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Review of Take Us to Orange  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Hooves! Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

First impression
What a beautiful and pessimistic poem. The images you painted were extraordinary and unique.

The form
Technically speaking, the lack of punctuation allowed me to read at a pace personalized to me. I don't mind when the author guides me with punctuation, but without those little marks the presentation appears cleaner. No punctuation enhances the flow of the words.

The poetry form itself sounded challenging enough. No need for me to count the syllables. I liked the way you introduced the poem, making no apologies if somewhere along the way, a line popped up without the precise syllable count.

Hauling in the reader
The first line set the theme, creating a feeling of uncertainty. A sense of foreboding.

Delving deeper
As the poem progressed, I fell deeper into your dark well of negativity and was very much at home there. The dark and dismal words echoed my own thoughts. Where all this will end remains unknown. Surely, our society will be changed forever. We all have concerns, caught in the whirlwind of chaos.

Emotional reaction
No point in looking back. It is what it is, and we'll all have to adapt. Hope is a strong emotion, and yes, merely the thought of hoping is frighting. Your words spoke to me; I've read this several times, each read broadened the range of my reaction. Sometimes I nodded my head, others I cringed, aware of the truth unfolding.

My thoughts
Which is better? Hope or nope? I tend to go from point zero to ten-thousand when speculating. Nothing in between. I'm a drama queen in my mixed up mind. I merely say the worst is awful x 1000, but those who know me understand it's just my way of coping. I back down from the dire predictions after proclaiming my negativity. I don't know. Maybe it makes situations more bearable when the conclusion is exaggerated. A time to laugh in a time of fear?

Continued speculation
Humans need to be touched. In the fourth stanza, I carried the thought one step further. Humans need to be touched, even beyond childhood. It's simply too weird to keep a distance from my family. I suspect we'll see extreme emotional ramifications from this restriction, necessary as it may be.

Strength in words
The second sentence in the same sentence had the word 'bloody' chance. I think that's a British 'swear' word, and it always shocks me, which worked to great effect. Although I was already entangled in your web, that word startled me. It's a strong and emphatic word. No prisoners taken.

*Questionb*
I did have one question. The first line sounds like present tense, 'seems like' and the second sentence sounds like past tense, stolen and changed. It's possible I read it wrong.

*Heart*
The best I saved for last. The title made me think of America's state of response. Next from orange would be red. I admired the way you used the a color to paint a different image than one splashed on canvas. Fall was personified. I've never heard anyone write the word sing in relation to falling leaves.

Evocative write. You caught me unaware and left a lingering impression. Beautiful pessimism that resounds in me.


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Review of Painter of Dreams  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Zelphyr. Nixie here.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM
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Awesome title. I sure wish the brief description hadn't given away the meaning of the story.

Although the plot and conclusion were determined from the beginning,except for the final revelation, Maya fascinated me. I continued reading, wondering what had happened to her and how she came to such a tragic fate. Where was she from? How did she end up as a science experiment?

The puzzle of Maya chugged along at a steady pace. I was relieved when the new psychiatrist at least inspired a limited response. He was the only person in her life who saw her as a human being, not an object. That endeared me to him.

But neither character gave me anything to relate to. I couldn't engage with Reil or Maya, other than in an abstract way.

I liked the supernatural theme, especially as expressed in the sentence below. The word [sector] initially triggered that response. I was thinking a different dimension. On the second read, it was clear the setting was of the scientific research center. Correct?

"You can see for yourself that the dimensions of this sector would not accommodate this garden.

The glaring mystery wasn't Maya and the way her paintings come to life. I'm comfortable with that theme and enjoy writing similar stories.

*Heart*
My favorite sentence.
The word was so sudden and hard that, for a moment, Reil wondered if perhaps he’d simply heard a rock fall.

What a shock when I read the last two paragraphs. Finally, a few of the puzzle pieces came together. Then the story threw me off a balcony, where I'd been reasonably sure what would happen.

As I mentioned from the beginning, I knew Maya would be painting someone's death. As I read, since she hated everyone, I wondered if she would paint their deaths. The story reminds me a bit of an episode from the 10th Dr. Who.

Maya found a way to gain freedom. I bet she was relieved.

Was the description of her eyes as cloudy meant to show her dying? Sort of an oxymoron. She could only see with clouded eyes. Hmm. Something for me to ponder after the review is concluded.

Most likely, I stumbled in a few places. I read carefully, as this kind of read requires. It's not a story to be rushed through. I'm frustrated when any reviews are received where it's glaringly obvious the reader skimmed the page. Hopefully, I avoided that.

Thanks for the read. I enjoyed the entire experience.

~Nixie *Smile*



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Review of Noah's Ark  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Shannon. Nixie here.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM
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Gorgeous cover art.

Yikes! What a dangerous read that crept up to me with no warning. The title drew my curiosity, the plot tore apart my heart.

