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I enjoyed this story through the eyes of a Boy Scout leader bringing the troop on a camping trip. 
Having a cave as the campsite made this extra fun. It goes beyond a tent or sleeping under the stars and brings the reader into a dark, claustrophobic spot. Hey, it got me gasping for air just reading it. I happen to have claustrophobia, so even though this is a comedy, it made me shudder! 
Good way to keep order among the 18 boys, threaten to play an accordion. 
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It is a spine chilling story that pulls the character into frantic fear, because of what is on the loose -- is what this is! 
Jake Springer is a pretty cool guy. He loves camping and nature walks. You made me like him. I thought here is a guy who is strong, athletic and self-sufficient out there in the wilderness. Or, at least I thought he was all that. Actually, Jake had a huge target on his back. HE was being hunted in the most unnatural way. 
I believe that image will be planted in my brain long after this review gets planted in yours. However, in that line I saw Jake's courage bloom. He was no longer running; he couldn't run anymore. He faced those eyes and fangs. That was brave -- very brave!
I liked it! His last thoughts as he crosses out of this life leave the reader to wonder what would that answer be from the rattler of vengeance. Would that scream vibrate through the fangs? Indeed!
Oh, my, I'm so sorry for the loss of your beloved Tigger." She sounded like a real bundle of fun and love. I love the way you describe your memories of her.
House fire! So scary! I'm happy you all made it out safe!
I feel like I know so much about Tigger and her devotion to you. You were fortunate to have her in your life for so many wonderful years. And yes, she'll be waiting for you at the Rainbow Bridge.
Your poem about walking on the beach is glorious! I say that because I felt as if I were right there on that walk with you. I love the seaside with all its sights and sounds and ambiance. It is an explosion of senses. 
When I saw the prompt words I was going to pass this by. So many prompted rhymes have the ability to feel like they were forced to complete the task. I'm happy to report I got over that feeling after the first few lines. Not one of those forced-fed poems, trying to fit within certain prompt words. 
My first Impression:
Keeping my Attention:
The mysterious mirror was a fine addition to the Bush House. It gave it a magical quality and built up the reader's curiosity all the more!
Techniques and Suggestions?
Actually, I didn't come away from this story feeling it was any less impressive than your many blood curdling horror stories. 
Simple and clear cut. Put all the death row thoughts behind. Put all the emotions this man is going through on a back burner for a moment. What really is deep-down frightening and chills the very core of my soul, is the fact that this man is truly innocent.
I know that death row can last for years. Appeals and waiting for them just seem to drag on. However, there comes a time in one's life where there must be closure. Here, our inmate gave up hope of ever being saved. Despair was his everyday on death row, with no end in site -- until it was!
Accepting his fate was the present, he felt relieved that he would no longer suffer the wait, and live without a dream of hope.
He went out with no remorse, as he was innocent. He also went out finding the secret revealed! As for us? We must all wait our turn, however it appears to us. The end is guaranteed.
I noticed this was created using particular prompts named after very popular horror/supernatural movies. Not easy to do when talking about a farmer during his growing season. 
Yes, I agree. There is much wisdom that can be learned by listening to the reasoning of a farmer. He knows how to provide from using the world of nature before him.
This photo is gorgeous! Love the Mexican shoreline framed by two palm trees. I could almost feel the warm breezes. The quality is lovely, seeing that the star of the Title can be seen in her rising glory. Good shot of Venus, there. It's also romantic as I spy tow branches reaching out and touching the other's palm leaves. Another great point about it!
This story had an adventurous side, Sci-Fi to give it some time-travel qualities and a setting that brought in the dark side.
Norman is a very determined man. He continues his mission no matter how dangerous it could be for him. I liked him and was curious about what he was trying o accomplish. 
There are so many layers of the story to keep in mind. The umbrella is helpful marker for the place he needed to be and the boots had the power to reach the past. Perfect timing requires the exact spot to be placed at the right time. After many "misses" Norman finally, with the help of Ariel, gets to where he wants to be so he could try to change the past.
Unique Interpretation of the Picture Prompt:
The boy was a lovable individual and he had a fine sense of humor (evident at the end) that had probably been masked by the other issues he had to deal with regarding his Autism Spectrum Disorder. It showed the reader how tough it is when a loved one is super sensitive to everyday things that most of us don't pay any attention to. Besides his social issues with others he had a heightened sensitivity to noise and scents around him.
I loved the boy's interpretation of the drawing that the boy gave to the psychologist who was testing him. 
I got a chuckle out of it. It's a combination of innocence and confidence in his witty response.
I saw no errors that jumped-out at me. 
Picture Prompt Interpretation:
I can't tell you how much you grabbed my attention from the start. But, I'll try. 
You chose a Thriller/Suspense genre, which fit easily within the prompt. The photo, though simple can be fertile within a writer's mind with its interpretation.
You had my attention with those lines. Great opening! My curiosity was raised. I needed to know what sort of mission this man, braving the elements, was so important to brave a day such as this one.
Nope! Found nothing to make me pause.
I wish you gave me more time with the characters, let me savor the moments. 
However, this was a fun and unique interpretation of the picture prompt. Thanks again for entering. Love seeing you at The Bard's Hall!
It's a complicated plot to try to cover within 2000 words. It would, however, make for a noteworthy longer story where the characters would be fleshed-out thus allowing the reader the opportunity to get to know the character and visualize her better.
This mystery begs to be lengthened and perhaps find itself in a novella or book. There is enough going on in it to be able to do that. Might be an idea worth considering when NaNo Writing Month comes around. 
Starr was quite a character. I like how she defends not quitting smoking while pregnant because the shock to her system could harm her baby. 
This was a hilarious read, thus, I am highlighting it in this week's Comedy Newsletter! 
Sounds a lot like me. Except, my sweet Volvo SUV is a 2005! 
I loved the way you described just how much attention the wife paid to her new " Yes, car-love can be difficult to overcome -- or compete with! 
I loved the ending. Hey, he's had enough of her giving all her attention to her new love. Sometimes revenge is best served cold, and this proves it as her hubby shows off his hot cutie! 
I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "
Love the quote by Harlan Ellison! 
I found the ending clever. Questioning the birth of the universe and then actually becoming the beginning of the universe to become time as we know it. I had to twist my mind around that one. However, you did a mighty fine job with the past/future way home prompt. 
I am also reviewing this item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review generator.
Oooh, I like when that happens. Take the simple story and bring it to a stunning conclusion. It will make a reader remember this story long after leaving the page! 
