I likeed this because the colors of authumn were vibrant and colorful. I also liked the way you described the change of seasons. I could feel the autuum breeze, the cold, the harden ground, and the falling snow. Very good. Happy writing.
You should sit down and have an honest talk with them (roommate, co-workers, and friends) and explain how you feel. The same way you poured your heart out here, do the same thing with them. Tell them that they're negative commetts are begining to affect your way of life in terms of your wanting to tell them off. Tell them that that is not your style and ask them if they would stop with the negative remarks. If it continues maybe you could ask your boss (or your character could if this is a character) to transfer you to another department. As for the friends, if they continue maybe you should pray and ask God to help them to change or look for new friends. I'm not an expert in this field: giving advice, but thank you for asking and I hope this helps.
I liked this story very much. You put your heart into it. A couple of small spelling errors., but overall very good item.
Happy writing.
PS: Above all you should continue to show them love. The Bible says that love covers a mulitude of sins and it also says don't do evil for evil. Keep your self clean. If none of the above works, just ignore them if you can. Maybe if they see that you could care less about their negative commetts about you and that you're still is going to be you, they'll quit making them.
Your rhyme was wonderful, but I think the last two lines in the first stanza should be:
This is a story about truth, and unending love;
a story of strenth, and a golden glove.
Also, in the second stanza, I think the last three lines should read:
The story of a maiden, who questioned why,
and the story of a dream, the maiden dreamt
of reuniting with her lover, and dreams of regret.
Finally, in the last stanza, "goddess" should never be associated with them being heaven because I don't think that are goddesses in heaven (I understand that some people would chanllege this claim) and some might chanllege your claim that there are. Anyone who knows the Bible would probably be offended by this claim and to some it seem like a lie which in turn would probably take away some of your rating for the poem.
In addition, I think that you talked more about the two lovers than you did about the "Golden Glove" which I assume is what you were suppose to write about. Don't get me wrong, I think that the tale about the two lovers in the poem is good, but you talked more about them than you did the subject, but this was an interesting and nice story.
I don't mean to rude, but I failed to see the humor in this story. I think you wrote a nice account of your panic of having to buy clothes for your Aunt, but I failed to see the humor. I'm not a expert, but maybe you need to redo the story. Your flow was good, but there wasn't any humor. Happy Writing though, we all need help.
I agree with your definition of love. You wrote this very well. Love is can be good, but it can be bad expecially for those who love so much that jealousy causes them to do irrational things to their lover, but every time I see a little child, it lets me know that there is still a lot of love in this world from God. Good Job! Happy Writing!
Wow! This is very romantic and powerful. A lot love. A man's kiss if it's the right person can have this kind of effect on a woman and vice versa. You did a good good in presenting this message. I especially liked these two lines:
Kiss me so that I may live,
That I may breathe.
and these:
Kiss me for I am dead without it,
Kiss me.
Very good! Happy Writing!
I liked this, but I'm trying to figure out why you would say like the Angels Kisses Wither"? I liked the rhyme it was very good. I also like your arrangment of the poem on the page, but I'm still trying to figure out why you said, "Let the angels's kisses wither. If you don't mind could you explain this? Good job.
It's, sad, but I know that there are a lot people who have had the same experience. Very good writing and very emotional. In situations like this, the reader sometimes don't how to respone especially if it's a true story. If it's fictional. Very well written.
Happy Writing!!
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