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Review by saheli
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:people are so engrossed with cell phones that though they are with friends, they are far away and keep communicating with a person who is not present there. Junk mails are a headache.
Cell phones are to be used sparingly when there is really something to convey. I'm also old fashioned like you. I liked the writeup because I too share the same thoughts.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No errors or suggestions.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Keep sharing.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of WHO AM I ??  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:N/A

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:I can see great insight and beauty,in the poem. It is a metaphysical poem propounding the theme of 'aham brahmasmi'. I can see an enraptured mind enjoying every moment of life in serving, sharing and giving. You have talked almost every thing about life. A man born who rose from dust will return to the dust, performing all the duties in different capacities, enjoying and living every moment, encompassing the whole world and becoming an eternal and immortal being.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No errors
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Your thoughts are Great! keep sharing

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of Upon A Full Moon  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:A romantic poem with fullness of feelings and the delight of uniting expressed subtly. I feel the poem would have a better impact if it was divided into stanzas. The first two lines can be written as follows which will have greater impact on readers like:
When we shall chance to meet on a moon so full,
I'll sweep you in my arms to kiss your tender lips,
This is only my suggestion.
I can see a voice in the poem, the feelings are intense, the choice of words are good.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Keep sharing

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Review of Stuck  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:"Stuck" has a beautiful imagery. Imagination and fantasies are for ourselves which get stuck in the head and does not go out
I can see the flow in the poem, thoughts unfolding following a thread. Good try.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No errors seen
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Keep writing and sharing. Your writing matters

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of Finding Me  
Review by saheli
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
paralyzed by ennui,fear, laziness bits of regret and angst - A good choice of words to portray negative aspects of a person. Similarly a good choice of positive words, both complementing each other. Our minds wander to places unknown, sometimes we feel everything happening around is positive. suddenly one can see a twist of happenings. Our minds drowns into sadness, despair. then we again search for moonbeams, as you said. This cycle is on and every moment of life is different, we comprehend, the situations, learn and grow. we are geared up to face the next moment, next challenge that comes to us.

As I read your poem these thoughts conquered my mind. Your poem is inspiring, and helps to rediscover the readers. Good going. Keep sharing. Your thoughts are wonderful!
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Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:A rhythmic flow exists through out the poem

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:A wonderful imagination of a penguin feeling cold. Though we are made to suit and adapt to certain habitats, some of us don't feel comfortable in the so called made to live habitat. Our mind feels that we have to look for something new. similarly the penguin's mind did no like the cold arctic. It craved for something warm.It is good for all of us to look for change and seek for something better than what we are. Once we are contented with whatever God has given, we dont try for newer and better things in life. However, I liked the poem for a beautiful imagination, a novel concept and the presentation skills. I appreciate with all my heart.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No errors
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Keep writing keep sharing. I love poems which provokes my thought

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of seeking freedom  
Review by saheli
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:A narration which has offered food for thought.

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:N/A

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:Yes, You are right. we do not have time to think creatively. to imagine things or give some time to our mind where it can think, or analyse or imagine. Our mind is now tuned to the routine chores that we have to perform which is inevitable. we are benefited by the technological advancement but at the same time we have to keep time for ourselves. we are still using technical gadgets to write, to express ourselves. we thank technological advancements for it has offered us to communicate with each other at long distances.The thing is we should not run after money and make this life a bore. we should set aside time for ourselves to energize our brains by doing what we enjou.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No suggestions or errors.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Keep sharing your thoughts. Thoughts and ideas are wonderful to share.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Good narration

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:I enjoyed the garden, the flowers, the vegetables, the fruits and the most, the swing.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:The yard is explained stunningly beautiful!! I was expecting a story from your grandfather but enjoyed the lovely garden and the swing.I could imagine your emotional attachment to the yard. How beautiful are the childhood days! performing feats on the swing, trying to touch the blue blanket with the legs. really amazing. I liked your garden. I reveled in the beauty of your garden yard. I liked your story very much.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No suggestions or errors
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Keep writing. Your writing matters.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of Only For Me  
Review by saheli
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:N/A

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:I liked the form, the flow and everthing in the poem.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion: A lively love poem. I liked the way it is presented. Very beautiful. I liked the lines where you have expressed about the gift of day and the gift of night and both being the best. I liked the voice in the poem, the love in the poem.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No suggestions. No errors.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Good writing. keep it up

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review by saheli
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:The dialogues are lively and carries the story forward

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow: Jason and Gloria dwells too much on making the soup together in the boat

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion: Th complete story is in the form of dialogue carrying the story forward with ease. Lively dialogues and a good imagery of reveling in the taste of chicken soup in the boat.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No suggestions or errors. Keep writing.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:N/A

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow: The poem is gripping and flows well.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion: The poem is highly emotional with a good choice of words. Power vengeance, heart ripping are some of the powerful words I could notice in the poem. The poet has a talent and makes an impact on the reader.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No suggestions or errors seen.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:A strong poem with vibrating words. Keep writing and sharing. Your writing matters.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of Dining Room  
Review by saheli
Rated: E | (4.5)
It's amazing! How well you described the dining room. The dining room was right in front of my eyes as I read through, rather I felt that I was a part of the dining room. You were asked to describe a dining room but you began describing nature-birds chirped,rain slowly drizzled down the windows. A very good start I can say. Each item and each being were wonderfully described. I liked the knack of describing, the art in which you weaved the words to deliver a living image. Good job done. keep writing. Your writing matters.
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Review of Nymphia  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Good narration

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:The story can be developed well.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:The story began in the right note but the ending sentence is incomplete. This story has a setting, a good beginning and can be developed well.What happened after the girl collapsed?Why was she hiding from her mother? What was the relevance of the tree with the huge trunk?

