjoyable.
You have quiet a talent for how words flow, it doesn't sound forced and flows perfectly.
I like how everyone can relate to this poem, you did a good job at capturing a wide range of emotions
that everyone can share and agree with.
It's a very powerful poem.
Thank you for sharing it!


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Review of Losing Christmas  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Ha, this is a great little story.
I think you did a great job at capturing the range of emotions you were looking for.
And you added humor made this story all the more believable.
I think all families experience a holiday meal like this at least once.

You did a good job telling it from the perspective of the Dr.
I feel like this story benefited from the third party outlook on the situation.

I'm guessing you're from out of the states. As you used apologise, interesting how words very country to country.

Anyway I think you had a really nice pace at developing the characters, you gave them each flaws, which is important in a story, don't want them to be too perfect, that wouldn't make for a good story.

You also did a nice job setting the scenes, and switching from the present to the past, I didn't find it hard to follow at all.

Again I enjoyed this story overall, I hope you did well in the contest.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Broken  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh I like this, it has some elements of anger with sadness.
It's a great blend of emotions.
I must say I love the last stanza.
Anything with relevance to the Wizard of Oz grabs my attention.
You have solid imagery here, it create a picture for every line.
I like your similes too, "there's a pit in her stomach, as deep as the sea"
very poetic line. I love it.
It's a very tragic but amazing piece,
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing!



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Review of Lost in the Hills  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting story,
you can't help but feel sadness towards the main character.
You do a good job at expressing the emotion of the main character in this,
for such a short piece it hits on all the key elements of a good plot.
You're imagery is right on, and so is the pace at which the story is told.
Very nice little tale,
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!


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Review of Noble  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I saw your post on the Noticing newbies

Welcome to WDC.

I hope you find it pleasant here, I surely love it.

Now to your story.

I really enjoyed this story actually,
I'm a huge sucker for anything that has to do with supernatural elements though,
but this one had me hooked from the first passage to the end.
I love the mystery around it too, the whole school and what not.
You do a good job at giving key details, and setting the scene.
I also like how you had some added humor in there,
it kept the story light yet it still holds its mysterious elements.

You give the one character some details, Alvie, but not to much,
which is nice, it makes the reader want to keep reading to find out more about him
and what goes on behind the gates.

Just watch out though, cause you do have some cliche story lines in it, but if you can manage to make it your own
this story is going to be really great.

I'll be sure to keep reading this as you keep posting, you have me hooked =)

Thanks for sharing!


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow I love this, this is such a unique story,
you did a really good job developing this story, it is written with amazing grace
and style, that just captivating the reader from beginning to end.
This idea is just well executed, and it teaches you a lesson as well
it's not just another feel good story, but one that teaches you that your worth something,
well done.

You make your characters really relateable too, and they are all well-rounded and realistic.

Thank you for sharing this story.
It's one I will be sure to remember in the future.
Good luck writing.


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a really deep poem,
it has so many elements to it,
so much emotion, I really got lost in reading this,
it has a nice story to it, it reads easy
and leaves an impression on the reader.
The poem even had me smiling at points,
it was light humored and deep at the same time.

I also love the title, very creative,
thank you for sharing this,
and best of luck writing!


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Review of Victory March  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I love writers cramp, cause some people create some of the best short stories.
Like this one, I really enjoyed reading it,
it had a nice light sense of humor with it
and it was also very different, I like this style,
usually people do the same thing over and over again
but you did something different very unique and it works well


Thank you for sharing this lovely little story and best of luck writing in the future!



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Review of La' Guillotine  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh this is a great poem.
I love how it tells a story and it's a great story at that.
Very interesting, and much different then anything I've ever read.
It's very sad though, but that just makes it easy for people to connect to
there is so much emotion in this poem.
You did a great job at recreating history here.
Again nicely done
and thank you for sharing this!

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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
When I first saw this I didn't know what to make of it,
but then I actually read it, and it was hard to read at first,
cause of the formatting and all, but then I re-read it again, and again.
And I started to form my on view of what it means,
which is nice about it it can be interpreted in many different ways
but only the writer knows the true meaning of it.
This is very creative and something different, which is nice for a change.
Thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ah short sweet and straight to the point,
It's very unique poem and a nice way to say that you love someone
and that they will always be yours.
Very interesting wording, but catchy.
It has a nice vibe to it and was enjoyable to read.
Anyway good job with this poem and nice rhyming.
Thanks for sharing and good luck with future writing.


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Review of Revenge  
Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this, your flow is nice not to choppy.
Some of the lines are really well said
I liked the whole, eye for an eye, life for a life, and blood against blood stanza.
That was really well put.
You convey your emotions toward this really well.
You acknowledge that you might forgive, but you'll never forget.
Again nice little piece.
Thank you for sharing it and best of luck writing.


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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem just confirms my fears of getting old.
I know it's a silly fear to have,but I'll take on snakes and spiders,
before getting old and leaving all the youthful things I love behind.
That sounds horrible haha, anyway to the poem.

I like it for you voice the yearning of youth in a simplistic way that is easy for the reader to understand.
It's easy to follow and leaves an impression on the reader.
I enjoyed this poem, I hope you do well with the contest.
Thank you for sharing and good luck writing.



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Review by NayNizzy.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Awh this is cute,
I like how the guy is so against a new love,
but then it turns out to be a puppy.
It's well-written, has a problem and a solution
which you captured nicely for such a short piece.
I like the whole gypsy idea too, I've always wanted to get my fortune read
but didn't want to shell out the money.
Anyway, thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing.

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