The beginning made me both comforted and then frightened. That last sentence in the first paragraph destroyed my mind while propelling it further. I had to find out what happened to Mary and her child.

Words hold readers transfixed. I was a victim caught between Oh, I can't keep reading this and Oh, but I can't stop. I continued reading. Just now, I flipped back to your portfolio, positive you were a published author. If not, you should be.

I hated (related to) the burial scene of Noah's little body. No, coffins shouldn't be that small. And they should't be occupied by someone's big sister, taken too early in life. I threw a rose on her coffin so it could die, just like her. We buried her yesterday, we buried her in 1983. Noah's mom is caught up in that warped window of memories. At this point, after all these years, I smile, rather than cry when my sister comes to mind. She was the talented one. The true author.

Even though she was in her 30's, my mom's face never lost that haunted look. For ten years, she wouldn't even say her name, nor was anyone in her presence allowed.

I meant to mention in the beginning how the tree drew me in. Call me weird, but for me, they're wise and magical. I think of all the hundreds of years rooted to one place. What if they absorb knowledge? Every time I walk, each tree I come across is caressed until their peace and unity become mine.

Good grief. I've turned a bright anniversary review into a sea of tears. I marveled at all your descriptions. The characters moved through the plot. This word about the father brought me up short. 'migrated' Fascinating word choice.

My dad died in 2014. I find no comfort in visiting graves. But two of my brothers went a few days after. Similar to Noah's Ark, they saw a silver balloon float gracefully straight up from my dad's grave into the sky.

This couldn't have been an easy story to write, having to tap into emotions that are real for me.

Thanks for the fantastic, but heartbreaking read.



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Review of ZANAMON  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Angus!

HAPPY 9th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM
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Unbelievable and unique opening paragraph. No one's ever written that before!

You have a distinct talent for at least two (opposing) genres. Mostly when I visit, my determination to read a horror story carries me through the scary parts. I'm careful though. My brain's full of its own terrifying thoughts. Should I laugh or cry?

On this fantastic day, your 9th anniversary day, I'm here laughing. The plot built slowly like Livingston's idiot ideas that carried him to success. The tongue in cheek parts had me shaking my head. It seems, according to what his family had been eating, he was already at the top of his game.

The upside down humor continued throughout. His unfair treatment of workers and family evaded him. A selfish man, at best.

His creations? Boxes and bottled water from the tap? I can't decide which is worse. His nonsensical success or the intellect of the people falling for his scam.

And that was another weird part. Livingston didn't seem at all concerned, or had a guilty conscious. He believed in his products.

Life is perception. Livingston had only one vision of himself. Rising up. Excellent job showing both his mental state (the other buildings are falling) and the actuality. You couldn't resist adding the Trump Tower to the story, could you? *Laugh*

We harp on each other for using the verb [was]. Despite the entertainment, every time that verb appeared I winced. However, in this write that verb didn't detract from the story. Action carried the reader forward.

I zeroed in on the many excellent word choices. Cool going.

Since this is an anniversary review, no editing points shall be mentioned. *Heartv* It's pointless anyhow because the story didn't overly suffer from an unspoken rule here or there.

I can't see your name anywhere, or stop the thought when I look at review pages. 4000+ reviews. You'd best stay right here and keep inspiring the community and entertaining us. Today, you can wear a *Crown*.

~Nixie


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Review of Hat trick  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! Nixie here. I found your flash via random review. What a challenging contest.


*Baretree3*
The Hook
I liked this read! It had a catchy first sentence. Remember using contractions lessens word count and creates shorter, punchier sentences.

Always shorten sentences for dialogue. No one speaks like this.

“This is unlike any other room in the library,” Jess exclaimed.

Example: "Weird room," Jeff said.

Passive verbs (was) (were) should be avoided. Show vs. tell. that's what we aim for. So, why were they drawn to it? be more specific. Show the fascination. *Wink*

I can't resist reading flash. So much has to be included in flash. All aspects of a short story in 300 words. It teaches writers to choose words carefully and remember less is better. Let the reader be drawn into the vision.

A library comes easily to mind.
Consider adding more.
Were the lights dim? or not working? Did they bring flashlights? Brush aside cobwebs? Hear something skittering? Shortening dialogue and using contractions gives the writer room to show more.

*Baretree3*
Thoughts

"A peculiar looking hat that looked out of place. It was the shape of a palm, but with six fingers. I counted."

This was the only sentence that seemed out of place. If your character is far away, as indicated in the sentence above this one, how could he discern the details?

“J-Jess, I’m not so sure…” I said weakly."

Ah! no words ending in (ly) allowed. *Laugh* But seriously. Adverbs are an indication of a weak verb. And definitely do not use them as sentence tags. Since the character hesitated, one possible alternative would be [I stuttered]

“Jess?” I was terrified."

