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*Penbl* Author: Tam - 月満ちて          [Feb 26, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Young Adult :: Other
*Penr* Details: Wondering if this is too confusing/vague - or just boring - for a first chapter. This is a completely new opening to an old novella I'm considering redoing.

 Sapphire and Ruby  (13+)
Prince Thorn's position is put in jeopardy with one mistake.
#2113155 by Tam - 月満ちて

*Penbl* Author: J. Robert Kane          [Feb 26, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Horror/Scary :: Dark :: Death
*Penr* Details: A new short, looking for any and all feedback. Thank you in advance!
  [Short Story]

Sister Soleil and the One Truth  (18+)
A dying witch can be a real mother...
#2113421 by J. Robert Kane

*Penbl* Author: John Pen          [Feb 25, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Action/Adventure :: Other
*Penr* Details: I am looking for a review of my first story. It is a sc-fi short story aimed at examining human nature beyond the rosy view of space colonization portrayed today. The product is in a finished draft form. Any feedback is helpful. Thanks.
  [Short Story]

 Adelphus  (13+)
A look at what happens when we colonize far into the galaxy.
#2113388 by John Pen

*Penbl* Author: Improxablity          [Feb 25, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Contest Entry :: Biographical :: Other
*Penr* Details: This is a contest entry about one of my heros.

 Unseen Secret  (E)
History Entry - A magical world seen thru the eyes of a genius
#2112540 by Improxablity

*Penbl* Author: Perhaps          [Feb 24, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Mythology :: Inspirational :: Community
*Penr* Details: The mind can make heaven of hell, and hell of heaven.

 Insert title here  (E)
Free your mind
#2105379 by Perhaps

*Penbl* Author: Perhaps          [Feb 24, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Community :: Cultural :: History
*Penr* Details: Free your mind...

 Serpent lies...  (E)
How do you begin to explain something so reality shattering?
#2110735 by Perhaps

*Penbl* Author: Eogin          [Feb 24, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Mystery :: Teen :: Tragedy
*Penr* Details: Hey. A beginning of the story. I hope you like it, and be sure to tell me if you don't. YOUR opinion matters to me :)

 No Wings  (13+)
A boy tries to survive his mind and his problems. First two chapters. [2k words]
#2113282 by Eogin

*Penbl* Author: John Yossarian          [Feb 24, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Horror/Scary :: Dark :: Supernatural
*Penr* Details: I'd love some takes on this latest horror :)
  [Short Story]

The House On Wickum Lane  (18+)
A sheriff and his old friend meet at their childhood haunt
#2113158 by John Yossarian

*Penbl* Author: Dave J          [Feb 24, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Dark :: Psychology :: Other
*Penr* Details: Would like an honest review and suggestions. It is my first short story. I am still working on polishing it up. Really need help near the beginning, it is marked (more here).
  [Short Story]

 Amy  (E)
After Dan lost his wife, his daughter Amy, gets an unexpected visitor.
#2113259 by Dave J

*Penbl* Author: Dutchy          [Feb 24, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Action/Adventure :: Nature :: Comedy
*Penr* Details: Any and all reviews are appreciated
  [Short Story]

 Bare in the Bush  (E)
An encounter in nature unexpected and humorous.
#2113195 by Dutchy

*Penbl* Author: BBK          [Feb 23, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Inspirational :: Relationship
*Penr* Details: I've made a couple of edits and have changed the ending. I'm looking for honest reviews as I've entered a contest. Does the flow retain interest? Are the characters well-defined (focus is purposely on the female)? Mechanics? Liked most/least? Thanks
  [Short Story]

Affection?  (E)
Short story about a girl's affection and empowerment, based on true life events
#2110778 by BBK

*Penbl* Author: olrazzledazzle          [Feb 22, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Crime/Gangster :: Mystery :: Thriller/Suspense
*Penr* Details: Please give me your honest opinion. I'd really like to know if it's too short and if there's not enough description and if the descriptions are good enough.

 Monster Blood Chapter One  (13+)
The first chapter in what I hope to be a published noir mystery novel
#2113088 by olrazzledazzle

*Penbl* Author: slowmotionsunset          [Feb 22, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Animal :: Emotional :: Contest
*Penr* Details: Not doing a whole lot of writing lately (school). Looking for a review of my most recent poem!

