The fact that you can write a short story about a fictional dream and make it seem like a real experience shows talent. I 've had dreams though about someone who was close to my heart when he or she was alive and you do wonder if it was just a dream or real. The feelings of love, closeness, and seemingly being given another chance to see and be with the person at time are so real that all you want to do is just hold onto those precious feelings for as long as you can, but then reality sets in. I enjoyed this story. It was universal and one I know a lot of people can relate to. Good Job!
This is a very nice peom. One that I'm sure a lot of people can identify with. The hurt is there and can be felt which shows that you did a good job in protraying the emotions in the poem to reader. Very good work.
Your voice is so vivid in this poem. A wonderful description of how you feel about the winter and the moon. A lovely sight you painted for the reader. Thank you for sharing.
A good poem. Your descriptions here are phenomenal. I'm not much on middle eastern garb, but your mentioning the burkha gives one the glismp into the middle east and its culture. The flow of your peom was good. Yours words very sincere.
I liked this poem very much. The rhyme was very good and flowed well. I didn't have a lot of friends in school, but this took me back to the 8th grade and one friend in particular who I shall never forget, but too nothing last forever. Very good job.
I like your words here and they are inspirational. I especially loved the last three lines:
Ah, and Looking back.... is only for day dreams
So I’ll pack up my dreams I’ll be on my way
Ah, cause looking back... is only for day dreams
"Looking back ... is only for day dreams" - those words are creative and encourages one in a situation like this, not to hang on to past, but to know that looking back is just for day dreams - sends a message of hope and deliverance. The hope: that one can be free from lingering in the past hurts: thinking about the past relationship is not meant for you to linger there to the point of hopelessness and the deliverance: to know that "looking back" is just for daydreaming not imprisonment.
I understand your sentiment, but this item needs a lot of work. Some of your words run together and some of thoughts are not clear. If you reread this and maybe out loud, you'll see what I'm talking about.
I love rainy days. I liked your rhyme and how you described rain on a rainy day. This poem is very vivid from the sight of rain all around to one jumping in the puddles fo mud with laughter to walking through the town with rain falling on your head, everything is so vivid which spells good creativity to me.
Very poetic!! Without hope for a better place, life would be fruitless. You done a good job depicting man's quest for freedom from this fragill life that we now live.
Your dipiction of nature and its beauty is awsome. Sometimes I forget to look around and see the wonders that God has created for us to enjoy, but when I do see a lot beauty in this cruel world. Your rhyme is is very, very good. Every line flows wells with the one before and after it. Very good job. It's hard to believe that this is a newbie seeing how you write so well from your perceptions and thoughts.
When one is gone things can't replace the love, the committment that two people shared. This poem was a little confusing at first, but when I reread it, it became more clear. I liked your choice of words to descibe the love once shared here.
Very nicely written. Very emotional indeed. Your description of your hurt and pain is very vivid. Your choice of adjectives descripting your feelings is very good. I especially liked the last line: "My world spins on tilt;
endlessly out of control.
Well, i liked each poem, but I'm not good at reviewing such fine work. I thank you for sharing what type of format each poem follows though. I think I'll my hand at writing a poem in Limerick format. It was easiest one for me to follow. All in all very good work.
This poem was very refreshing and lesson to those who may have forgotten where they came from. Just wondering is country girl a beautiful blond? Your peom flows well and your rhyme is very good. It keeps beat from the beginning to the end.
Summer nights did it for me. I can relate to this nice summer night scene. This is summer nights. Very good description. One can see himself or herself there - basking in this wonderful picture of summer nights.
Very Good.
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