Imagine being terrified. What would your actions be? Trembling hands, sweat on the brow...

I began searching the room for something to help him. And that’s when I saw it.

Stronger sentence. Fiction is immediate. Nothing begins...
I searched the room for something to help him. (him) is unnecessary. We know who he's searching for.

*Baretree3*
Emotions evoked
I was thinking Please don't pick up the hat! Jess. Of course, the character has to do the wrong thing to create the tension and conflict.

This was a hopeful sentence. And also led to scarier mind sets.

"For a moment, nothing happened."

I thought, just for a sec, maybe nothing would happen. *Rolleyes* See? You drew me into your story.


*Baretree3*
A closed book=lasting impression
My suggestion would be to learn (if the review helped) and move onto another write.

The conclusion was inevitable, but still a good read. The last line made me shudder. *Checkg*

A decent write for a newbie. (no offense intended) We all start somewhere.

*Idea*
I only offer advice if the story has potential.

*Heart*
I still hold dear a member who helped me in the beginning. She's no longer here, but I'm forever indebted to her.


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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Odessa. Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

I really liked the repetition of the reference to walking alone. It drove home the point and wrapped up the story of the narrator satisfactorily. At least she/he would try to help. (I didn't see the narrator's name mentioned anywhere.)

If you work on the dialogue, Suri can mention the narrator's name, which would make the story more personal.

The way the story began and the progression to the next paragraph confused me. Were they children when Suri said "I am to marry." Is that why the narrator didn't understand the implications? Seems to me most are familiar with this situation.

I've never watched the TV series you mentioned, but because it was in the story, I wondered if this was non-fiction.

All the salient, cultural points were covered. Suri's fear was real and that came across as authentic. Excellent job showing her in the Burka with downcast eyes. How sad.

This little bit had me puzzling over the timeline.

What I got were excuses.

I ran into Suri last week in the supermarket.

How did the narrator hear excuses before she saw Suri? What were the excuses? Or had the narrator seen Suri before? A plot misstep? Or am I reading this incorrectly?

Each new line of dialogue from a different character requires a paragraph break. I can think of one way to solve the mystery of the timeline. If Suri's statement was shown in italics, the reader would deduce (most likely) this was heard when both girls were children. Either way, a paragraph break is required after "I am to marry." statement.

More questions. Sorry. Who arranged the marriage and when? How old was Suki? Still a child?

In the beginning, the narrator understood the basics of the marriage. But if the narrator only learned the exact nature of the arrangement by watching TV, that leaves a non-watcher like me in the dark. (Except I know from my son's tours in Iraq what was happening.) I figured the narrator would, as well. If the two girls were best friends, why wouldn't the narrator understand all the implications before the marriage? I'm confused.

The preponderance of the word [was] dragged down the pace and created the need for unnecessary words. Remember, less is more in fiction. The reader's looking for a way to connect.

Although the overuse of the passive verb continued throughout, the story picked up some momentum after the narrator received Suki's cry for help. Since this arrangement is cultural, the narrator's plan to free her friend would never succeed.

Suki's character and her actions broke my heart. Excellent description of her appearance in the supermarket.

What happened to those bright almond eyes I had known all these years.

Did you mean almond-shaped eyes? The way it's written sounds as if her eyes were almond in color. And from the description of her eyes, it sounded like Suki was from the Middle East and would know what an arranged marriage meant.

I don't ask questions about stories that confuse me, unless I see potential behind the words. A cultural clash is a fantastic obstacle for characters to overcome.

Give yourself kudos and a pat on the back for entering this challenging contest. You've more confidence than me!


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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Snow! Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

*Checkg*
First off, what a wonderful idea for setting up a blog. Collections and the like can be overlooked, and get cumbersome.

*Reading*
I've been thinking ever since I read this how it could possibly be reviewed. Then I read the prompt and it all made sense. The ride was a little bumpy, mostly because of me. Symmetry and rhyming. That's what's captures my attention.

*Idea*
So, I focused on the content, which was my first impression. Trying to go deeper and ferret out more than my feelings ended up a fruitless and unnecessary journey. Do most ignore that little voice in their head, or brush aside what first comes to mind?

*Pantsr*
Every facet of clothing appeared here. From shoes, to pants or skirts, from fashion conscious to relaxed and enjoyable. You're comfortable with where you are right now.

My problem with being at home, especially with being a Covid Captive, is my tendency to slump and forget proper posture. That habit I am sorry to have lost.

*Woman*
My mom raised me to dress up all the time. Heels and dresses. That was me. In school, we weren't even allowed to wear pants until the 8th grade. Funny, how stories or poems speak to the individual reader.