 Chester's Bookshop  (E)
A tabby cat finds comfort in books.
#2108780 by slowmotionsunset

*Penbl* Author: Javed_Hayat          [Feb 22, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Gothic :: Death :: Dark
*Penr* Details: I literally daydreamed my way into this piece of flash fiction.

Stories in the Dirt  (E)
Flash Fiction
#2111470 by Javed_Hayat

*Penbl* Author: Apologizing Adolescent          [Feb 21, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Mythology :: Romance/Love :: None
*Penr* Details: I wrote this a bit ago

 From Eros to His Beloved  (E)
For his love is so strong
#2112948 by Apologizing Adolescent

*Penbl* Author: Boogie15          [Feb 21, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Thriller/Suspense :: Other :: Other
*Penr* Details: This is the first half of a story I've been working on. Would like some general feedback and most importantly would like to know if you guys would read more! Thanks!!
  [Short Story]

 Isolation   (13+)
Thriller/suspense. A man and his dog face a sinister foe.
#2112270 by Boogie15

*Penbl* Author: bermanrl          [Feb 20, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Dark :: Fantasy :: Folklore
*Penr* Details: Some of the best storylines can be found in the folklore, legends, and ghosts that live around us.
This is a twisted tale of a critter with a blue tail. The tale wants an imaginative reader. Enjoy.
  [Short Story]

 The Skink King  (ASR)
A warped and twisted interpretation of a Grimm tale.
#2112704 by bermanrl

*Penbl* Author: Sarah Rae          [Feb 20, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Young Adult :: Fantasy :: Romance/Love
*Penr* Details: I recently uncovered this older writing and I'm planning to dig in and finish it. Feedback before I get too far would be greatly appreciated!

 The Dancing Curse - Part 1  (ASR)
The war ends, but Cara's dreams of a bright future are dashed when she learns the price
#2112845 by Sarah Rae

*Penbl* Author: Dutchy          [Feb 19, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Nature :: None :: None
*Penr* Details: Any and all feedback welcome and appreciated.

 River Rock  (E)
The inevitable passage of time for us is fleeting - for the rock- time is forever
#2112779 by Dutchy

*Penbl* Author: Poeros          [Feb 19, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Dark :: Death :: Paranormal
*Penr* Details: Trying to write something from the mind of a predator, but not from the vampire point of view. Looking for general feedback or suggestions. Any are welcome and well rewarded with GP :)

 Predator among Us  (18+)
A predator moves among the human's, but this one is welcomed in it's hunt.
#2112795 by Poeros

*Penbl* Author: Milo Prevo          [Feb 19, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Action/Adventure :: Supernatural
*Penr* Details: My first chapter. Any feedback welcome. Thank you.

 Unwanted adventure: Chapter 1 Beginnings  (13+)
Gayle is a sorcerer caught in a war between two kingdoms while trying to find acceptance.
#2112733 by Milo Prevo

*Penbl* Author: Apologizing Adolescent          [Feb 18, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Experience :: Emotional :: None
*Penr* Details: please review

 I Don't Know What It's Like  (E)
you know... the feeling
#2112734 by Apologizing Adolescent

*Penbl* Author: RisanF          [Feb 18, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Young Adult :: Friendship :: Romance/Love
*Penr* Details: Looking for reviews on my revised novella (story and characters). WILL RETURN REVIEWS for each chapter.

Different and Cool (2017)  (13+)
Andrew Champion is given a special project, partnered with the geekiest girl in school
#2112713 by RisanF

*Penbl* Author: Chasing Grace          [Feb 18, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Drama :: Inspirational :: Other
*Penr* Details: Any thoughts are appreciated. I have edited this, after requesting an earlier review. I am planning on expanding this to a bigger piece. Thank you in advance!

 A Petulant Life  (E)
Violet lived life on the edge... No one would get the best her... no one except herself..
#2096571 by Chasing Grace

*Penbl* Author: K.HBey          [Feb 18, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Emotional :: Dark
*Penr* Details: I am always pleased to know what impressions get others about my writing.Indeed I am looking for a honest and an objective review.I think strongly that someone needs to situate the work according to and among others.The purpose is to promote my writing.

You are still in my spirit  (18+)
Obsessional love, unforgotten and inspiring fidelity even the deep suffering sad feelings
#2112246 by K.HBey

*Penbl* Author: taylor paape          [Feb 18, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Experience :: Biographical :: None
*Penr* Details: Looking for reviews

 God's Mistake  (13+)
He thinks about his lonely past
#1360014 by taylor paape

*Penbl* Author: Leslie Loo          [Feb 17, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Contest Entry :: Comedy :: Romance/Love
*Penr* Details: This story is for a contest, so please give some helpful, honest feedback. It would be very appreciated. Also, I need some suggestions on the title. Thank you!

