A game of counting,
exciting and witty,
Adding and subtracting,
All verses pretty.
Children really enjoy the poem. The first word of the stanza is in a descending count and the last word in the ascending count. A well thought off mathematical poem for nursery kids.Good presentation.Keep writing...Your writing matters.
The small piece 'Scars', has a very high emotional content. The scars left by the lover on mind and body cannot be wiped and remains forever, a beautiful imagery!
My favorite lines: All I need is the illumination. But how can anything warm linger here, now .....without her?
These lines shows the depth of love he has for her.
Whether he the noose or the knife, Scars still remain.
Good writing with emotions filled. Keep writing.....Your writing matters
Nothing better happened with the passage of time. The situation got worse and the trapped lost all the time.A tragic story which catches and holds attention of the reader. The plight of the trapped who inhaled the radioactive dust is unimaginable.
The incident, well makes the readers to feel for the five. Nicely written. Keep writing...
A touch poem with a good imagery and choice of words. The bluebird narrating the story in its own birdie language adds colour to the poem and makes it more impressive. The thoughts and feelings of the bird for the woman, who loses her husband is quite touching to the heart. The last stanza is the core stanza which simply amazes the reader.
I found no flaws in this free verse. Well written, Keep writing..Your writing matters
Fantastic fantasy. Emily imagined her mom to be dragon like. This piece evokes curiosity in the reader. A good plot with good imagination. The girl's subconscious is filled with her mother and her words. Thereore she imagines a dragon speaking the same words as her mother.I liked the words of this particular paragraph.
"Stretching out, she watched the clouds drift overhead, their tumbling play creating fantastic shapes that caught her imagination. That one looks like a castle and there's a range of mountains, filled with caves ... secret caves. Her thoughts began to slow as she was lifted into the new found world above."
A small piece, yet an enjoying read. Keep writing.... Your writing matters
Reading through, I experienced the spring with beautiful blossoming flowers, hybernating trees bearing leaves, birds hopping and chirping, Your poem has brought spring into my heart. Spring is beautifully described in your poem with good imagery and choice of words.
My favourite lines:
The bare limbs of hibernating trees
have come alive with newborn leaves.
The following lines can be slightly better:
Cars are painted with a coat of yellow pollen,
the same pollen that makes allergies react.
It could be:
Cars are painted with pollen yellow,
Colours of flowers gentle and mellow
Just a small suggestion, if you like it. Otherwise, Just a touch of spring is a beautiful poem.
Keep writing.... Your writing matters
A well presented short piece about Music. Any classical music soothes the heart, our emotions of joy touching the soul makes us cry silently. Music has no language but it communicates and transforms us into a different world. These are my thoughts about music which I would like to share as I listen to the Indian karnatic classical music.
Your writing, an emotional piece on music, I really enjoyed. Keep writing.... Your writing matters.
Growing up is a wonderful poem that teaches the children to accept responsibility of protecting the environment. It says that the humanity. now in its adulthood should accept responsibility and take all measures to protect this beautiul planet.
A Short and sweet poem with great insight.The imagery is good and the voice of the poem has depth.
I enjoyed the poem which is of good value. Keep writing... Your writing matters
An instant trip planned to nowhere, that leads to a place where people becomes highly spirited is the essence of the poem. The trandquil picturesque beauty of the nature increases the spirit and energy. The reader enjoys the trip along with the poet.
My favourite lines in the poem are:
Pack up a picnic,
grab all your gear!
I've got an idea,
let's get out of here
The photo selected aptly suits the poem.There is a sequential placement of stanzas. A good read. Keep writing... Your writing matters
The poet has nicely ennumerated the various elements of leading a qualitative successful life. To reach our true goals it is true that we have to grab opportunity when it comes, renew goals, change directions when required, and should persistently strive for goal. These are the essence of success.
Good acrostic with apt words and a positive vision.
Keep writing... Your writing matters.
The countdown poem 'Autumn' has a wonderful imagery- The skies are clear, the leaves fall down, the coolness sets in and the radiant energy in beautiful hues are seen in autumn.
The word choice is good. The poet expresses that all negative aspects are hidden like yawn, sleep and harm. That means the world is full of spirit and active during autumn.
I liked every line of the poem.
Well knitted countdown poem. Keep writing.
One's work should be selfless without expecting any regards. we eternally make a soul search as to who we are and what is the purpose of being here. Many great men and every common man search for this purpose. The narrator here is scearching for a purpose, she feels that she is heavenly and making use of all her senses, she finds a great purpose in her life. The purpose is becoming an author, spreading knowledge to the world
This piece is presented very well, with a great insight. This piece invokes the readers to analyze themselves as to who they are and what is their purpose. The read can be called spiritual, and enlightening.
My favourite lines are:
"My work is to gather, sort, interpret, categorize, plan, design, create, produce, edit, communicate, distribute....and by doing so...I will acknowledge my seventh sense of "being"
The love for the mother is explicit in this write up. A child thinks many ways to surprise her mommy on her birthday finally ends up cleaning the room. The child never thinks of surprising her by cleaning the room. Unknowingly the child has surprised mommy with a wonderful gift.
The read was enjoyable which reminded me of my endevours to surprise my mother on her birthday. The writeup captures and holds attention of the reader from the start. The writeup is not too long and boring but short and sweet. Apt sentences and good narration. The read was also entertaining. Keep writing.... Your writing matters.
I love this great prose poetry. very well written. The complete thoughts of who am I?, How I ended up to this person of substance has been ennumerated very beautifully. Very nicely written, a natural flow has run through out. My heartfelt appreciation to the author
What a colourful rose! It appears that the flower is sent by the God from the heaven to inspire the writers of WDC. Its glossy petals are so attractive, Its vibrant colours invokes bright feelings in the mind. Each petal is reflecting diffferent colours of light like the people of different cultures. This rose represents integration of all nations with different cultural background and together they make a lovely world!
These are the thoughts of a dying man I presume. As the end approaches a man feels shattered and his life will be over. The lines I liked:
This senseless stare
you feel it creeping
the end is near
You know it
Emotive feelings nicely brought out
Good work. Keep writing.....
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