*Sneaker1*
I'm on the borderline. Around the house, it's whatever goes. That must be true of everyone. But I'm still hard-wired to skirts and dresses. No more 3 or 4 inch heels, though. *Heel* Mostly, I pair my attire with low-heeled sandals or sneakers in the summer.

Since I live in Florida *Sun* where the norm is sandals and shorts, or something super-sloppy, I draw unwanted attention. Like you, I can't change who I am at this point in my life. In a few years, though.

*Snow4*
In the winter, I cling to my high-heeled boots.

*Angry*
How true about men looking for older women with insurance! Years ago, someone warned me and suggested I stay aware.

*Clock*
A long time ago, I found a 2nd-hand store where rich, super-rich women traded in their clothes after wearing them once. I was the best dressed woman at work. I miss that opportunity.

*Heartv*
My favorite part was the 4th stanza, and I bet you know why. Those WdC clothes are mighty comfy. Hoodies never appealed to me, but I have the shirts. A few times, I've sent one of my grandson's home in a WdC shirt, but now I can't remember why. *Headbang* They looked so darn cute.

*Thinker*
Look what you dragged out of me! Sometimes I worry that the best is in the past. I hope patched up memories stay sentimental, not forefront in my mind.


Some writes bring out these memories and make it easy for me to relate. I also enjoy the opportunity to 'chat with the author' as if we were sitting down together enjoying some alcohol coffee or tea. *Laugh*

In the end, here I am, smiling. *Bigsmile*

~Nixie




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Review of Treasured  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

Aw, Mastiff. You caught me in a solemn mood, which ended up being the perfect state of mind for reading your work. Due to the title and mention of a particular contest, the first three lines gave the impression a love poem was blossoming.

Not so, as revealed in the fourth line. The message sinks in slowly, as the lines build, carrying sympathy and empathy. You tackled a much-talked about subject (maybe the only thing on peoples' minds) and made it your own.

In my mind, I hold the remembrance of a daughter visit today, and the other daughter yesterday. Practicing and suffering that blasted six feet away rule. Not being able to touch another isn't conducive to good mental health. Humans need contact. I guess we're together in our solitude, each struggling in their own way.

The punctuation throughout seemed excessive, although I understand you wanted to control how the poem flows. Just sayin'.

I liked how the lines slowly added a deepening awareness of what's to come. At first, a whiff of whimsy, maybe a question, but by the fourth line, the seriousness settled in. The emotions captured here are surely ones we all feel. Time passes as is its way, at its own pace.

Covid changed the world. The last line slams the door on the topic. To think of distance as an awful thing is exactly right, but oh-so-very-wrong, under the circumstances.

Nicely penned!

~Nixie


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Review of The price  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Bluejay. Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

I really liked the premise of this story. The execution of the plot confused me. Backstory rarely works, as it interrupts the flow of events. I understand why you wrote it this way, but it might be a good idea to begin the story with the backstory, and then progress to the conclusion, which, presently, is at the beginning.

Many instances of passive verbs and run-on sentences made this difficult to understand or connect with. I liked Ronan as a character. A nice guy with a mission, helping others on the way to the wizard.

Ronan didn't progress as a character. His challenge (to see the wizard and get back home) was downplayed by repetition. He had no difficulties along the way. His demeanor and mannerisms stayed the same. Even after everyone forgetting him, he wasn't that upset. He picked up a solitary life and began again. For example

He would bear the price because it was worth it, but his life would never be the same.

*Wand*

The wizard came across as expected. Wise and odd. Same as Ronan, I would have done the same. Again, I wish the story had started with the beginning.

including Jenna's parents. When he saw Jenna,
Did I miss something? I thought her name was Jendra.

Ronan paid a steep price, but in the conclusion Jendra appeared, signalling a chance for a new beginning. I wonder if she recognized him.

I can't edit this for you, demonstrating passive writing vs. active. I think it's a skill picked up over time.

If this were my story, I'd work it over. It's an interesting story, unfortunately bogged down by passivity and run-on sentences.

The conclusion came across as uplifting and encouraging.


~Nixie

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Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tinker. Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for
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#2208028 by Annette


I enjoyed reading your inspirational entry. Years ago, I developed of habit of at least doing one thing per day. And sometimes, it only involved making my bed.

How kind of you to offer some quotations and books that have helped you over the years. I wonder what you found when you opened your journal. I had one for years, but later on, it was only depressing so I destroyed it.

Your tone carries both determination and the malaise you're experiencing. Mostly, I found this sad, but the paper clip psychological prompt struck me. How simple, yet complex.

At one time, my life was full of 'objects'. I read a book that suggested putting everything you didn't use into large plastic boxes and stacking them in a garage or basement. If six months passed without the need to open them, it meant it was time to let go of them. I made a few hundred bucks at my garage sales. lol.

I totally understand this feeling you speak of. Some days, I wonder why doing anything is worth it. Other days, I move furniture, or anything around to change the energy flow where I live. Even one small item usually leads to another. And the humble paperclip spurred you on.