I Love You, Darnell!  (13+)
A contest entry for The Dialogue 500
#2112613 by Leslie Loo

*Penbl* Author: Daniel Curry          [Feb 17, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Drama :: Romance/Love :: Tragedy
*Penr* Details: Need some motivation to finish this one, and so any critique / review would be much appreciated. Thanks in advance.

Viewfinder  (13+)
If you can feel it, who cares if it's real or not?
#2065921 by Daniel Curry

*Penbl* Author: Grayson Moon          [Feb 16, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Thriller/Suspense :: Young Adult :: Psychology
*Penr* Details: Any and all reviews are appreciated.

Rune: Chapter 1  (13+)
Olivia, her brother, and father are caught in an accident. Or is it an accident?
#2112086 by Grayson Moon

*Penbl* Author: Lisa Angelo          [Feb 15, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Sci-fi :: Action/Adventure
*Penr* Details: Looking for feedback on clarity and pacing. Thanks!
  [Short Story]

The Hope Tree  (E)
A bit post-apocalyptic, a bit fantasy, a tiny bit sci-fi...
#2112377 by Lisa Angelo

*Penbl* Author: Fifthwood          [Feb 15, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Action/Adventure :: Sci-fi :: Other
*Penr* Details: Any feedback will help. Thank you. I pay lots of GPs.
  [Short Story]

Corporate Wars: Retrieval  (18+)
John Carrio must retrieve the data that was stolen during his last job.
#2104153 by Fifthwood

*Penbl* Author: A. N. Craddock          [Feb 13, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Action/Adventure :: Romance/Love :: Supernatural
*Penr* Details: I'm looking for serious reviews on this (did it make sense without reading the prologue, what did you think of the pacing, what was your overall opinion, etc). This is a rough draft, so please ignore any spelling or grammar mistakes.

 Grim : Chapter 1  (13+)
Rayne learns who ordered her capture.
#2112166 by A. N. Craddock

*Penbl* Author: Emvy          [Feb 12, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Emotional :: Sci-fi :: Death
*Penr* Details: I'm looking for feedback on 1) If you felt a connection to the main character or cared about her and 2) If the major incident happened too quickly. My original conception took the idea further, but I decided to try this minimal approach first.
  [Short Story]

 Emotional Response  (13+)
Reina's heart is broken when she sees something horrible happen to her crush.
#2112101 by Emvy

*Penbl* Author: PureSciFiPlus - Happy Feb 14          [Feb 12, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Inspirational :: Thriller/Suspense :: Drama
*Penr* Details: I don't think I have any missing words, punctuation errors. or misspelled words. But if I do I need to know about them before I enter this contest. GPs rewarded for each review.
  [Short Story]

 Falling Down, Standing Up  (18+)
Most rain you can drive through without anything happening. This storm isn't one of them.
#2112094 by PureSciFiPlus - Happy Feb 14

*Penbl* Author: MysteryBox          [Feb 12, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Horror/Scary :: Action/Adventure :: Sci-fi
*Penr* Details: Any feedback would be appreciated. I'm not sure where I'm taking this story yet, but Id love to hear your thoughts.

Attack of the Invisible Aliens! - Ch. 1  (13+)
A group of survivors hide out in an deserted school building.
#2112014 by MysteryBox

*Penbl* Author: A. N. Craddock          [Feb 10, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Action/Adventure :: Romance/Love :: Supernatural
*Penr* Details: I did the thing that shouldn't be done and kept going back to this, so now I'm numb to it. Honest and helpful opinions needed! Please disregard grammar and spelling mistakes. I'll take care of those later!