The hugeness of the tree trunk is described well. The writer has a talent but these questions stand open in front of the readers.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:keep sharing. Your sharing matters

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Review by saheli
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Embe,
You were the first one to welcome me on WDC. I wonder how do you get such striking, wonderful words. All your poems are completely different from others. They are unique, original and have a style. I appreciate. cacophonous, incoherent, excruciating pain are the words which really captivated me.
Sahana
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Review of Black Hole  
Review by saheli
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Not available

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:The theme of the poem is "broken heart", when a relationship ends. The picture and emotions have been painted vividly.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:The agony when a relationship breaks, the emotions piled up for the individual, the unimaginable damage to the heart, the inexplicable feelings, face getting blurred and with time vanishing are all described quite vividly.

(/c}*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No suggestions to improve.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:An outstanding poem.
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Review of 10:45  
Review by saheli
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:not applicable

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:nicely presented poem with natural flow

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:
an emotional poem wherein the sweet voice faded as the angels took her to heaven. A very touching story, with a good imagery.
*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos: No errors seen in the poem.The poem communicates the concept to the reader.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Title suits the poem.

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Review of lead  
Review by saheli
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Not applica;ble

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:{/I like the simple way the poem is presented with good choice of words.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:women always allow the man to lead but it is she who leads him. She stays behind him to motivate him to inspire him to become great man in the world , to do all good to the society but she wants to lean on him for support and he on her for love and support. The thoughts and imagery in your poem are scintillating.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:
         *RainbowL*It is you who lead but I lead from behind is a beautifull imagination which impresses the readers. No suggestions as I liked every bit of it.

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:A
perfect poem
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Review of Brothers  
Review by saheli
Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:A good narration whith no dialogue.

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:A good narration is one which has a natural flow.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:{/bThere is a chemistry between the two. Is it a friend turned brother. What is the difference. They both have the same goal and their actions are complementing each other.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:
         *RainbowL*Ifeel this needs an elaboration. Audience are waiting for some suspense, plot or a moral or a climax.

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:You have a flair of writing. You can work on ideas where you can attract audience in terms of plot, dialogue etc.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of Today...Tomorrow  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:not applicable

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:good flow.six couplets well presented with a good theme on decision making.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:It is true that we have to think for tomorrows because todays children are tomorrows promising citizens. whe have to groom them well and proper decisions should be taken for them at the right time. Never postpone decisions because in a day there are only twenty four hours which flies very. Time gone does not come back

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No errors.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:Good job and good advice.Keep it up.

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Review of Lovely Lobelia  
Review by saheli
Rated: E | (4.5)
Great alliteration
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Review of I've read  
Review by saheli
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Not applicable

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:The poetic flow is felt by the reader.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:We read all types of quotes, We read about fear, horror, darkness, about everything in life but only the tale of life is a genuine experience, which covers all aspects of life. All emotions are present in the tale of life.The author wants to say that is the ultimate reading experience. There is imagery and the punch.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No error found
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:A light, interesting read. I enjoyed.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of Through the Storm  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Narration and dialogue needs to be improved. I had to read second time to understand.

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:The Story has a good plot.The climax is interesting. I felt there are certain loose sentences which have to be tightened, so that the reader is transformed to the scene of storm. The effects of storm could be dealt in more detail.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:The imagery is superb. The emotions of fear and regret needs depth.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:No major errors found except one or two.
         *RainbowL*

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:The theme of the story is good. I liked the climax of the story that she had killed her.It's really frightening but the emotions should play up in the story.

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Review of Decaying Beauty  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:Not applicable

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:No hitches seen. Flows well

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:Beautiful imagery. I liked the line "in the decaying is beauty's domain". Autumn is wonderfully imagined by the poet. The plants lose their hues and tresses. The bleak autumn has set in and the author sees beauty in decaying. An unimaginable imagery.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:
         *RainbowL*No errors seen.

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:The repitition of first line has an impact. An unusual theme which goes well with the season.

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review of help  
Review by saheli
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Rated: E | (4.0)
'Help" brings out the strong emotions of the Protagonist when in the daynight darkness loses his way. This poem either is focussing on betrayal or somebody who has lost the way is crying for help as the one who was with her has left her in despair. Good flow, good choice of words. Correct spellings would have made it more interesting. Nonetheless, I enjoyed the read. Keep sharing.
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Review of Thump Thump Beep  
Review by saheli
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This poem is a good expression of the post accident feelings. The protagonist is in a traumatic condition and remembers the 'thump, thump, beep', the sounds when he encountered this accident. The poem has a good imagery. sounds natural and fine. Keep sharing.
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