Your words were genuine, and it's obvious you gave thought before penning this. The words seemed to plod along, not because of the way you write, rather as the words created the experience of slowness. Like snow melting in March.

I'm both angry and in agreement with asking people to focus on the positive during this pandemic. That's all fine, except some days I want to be unproductive. On those days, I resent being asked to express happiness.

But, as you have shown, it takes little to change thought patterns, encouraged by One Small Step Can Change your Life. You've done this, and shared it with the community. I spend time learning exactly (as much as we can understand) how our brains work. But that's a complicated topic that isn't appropriate for this review.

Thought-provoking write. *Checkg*








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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "March 3, 2020" 
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Riding Hood. Nixie here, again. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020"  I'm always finding you when my entry is ready. Hope you're not worn out by my comments.

Very sensual and precious.

I can smell the bread and taste the butter and honey.

The last stanza's my favorite. Something about the heat from the sill feels cozy and warm. The last two lines caught my heart, as I imagined, through your tender words, this miraculous sight.

Excellent word choices: fragile/courageous. They create the moment of the tendril's first breath. Nicely done~!

I wonder if the experience of eating of the bread is the thing that's better than the storytellers? What am I missing?

Are the no-spaces between some words intentional? (first stanza, second line) (second stanza, last line)

Thanks for the read. *Smile*


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Review of Heavy and Lite  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi T.L. Nixie, here.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM
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I often think of how much money Americans send to other countries for assistance, when we have so many starving in our own country. Yes, we have organizations and people that help, but it's not enough for 16 million hungering souls.

Based on the statistics, your poem housed in the folder 'lighter moods and comedy' didn't seem like the right place for it.

But it's a fun read with lines flowing one to the other, all with appropriate and clever rhymes. I've eaten snake, but an eel? Ick. Cats? double ick. *Laugh*

In the last few stanzas, we're forced to look in the mirror and see how our food consumption affects the body. Some people, though, are naturally thin.

With all the words swallowed whole, the reader finds both comedy and some introspection. Excellent write.




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Review of Mountains  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sun Smiles. Nixie here.

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I chose to read this because going north on NYS highway 81 brings me around a curve where I first see the mountains. Their purple majesty makes me cry. A glorious sight. Expectations are dangerous. I expected a poem that brought these feelings upon me. And that's not what happened here. I had to find another approach.

Form poetry is difficult and admirable when written. I don't study the qualifications that adhere to Cinquain. I rely on my feelings to guide me. Since I wasn't moved, I focused on the specific words so carefully chosen. I never thought of mountain heads. I paused and pondered. And then I smiled.

The mountains would be pleased by the words. As for me, images of hiking and sights come to mind. Here you offered the perspective of the mountain itself. Exploring. Fantastic thought!

I had to find the definition for the word [ gigantesque]. *Thumbsup*

Except, from my understanding the word relates to giant. So huge is redundant.

2010 sounds so close to 2020 when really it's not. Work going back this far often indicates the author moved forward from this point. I wouldn't edit any work penned so long ago. But I wanted to leave my thoughts here, because the mountains deserve both your effort to form them in a specific style, and the expressions of my wild feelings.

Good job making me sit here and puzzle this through. *Star*





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No way was I skipping over this write, despite it being labeled as poetry. Nothing wrong with poetry, it usually doesn't speak to me.

This piece is more like prose. Why did the story worm its way into my brain and insist on being read? The title, but not the brief description was the culprit.

I enjoyed reading every line, smiling as it flowed, painting unique images, bringing to mind memories. Transcending time for you means something quite different from where my mind travels. I liked the unexpected twist. It gave me pause, thinking of one cat embodying several others in small ways. How did you ever dream that one up? A living metaphor, indeed.

My cat understands time, which is another reason why I wanted to read and review. At seven, if I'm not eating dinner, she's prowling around, annoying me with her meowing. She reminds me when it's three in the afternoon, even though my alarm is set. And if I'm not headed towards bed by 9:30, she can be downright mean. All this from a feral cat who wandered into my apartment eight years ago. She was a parking lot cat. When I moved, I had to teach her not to go down the stairs. No more going outside. It was awful, but I'm proud of the relationship I managed to create. Sometimes, she even dozes on my lap.

I do tend to babble when a write resonates with me. Sorry. Your work is elegant and inventive. Imaginative and concise. All the words flowed together as you showed me the different cats and their quirks.

Among other things I like about anniversary reviews, they often introduce me to authors I've never met. This evening was a lovely surprise. Thank you.



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Review of Uncle Lion  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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What? No bio filled out? Since your writing is near impeccable, I found something for you to do. I tried to find a story that called to me—one that hadn't been written so long ago. A year after WdC was born. Among the many, this one stood out. Not from the title, and not from the brief description. General curiosity?

