This is a wonderful piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I know very little about European sports, and this piece fascinated me. I began to read right away to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. This takes all the reader's attention and focusing it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about improving the distribution of trophies in various sports in Europe. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
From the title I get an aura of nostalgia surrounding this poem. I love pieces that fall into the past, especially if they tell me about the writer themselves. I anxiously began to read to find out if this was about you or something from the past in general. I tend to look to my future but will share things about my past here.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light and filled with warmth. It looks like you look fondly on your youth. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the things that drove you crazy as a kid. I can remember so much like that, geni pants was one. Rap was another. I only bought one Rap album. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read.You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
I wasn't sure if you were talking about a real bug or something else because I have never heard the term "ambush bug" before. I love pieces that stimulate my curiosity even before I start reading them. This just peaked my interest. I had to read this poem to find out more.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about trying to decide if making a change in your life is a good, beneficial thing or if it will turn out to be a harmful thing to your life. I have had so many times I contemplated this, I lost count. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. The reader is carried along as they read, getting immersed in this poem. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar very consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
The title you have chosen is a contradiction, and this steals all my attention. I was anxious to find out more about this contradiction and how far it goes into the story. I just had to read this one.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the man's companion will explain what she means to him. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man whose female companion-it is not clear if it is his wife, mother, or something else-has made a cryptic remark, leaving him waiting for clarification. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This story has two titles and I was fascinated by this. I can see how both may apply. I had to see why you did this, though, and I started enthusiastically, to find out. I will always remember this story. I also love fantasy. I jump to read all the fantasy pieces I can find on the site.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the kingdom will get out of the clutches of their cruel king. They feel for the inhabitants of the kingdom and want them to be treated as they deserve to be. They will read to the last word to find out. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of wonder and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker is dreaming or if she really has been transported to another land. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who thinks she is dreaming about a flower filled field during a snowstorm. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)"you're making it cold"-'you're" should be "You're".
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is slightly formal, but has an air of fun as well. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about what happens when you only look within yourself and don't give anything to others. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Terra and Dr. Detroit are safe at the scene of this accident. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a university professor and his professor who run into a werewolf, something they normally hunt. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Jimbo is trying to show his nieces. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who tries to get his young nieces interested in how the clouds are forming when they are on a drive. The girls are simply hungry. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You are making a point about your personal point of view and you intend to make that point. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you prefer to do your own thing as opposed to conforming. I have always been like that, literally my whole life. I identify with what you are saying here. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
I was wondering if you would be sharing few, different poems here, and I was anxious to find out what you would share. I am intrigued when I am not sure what, exactly I will be experiencing when I go to read a piece of any sort. I was anxious to start this piece.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive and beseeching. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the what is going on in the poem. They will read to on. You have written about a group of people who are suffering through a severe calamity which is causing widespread pain and starvation and deprivation. The reader is wondering if there will be anyone to help these poor people. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
The title of this poem got my attention today. I wasn't sure if it would be something heartbreaking and sad or just a general poem about lies in general. I have also been going through something with a friend of mine in which I am left wondering if I have been lied to. I really wanted to read this poem. It really has put a few things into perspective for me.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You have a point to make, and you intend to make it. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about what lies can do to people and relationships. I have always believed that honesty is the best policy. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
My mother is a retired teacher and has been talking about the changes that have occurred in schools because of the extensive use of technology in our world. She has pointed out her concern that with kids learning to use computers for their schoolwork, there is a risk that kids might lose out on fundamental skills like penmanship. This is what attracted me to this article.
This is a fantastic article. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the article. This will be a fascinating piece for anyone familiar with the education system. The reader will begin right away to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief discussion about the impact technology has had on education in general. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how technology has influenced education in our world. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
I was entranced with the title of this piece. I was uncertain if it would be romantic or be a general piece about love in general. Either way, I am a romantic and was anxious to read a piece about love.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. The are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the very last word. You have written about moving on from a broken heart and being able to love yourself before you commit to loving someone else. I learned to love myself a long time ago. It was the only way I could get the forever love I had been dreaming of. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is frenzied and full of confusion. It is apparent as I read that the man in the poem has some sort of mental problem. I am hoping he will get the help he needs. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Hi Keaton,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone confronted my a religious fanatic who is intent on killing them. I am wondering if the speaker will get killed by the person threatening them. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasant. Great job.
Hi Troyizen,
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Camille getting more and more erratic. The reader is wondering what sort of trouble she is planning on causing. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are wondering how Carter will figure into Camille's devious plans. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)"Oh, sorry. I just got here and wanted to see you," said Angelina as she held onto Caroline's naked hips with her hands. Caroline lifted herself on her tippy-toes and kissed Angelina on her lips. Angelina's hands slipped down to her butt, and Carter saw a slight squeeze.
The golden-armored Angelina released her grip on Princess Caroline as she gathered her clothes from the ground. Rita and Ursa excitedly exited the bath and also hugged the fully clothed woman while naked.-These are two separated paragraphs and need to be double spaced.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as a real people. Great job.
The title is this piece makes a direct statement. I am assuming the piece is fiction, and this one statement tells me, right away about one of the characters. I am anxious to find out if there are other character and what I can learn about them. Therefore, I began reading right away.
This is a wonderful piece. The tone is confused and heartbroken. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will find anyone who can fill their life with trust and love. They will read to the last word to find out. The piece is about someone who is introverted and has lost the one person they found they could open up to. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The piece concentrates on the speaker, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the piece. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The piece is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
The title and the description you gave pulled me in right away. The title sends the message that this will be am emotional piece. Y-goblet had me thinking this would be something about the ancient world. Both of these things always add up to a fantastic story.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is aggressive but formal at the same time. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Calus will defeat Gaul and rule that country as well. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a mighty emperor who is looking to conquer a country and add it to his empire. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words.
The title of this poem caught my attention as soon as I read it. It makes a direct statement about you and what you are looking for. I love finding out more and more about the members here. I started in on this poem right away. It also made me wonder if you are an artist yourself. There were so many good reasons to read and review this poem.
This is a fantastic poem. The poem is upbeat and slightly aggressive. You have something you want to share with the reader, and you intend to share it. The poem is about all the reasons you want to fall in love with, and be in a relationship with an artist. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person. They will read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This chapter seemed like it had a science fiction feel to it when I saw the title. Then the description you offered mentioned a curse. I love science fiction and magic. I had to start this one to see how the two would mesh.
This is a wonderful first chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. The reader can envision Barbela as they read. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on Barbela and the chapter. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the way the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1)as he climbed up the slope-"as" should begin with a capital letter.
2)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about what life would be like controlled humans and not the other way around. We had a dog when I was growing up, and I can see him having some of wishes expressed in the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Princess Mary rummaging through her father's papers. The reader is wondering what she is looking for. They will read on to find out. This is a fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. They get a good look at Princess Mary's evil, devious side and wonder what plan she will come up with to gain the throne. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)More grander-Should read "More grand".
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
Hi strlcuckoo,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with wonder and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about having there first experience with writing. I remember when I first wrote a long piece in school. It was a story. This poem brought this right to mind. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
Two things got my attention as I clicked onto this story. The title is designates it as a diary entry, but it is categorized as fiction. Obviously this some sort of mock memoir. It has been a long time since I read something like this. I wanted to find out what it was all about. Very interesting way to do things.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what is going on in Edith's life. They will begin to read right away to find out. The story is about how the main character, Edith, has grown up and how she lives. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Edith's father speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
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