 Grim : Prologue (Rewrite)  (13+)
Koien finds a sketchbook.
#2111809 by A. N. Craddock

*Penbl* Author: ParadoX          [Feb 9, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Entertainment :: Other
*Penr* Details: Looking for proofreading help. Also considering an alternate ending in which the protagonist dies. Any advice is welcome.
  [Short Story]

Unkind Weather  (E)
A man stumbles into an unfamiliar world
#2111646 by ParadoX

*Penbl* Author: SoldierBoy          [Feb 8, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Dark :: Tragedy :: Crime/Gangster
*Penr* Details: I don't like zombie stories or movies, But this one insisted on being written, It's not particularly scary. The end is left hanging but I'm not sure if there is anywhere else for it to go. I was trying to build some charactersm scenery and dialogue.
  [Short Story]

 One of our zombies is missing  (13+)
Not like any zombie story you have ever seen
#2108734 by SoldierBoy

*Penbl* Author: Rmkv          [Feb 8, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Young Adult :: Other
*Penr* Details: Is this something you'd want to read more of? What about it appeals the most, and the least? Thank you in advance!
  [Short Story]

 Princess Diaries  (E)
The musings of a princess locked up in a tower
#2111494 by Rmkv

*Penbl* Author: Talia Drake          [Feb 8, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Fantasy :: Action/Adventure :: Young Adult
*Penr* Details: This is the first chapter of my novel, which is still very much in progress. I'd love some feedback to see if I'm on the right track. My prologue to this is also in my portfolio, if interested. You can ignore spelling and grammar.

 The Angel's Locket - Chapter 1  (E)
Talia and Casey find a note from their Dad.
#2111483 by Talia Drake

*Penbl* Author: willy          [Feb 8, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Contest Entry :: Comedy :: Drama
*Penr* Details: I've had another play with this. What do you think?
  [Short Story]

 Three Little Words And The Candy Man  (18+)
A chance meeting results in wedded bliss, set in 2030 - a dialogue only piece.
#2111090 by willy

*Penbl* Author: Kain Highwind          [Feb 7, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Sci-fi :: Fantasy :: Action/Adventure
*Penr* Details: Just looking for any opinions. Thanks in advance.

 The Star of Adam (Chapter 1)  (18+)
Visions of Chaos and Dreams for the Future
#2106578 by Kain Highwind

*Penbl* Author: Robert Rene          [Feb 7, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Friendship :: Emotional
*Penr* Details: Feel free to be as honest as you like.

 Dark Tears  (E)
#2111408 by Robert Rene

*Penbl* Author: ExChad          [Feb 7, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Paranormal :: Teen :: Action/Adventure
*Penr* Details: Any feed back would be helpful.

 Prologue: The Pressure  (E)
This is a prologue to a potential series about a group of empowered teens living in hiding
#2109149 by ExChad

*Penbl* Author: Bruce.          [Feb 7, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Thriller/Suspense :: Other
*Penr* Details: Anne and Monica share a chapter.

 My Mate Monica. Ch 7.  (18+)
Dave makes his planned move on Anne.
#1981530 by Bruce.

*Penbl* Author: Fifthwood          [Feb 6, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Supernatural :: Fantasy :: Dark
*Penr* Details: Would love any feedback. I pay well.

The Hunted -- Chp. 1  (18+)
On a hunting trip a senator discovers a hunter of legend.
#2108179 by Fifthwood

*Penbl* Author: Rmkv          [Feb 6, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Relationship :: Nonsense :: Fanfiction
*Penr* Details: Based on something that has always made me smile. Wrote it really long back with a self imposed word limit of 500. But I think that has contributed to a certain jerkiness in the story. Please do comment. :)
  [Short Story]

 Etched in time  (E)
A love story like no other
#2111315 by Rmkv

*Penbl* Author: Listener70          [Feb 6, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Experience :: Other :: Other
*Penr* Details: Waking up, at least some days.

Chaos Awakening  (E)
Some mornings are just difficult.
#2093584 by Listener70

*Penbl* Author: Bob Baker - Quill Nominee!          [Feb 5, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Romance/Love :: Relationship :: Gay/Lesbian
*Penr* Details: This is a brief, relationship/love story that involves members of minority groups. I'm particularly interested to know if anything I've written is either offensive or implausible or both. Thank you! Bob :D
  [Short Story]

The Librarian  (18+)
Jess believes she's stumbled upon her soulmate in the library - for Quotation Inspiration.
#2111103 by Bob Baker - Quill Nominee!

*Penbl* Author: Chowtyme          [Feb 4, 2017]
*BookStack3* Genre(s): Comedy :: Drama :: Animal
*Penr* Details: Looking for some feedback on this short piece. Impressions, suggestions, and comments all welcomed and appreciated!
  [Short Story]

The Persistent Mr. Monroe  (13+)
Between predator and pray as the Sunday go-to-meetin' crowd watches on.
#2109656 by Chowtyme

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