You write with word economy and unusual descriptors. I realize a review after all these years may be pointless. It's your own fault.

Although I anticipated a boring story to skim, I don't know. You cast a net over my brain and pulled me in? *Laugh* *Facepalm*

One wish. Less past tense verbs. Less instances of [was].

I unearthed a favorite sentence! Uniquely descriptive.
And Mercer thought she belonged there as much as the maple tree.

Oops

His buddy Hawk had telephoned last night from there favorite watering hole,
their

No only had the second hand stopped moving
Not

"I think you’re a little young to be climbing trees
Missing period and ending quotation marks.

"Don’t know what your missing," he said.
you're

with Alan hot on it’s trail.
its

His face was crimson.
How does he know his face is crimson?

Oh, therej would be a dozen of ‘um
there

As he went out the front door he head Alan say,
heard

I suspect part, if not the majority, of the plot was written from first hand experience. No way someone who doesn't know kids would be able to write this. Oh, good grief, who can forget the (why?) stage.

Absolutely engaging read.



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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Congrats on winning first place! I would have stopped by anyway, sci-fi is my favourite genre.

Cool story. I liked how you showed the various screens coming into view. Although it's trope for sci-fi, it's not always easy to show it well enough for the reader to visualize.

What distracted me was the perfect past tense and the multitude of passive verbs. Here's a few an examples.
"I had never had the opportunity."
Suggest: I've never had the opportunity."

And here:
On a small screen were scrolling giant numbers.
Suggest:
On a small screen giant numbers scrolled.

Misspell
I released my breathe at one go.
breath

The beginning and ending of this paragraph was the same.
At that moment

Remember [just] is a meaningless word and twice in one sentence really stands out.
When just a minute and a half was left, just three men remained on Sparta.

Rewording needed. Double negative.
Commander wouldn't abandon his ship till the last man hadn't departed.

Excellent observation, how one person's attitude can travel to another. Well done! And surprising.
Kelly's voice had slightest of strain, maybe infected by mine.

When I review, it's a bad habit for me. I change verb tenses as I go back and forth in a story. In this story, the verb tenses need to be fixed in several areas.

Split comma separating noun from action.
The HDC that had traveled three light-years, was racing for Sparta.

Same here
The grating sound that it made, obliterated all other sounds

A suggestion for word economy and passive verb elimination.
but Commander Wilson's voice could be heard across the battlefield.
Commander Wilson's voice boomed across the battlefield.

*Questionb* Why was a battlefield mentioned? They're not in battle yet. I had the impression Murray had never met the commander before. So how would he know from experience?

When I read the prompt, I understood where the focus was for this contest entry. The design was easy to visualize (even with the passive verbs)

Aw, I finished reading the story. What a sad, but predictable (in a good way) conclusion. The captain always goes down with the ship. The scenario reminded me a movie I can't recall, where Bruce Willis sacrifices his life for the sake of this daughter. Father/daughter moments create strong emotions. By the end of the movie, I was sobbing. Of course there's not enough room in a short story to develop that tight relationship, so good job finding a way to get the point across.

All in all, a good write that needs some editing.

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "February 19, 2020" 
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Ridinghood. It's Nixie again. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

I'm struggling with this. Here's the definitions of 'resile' I found.

recoil, retract especially : to return to a prior position resile from an agreement.
oxford dictionary

To spring back; rebound; resume the original form or position, as an elastic body.
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It sounds to me like 'whatever' (in this case a person) has to be in one position to recoil or return. So if the subject is waking up in the dark, she can't resile the light. Wouldn't she have to be in the light and from there she can resile. Tough word to work with.

What about more unique words, other than dark and deep?

I know how hard 24 syllables can be. *Pthb*

I liked the last line the most because we do have to keep an open mind to receive. For me, I can be in the light or the dark to find wisdom.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi flyfisher. Nixie here. I'm reviewing your work for "I Write in 2020" 

Oh! One of my favorite songs! My dad used to sing it all the time. Me too.

Non-fiction, huh? If she was your first and only love, did you ever find another?

I think you can shorten this a bit by using less passive verbs. Since it's a personal story, it's not a huge deal. But the verb [was] does tend to get tedious. A quick example.

Snow was falling outside the Pocono Manor Inn.
Outside the Pocono Manor Inn, snow fell.

This weekend was a package deal offered..

Less details, perhaps? We already know you're with the ski club. Rearranging your words, not changing them. What about...*Idea*

The hotel offered a package deal. Even so, I was out of ....

And what about starting a new paragraph after [worlds]?

***

Unfamiliar with the content of the work, I struggled over this sentence, out of context until the story progressed.
For a city kid in the 50s
I finally figured it out. What about the 1950's?

A native of NYS, I have similar memories of snow. The snowbanks sparkled, until they turned to grey slush.

