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Review of Mark  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
QAmazing description of the bar scenes, the effect of booze, Mark's preference as he aged and how he aged. Intriguing..
Write on!
Zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very nice. When the blood trail changed to green, I got really curious. Nice narration too. Good use of engaging the five senses of the reader.
Write on!
zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I disppeared with this line:
Putrid taste on my tongue. Burning in my throat. Tingling in my legs, arms, torso. I looked down. And saw nothing
:)
Nice. I always wondered what it was like!
And nice job with the footprints. I liked it. You could elongate this into a nice mystery piece.
Write on
Zubia
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Review of The Other Side  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
Sweet. I would print it on a sticker or a banner for my work space, if I were you:)
Zubia
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Review of Giving In  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Thats so true my friend. All you get to do is sacrifice more. Giving in. I could picture the kalaedoscope of life in those leaves. Beatufil graphics too, added to the appeal.
Write on!
Zubia
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Review of 8 x 10  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
Indeed, a picture is worth a tousand words. Your poem described the 8 X 10 frame so well.
Write on
Zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your first line is gripping. Blue cloudy marble is a good metaphor!
Wish you were with your children, especially after thei rmom died!
Write on Friend!
Merry Christmas
Zubia
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Review of A Special Brother  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am out of words.
Just to let you know, I sent out a prayer for your brother. He is why we have peace.
Write on
Zubia
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Review of The Lost Calf  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice. You seem to write about animals in a detailed manner. It makes your story informative. Nice story with a satisfying Christmas Spirit!
Write on
Zubia
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Review of Sand  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
YEs, thats the spirit. Thanks for the uplifting in the end. We should learn to trust life again. When one door closes, the other opens. The best line was when you said that you had nothing left to fear....
Write on!
Zubia
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Review of The Search  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
You captured my attention with your fairy tale beginning. I just found one typo
"The biggest whole at the bottom is its mouth, the smaller one above it is the nose and the two holes ...." Whole should be spelt as hole..
Nice use of the prompt. I loved the story.
Write on
zubia
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Review of I am  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I like your stanza that says
I seem to be nothing more than a whisper among the trees,

however, I’m the powerfully loud thunder that crashes through the valley,

perhaps even your nightmares.

You seem to be everywhere. Good job in the metaphors. You seem to think and write insightfully.
Write on!
Zubia
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Review of Tender Love  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (3.5)
Short and sweet. This is a rare friendship:)
Write on!
Zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I liked this line
Strained eyes leak tear drops, and lips let life escape.
and
My soul begins to uncoil and claw away from my corpse.
And of course how you used the deceiving words Just dance baby dance...
Write on my friend
Zubia
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Review of Old Fogies  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.0)
Not bad at all. I am glad your tone changed from bitter to light hearted in the end. Write on!
Zubia
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Review of Up! Up! and...  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.0)
The punch line was good. I hope they find the cat. Hot air balloon was a good idea:)
Write on!
Zubia
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Review of A Scary Story  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
So he joined the witches?? That was good. And the chant was good too,.
Write on...
Zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
You know, I really needed to know about this. Thank you so vry much. Your personal input in this gives me confidence.
Thank you
Zubia
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Review of The Summoning  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I find this story metaphorical. Its ironic and ties the words of the prompt so wel. Great job!!
Write on mate
Zubia
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Review of Her Kept Promise  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You describe the setting in a way that I feel the events unraveling around me. I think the setting fits the current weather, making it more enjoable and real.
Write
on
Zubia
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Review of A Way To Escape  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed the ride, thank you. You invoked all senses in this poem..
Write on!
Zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was a grim typo with grave consequences:)
Funny for us though!!
Write on
Zubia
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Review of An Echo  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the use of font here. Gives a deeper message to your words. Its like illustrations. The last line is also gripping.
Write on my dear:)
Zubia
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Review of Here I am  
Review by Restless Soul
Rated: E | (4.5)
Amaziing. Please keep writing. Your story was so smoothly told in a poem...
Zubia
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Review by Restless Soul
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is hilarious, hahahahaha:)
Thank you
Zubia
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