This is a fantastic poem. The tone is melancholy but tinged with hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the death of the last human. I hope that this eventuality never comes to pass, and humans are always around to enjoy the Earth. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with urgency and doubt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who has made a promise to help his father when he is able. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the beauty and wonder of all the things which happen during Winter. I am not much for Winter, but I do appreciate the beauty that can exist during this season. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interrupt the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of retrospection and regret. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the girl hear will come to terms with her obvious anger. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a girl who has come to confront the boy who made her life difficult but who she ended up falling in love with. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the girl with a difficult life, and she comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The girls in the story speaks like a real person, You have left the description of character and setting to the imagination of the reader. This is a very effective tool which keeps the reader focused on the conflict. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about how those without paid memberships are not treated the same as those with paid memberships here on the site. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fabulous piece. The title is tells the reader will be learning about something but not exactly how we will accomplish that goal-building self-esteem through God's Word. The reader will immediately begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about using the institutions that exist in the world-schools, churches and others-to learn about God and His work in the world. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. I am on my own spiritual journey right now, and I stared, anxiously, to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. In this piece, you explain that spiritual realms which are inhabited by intelligent beings. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with Bel insisting that Kam find Nina. The reader is wondering about the urgency of the request. They will read on to find out. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are on the edge of their seats wondering if Bel will be alright and if Kam can find him some help. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who knows what mistakes they have made in their life and want to change. I have figured out my mistakes, and I am trying to rectify them. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the pain that can be found in romance as well as the joy that should go along with it. The cinquain poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is gives the piece a bit of a creepy feel. The reader is anxious to begin to read to find out what will be going on. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the final word. You have written about those unexpected, inconvenient knocks on the door that we all deal with from time to time. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a light hearted, humorous style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your future goals. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if a relationship will develop between Angie and Drew. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a misplaced package leads to the beginning of a romance. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of self doubt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a woman who is worried about the image of herself she is projecting to the world. I have worried about this a fair bit in my life until I realized that I am control of what the world sees, and people will make of it what they will. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigue and will begin to reader immediately to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written explaining why you believe that there is no supreme being in the world. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about why one book that is published by an author is successful while the next book by that same author isn't. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. The reader knows you looked for a sound, but not what kind. They will begin to read to find this out. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about spending a decade looking for a piece of music you heard as a child. The reader is delighted with the look they get as you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1) And then, one fine day, out of absolutely nowhere, the “sound” had struck again. And so began a quest to finally uncover the mystery composition. By this time, i had been exposed to an appreciable variety of western music, though the list would be heavily dominated by pop music, rock music being a distant second. Since a lot of rock music i had heard involved just instruments, my instinct went for rock. And so i googled, “Best Soft Rock Music”
Google returned a dazzling collection of soft rock music by varied artists. “Another Brick in the Wall” by Pink Floyd absolutely stumped me! But, nothing sounded even remotely close to the mystery composition.-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.
You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about having OCD and Bipolar Disorder. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer, and rejoice in how you managed these conditions. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone unable to trust in love. I have been at that point where heart break made it hard to trust someone else. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of frustration. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone watching waves hit off rocks on the shore, and wondering if things will change or if they can stay where they are. I have been on the shore as waves crash over the shore during the beginning of a storm. I have never stayed and watched for very long. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with Nina and Silo meeting at a bar. The reader immediately wonders what the conversation will be like between them. The will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are completely pulled in with Nina and Silo's history. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with determination. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Dani will do in her training. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a new sailor finds assistance in an unusual place. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a wonderful first chapter. The chapter opens with a brief history of Phil. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it on him and the chapter. They will read on to know more about Phil. This is a fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for your reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to put each piece of dialogue in its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with longing and urgency. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Scootaloo will do about her candy bar craving. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a teenage girl who gets money to buy a candy bar in a very innovative way. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with sorrow and hopelessness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has lost hope and is facing their troubles all alone. I have always had someone to turn to and share my feelings with. I am hoping that the speaker will find this person in their lives. I read to the last word to see if this happens for the speaker. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read, You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
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