Remember not to use semi-colons unless what follows is a complete sentence. *Wink*

Avoid repetition. In the paragraph beginning with "Forty years later" [story] appears twice.

You may want to fix the font and size after the song snippet to match the rest of the story. Unless you changed it deliberately.

You have a wonderful story here. You don't need to change anything. But if you want to make it more compelling, bring the experience to the reader by being more direct, less wordy.

I'm happy your story came my way! I enjoyed reading and imagining it. And now that song is stuck in my head. *Music2* Thanks for including some of the lyrics. I'll be singing all day long and remembering my dad. Bittersweet, as you said.

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Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sinbad. Nixie here.

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The title and brief description intrigued me. The problem was I glanced down the page and shrugged. I almost passed it by due to the unique formatting. I read the title and brief description again and decided this story was here for me to review.

When I finished reading my first reaction was "wow'. I got a bit confused as the story progressed. The conclusion brought everything together and tied it up, just like the monster.

Today, I had to face an unpleasant feeling between my daughter and me. I sensed some tension and guessed what the problem was. I really didn't want to talk to her, but I really didn't want to let the relationship suffer. I took on the challenge. She wasn't all that receptive, repeating, it's over now, it doesn't matter, when clearly it did. I pushed her (gently) to give me some details and saw where I had made the error by not paying attention. Now I'm challenged to balance my own emotions. I'm sure this problem will resolve over time, but I don't want the resolution to be influenced by resentful, unspoken feelings. I hope that makes sense. *Pthb*

My problem hasn't been shrunken yet, but as your story goes, it takes more than one scream (conversation) to conquer, and in my case, resolve through compassion. Be direct. Got it. It fascinates me that I landed on this story a few hours after the traumatic conversation.

(If I remember correctly, every word in a title has to be capitalized if the words are needed to make sense. Not capitalized, the title reads Face Face.) I didn't google this, so you may want to follow up.

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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Oh, that was awful. In a good way. Your portfolio is diverse and interesting, but this title and brief description encouraged me to follow its path.

My brother liked spelunking, until he got wedged and claustrophobia claimed him. He made it back out, but that was the last time.

A few bumps.

“Nobody knows we are here.” He said.
No need to capitalize [he] in this sentence, or any of the others.

Jake suppressed a low groan of pain when her small hands
I think the reader needs to know from the beginning [she/her] is Jenna. When I read that sentence, I thought it was a mistake and [her] should have been [his].

I can't imagine going all the way back to fix one bump. I wouldn't. But it's my job to point out uh-ohs.

Just the other day my daughter vanished. She mentioned going to the beach, but by 8 p.m. I hadn't heard from her. She usually calls me four or five times a day, mostly for a break from work and complaints.

Why did I say awful in the beginning? What an awful decision to make. At first, I thought Jenna could get out, then came the slamming fact. She was just as trapped. Knowing that, I would have stayed and died with Jake. Why die alone? It was Jake's responsibility to let someone know where they were. The caves, to Jenna, were a playground. That seemed a bit of a contradiction. If they were familiar to her, why was she lost? And spelunking must have been second nature to Jake because he invited her.

None of that matters when the icy last words were written. Excellent story for the difficult prompt.




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Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Tracey! Nixie here.

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Wow. I had no idea we were kindred souls. Most of my work reflects the thoughts expressed here. Not in the same way, we are individuals. The first two stanzas puzzled me. The setting was here, in the woods. In the physical world. So where is further? Farther for distance]. Further is everything else. I tend to think 'not of this physical world at all'. That could be the difference that creates individualistic minds.

Everything else fell in place for me. The poem shifted from esoteric to human thoughts. Yes, the wisest lesson is to understand we live in the world we create. We accept it, even though it doesn't feel quite right. The concept frightens a bit. Our every thought rules our lives, without consciousness.

Awesome title and brief description, by the way. Often that important introduction is overlooked. Yours enriched the poem and gave a general guideline for readers who may not be familiar with the concept.

I thought my knowledge was fairly extensive, but I had to google 'quantum realm'. It's not a term I've heard before. *Shock2* It's time for me to push myself and further explore. Good for you, making me google. I both enjoyed and learned.

Happy Anniversary, all month long. Connecting with you is always a pleasure. *Bigsmile*





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Review by Nixie
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Jeff. Nixie here.

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Excellent response for the contest! And a funny example of people relying on the internet for information. Yes, it's all so easy, right at our fingertips. Gil had the perfect plans, well-thought out and convenient. Not.

I liked how you showed the trouble brewing and tension escalating by Gil noticing the direction of the highways and frantically consulting his 'smart' phone.

I guess his only hope was that a cheaper rent would offset the money he'd spend in mileage.

