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11 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
I'm flexible to give you the kind of review you ask for. You want me to focus on grammar, I can do that. You want me to focus on content, I can do that. I do tend to think about whether you're work is accomplishing what you intend it to. If you want to rile people up but your writing is too peaceful, I'll tell you.
I'm good at...
I'm good at grammar and style but I'm best at overall story structure. I can tell you where to begin and end a story and in what order the different parts of the story should be. Typically the best stories are mostly chronological but have some story parts strategically moved out of chronological sequence.
Favorite Genres
My favorite genres are spiritual, allegory, and relationship
Least Favorite Genres
My least favorite genres are pure action and horror
Favorite Item Types
I prefer reading interactives, prose or story
I will not review...
I probably won't review poetry or any writing that doesn't contain at least some spirituality or relationship issue. I also probably won't review superficial romances but would love a story about deeper relationships with greater loyalty.
Public Reviews
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Review by bejjinks
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The survey displays only a basic understanding of domestic violence.
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Review by bejjinks
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well balanced poll.
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Review by bejjinks
Rated: E | (2.0)
You need more options for "partially agree." It's the all or nothing stands that are causing all the controversy.
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Review of Why! Why! Why!  
Review by bejjinks
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
The real reason is because ugly gay men and older gay men are so shunned even by other gay men that they go back into the closet.
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Review of Homophobia  
Review by bejjinks
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
This poll is a little too simplistic.

1. There are homosexuals who are homophobic despite how hypocritical that is.

2. There are different kinds of homophobia. Someone could "not care" whether you are gay or not but would they share a locker room with you, trust their kids in your care, give you a hug, etceteras.
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Review by bejjinks
Rated: E | (1.5)
Good concepts but poor execution.

1.The first sentence is the most important. You must grab your reader's attention. Start with describing your emotional state instead of starting with describing the time.

2. It is wordy. I think it would be better to get rid of excess words. Shorter sentences are more lively. Often words that end in -ly can be deleted and make your sentences more dynamic.

3. It should be more descriptive. People will care more about the color of your bike than they will about the specific make, model and age of your bike. All adjectives should be used to say more than just a description. For example, the color of your bike says something about your personality.
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Review by bejjinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
The last question needs clarification. If I am gifted a paid membership, do I have to downsize when the gift expires?
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Review of Slow Down  
Review by bejjinks
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like it. It's fun and mildly humorous. It's got a good rhythm that could easily be set to music.


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