The first paragraph was a little weird. Both the first and last sentences used (was actually). I noticed the frequency of passive verbs. And a preponderance of adverbs. But since this is a 24 hour turn-around contest entry, it's probably not worth the time or effort to struggle over.

Your story fulfilled the contest's requirements and rules, the main goal. *Wink*

Well, Jeff. Happy Happy Anniversary. I wouldn't worry too much about catching up on tasks here. Just enjoy your anniversary all month long. *Bigsmile*



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Review of Love  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hi there. Nice to meet you. I found your work via random reviewing.


Overall Impression
Good for you. Only recently joining and already your writing is underway! One thing to remember, once you put thought to virtual paper, anyone on the website can read it and review it. That's one reason why correct punctuation is essential. Anywhere you write, a forum, a poem, short story, emails, readers are evaluating.

Thoughts/Feelings
You left your reader disappointed. The work had so much potential. The message you're trying to send out is enlightened and uplifting. Who knows what love really is? In this piece, you've explored from beginning to end. If love can be defined, you've done a good job here.

Sometimes the easiest way to write is from inspiration to fingertips to virtual paper. Then the editing begins. What I'm looking at now is some words thrown down without much thought as to the overall effect on the reader.

So sad the punctuation is incorrect. Maybe it's only in the English language that the word [I] is capitalized no matter where it lands in a sentence. In German, [I] is only capitalized if it's the first word in a sentence.

The thoughts seem circular, but read carefully, the progression is there. If only the form was better. Stanzas broken evenly so the words flow. Remember to use apostrophes for conjunctions. [whats] should be [what's] and so on for all the others.

If the lopsided formatting isn't an issue for you, that's fine. I like words more ordered so the read is continuous.

Lasting Impression
For a first write, it's easy to see you have something worth expressing. Now it's time to go back and make those words comply to standards. Take the time and opportunity you have here to learn. Reading what other members have written helps me.

I hope you don't abandon this. But if you'd rather move forward, that's fine too. Ensure you're moving forward with new skills and careful attention. The satisfaction of writing works when it's best for the writer and the reader. Please enjoy your time here and keep writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi I found your item through the read and review option.


Overall Impression
Cool write! How you fit all those prompt words into a poem that made sense remains a mystery to me.

The title grabbed my attention. The brief description worked for the original intent of the work.


Thoughts

The punctuation caught my eye. I kept going back to see if it was consistent (not an issue in poetry) but it distracted me. It's carved into me. Don't use semi-colons in writing. Reason supposedly? Editors don't like them.

A nice, clean presentation impressed me. Even lines and stanzas. It's a personal quirk of mine, but I like symmetry.

Wonderful visualization of the scene. It's almost as if you looked right at me and read my mind. I don't want to find a dead civilization, unless I can build a place for myself there. What if the structures could be repaired?

The overall mood is dark, emphasizing the smallness of humankind. The poem didn't have to explain anything about another planet due to the title. Intentional or not, it worked.

*Heart*
My favorite lines? The first two in the second stanza. I wanted to be on that mountain. I mourned the civilization lost. What if humans have already destroyed earth, and nothing else 'out there' is suitable to humankind. I don't know why this narrator went to another planet. Again, it doesn't pertain to the write. But it does bring up the prickles in me. I fear for the future generations to come, if there is even anything left.

In closing
Sounds silly. I know the narrator is doomed, with no hopes of returning home. I want to rescue him/her. I ask too many questions and raise too many conjectures when an authors' write inspires me. Thanks for the read. *Smile*



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Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Nixie here. I found your poem via random reviewing.

*Vignette2*
From the top
Unfortunately, what drew my attention was the bold font and multitude of exclamation marks. Since you wrote a poem no emotions can be displayed. Possibly that's what prompted the excessive punctuation.

*Vignette2*
Emotions evoked
I have to agree with what is expressed here. I attached to the first line, life is the way to death. How true! We want to make a difference, find someone to witness our lives. Leave some memories behind. Maybe one learns to slow down, to appreciate what they have, even if it's not enough in their minds.

What I can't agree with are the limited aspirations written. People have so much more to find in life. That's not to say I don't get your point. Life can be like a hamster wheel, going 'round and 'round without a person realizing it. We're less than a speck in this universe, our little lives don't matter at all. What we leave behind are memories.

*Vignette2*
Hot spots (favorite lines)
The first and last line
The deceit yourself line

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suggestions/Thoughts
Perhaps a second stanza?
Too self-centered. We impact others' lives.

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Wrapping it up
I 100% agree with the thoughts here. But the perspective seemed limited. The poem could be a stronger write, perhaps longer. And, as I stated in the beginning, the actual presentation threw me off.

You have something here worth pursuing. If editing makes you want to say 'ick' then carry forward what you've gleaned (if anything) and keep writing. We have to start somewhere. And some of my starts were horrible. Some still are. That's why we keep trying. *Bigsmile*

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