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Impression: Again this poem says it all in very few well chosen words.
Technical suggestions: I feel tht there is room perhaps to expand on this theme a little. I really like the way you have refered to yourself in the theme of this poem and feel that there are other specific characteristics of poetry that you could use in comparison.
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Impression: This poem is so sad. You have managed to convey a great depth of feeling with a few well chosen words here. I always think that a writer is doing their job properly if they can make the reader feel something. You have certainly achieved that with this piece.
Technical suggestions:I have no technical suggestions
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Impression: I thought that your poem was very lyrical and that it flowed well. I felt that the intermittent use of a single word line to add emphasis was very effective.
Technical suggestions: I was wondering why you have spaced it as you have as I found this a little off putting whilst reading. I don't think that it needs double spacing, although You may want to space the single word lines for added emphasis.
I enjoyed reading your work.
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Impression: I like the sentiment expressed in this poem. If only more of us could accept ourselves for who we are.
Technical suggestions: I felt that the variation of lines in the different stanzas effected the rhythm of this piece a little. You might consider a couple of extra lines to help the flow. I also noticed that you have this piece posted twice!
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Impression: I always find it very hard to review lyrics as I always feel that I need to hear them with the music to fully appreciate them. I love the chorus it is so lyrical and the imagery is very vivid and effective.
Technical suggestions:'we'll take off in flight' I felt that this might flow better as 'take off and fly' however without the music it is very difficult to judge!
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Impression: This is a well written sad and heartfelt poem. The feelings you describe are eloquently expressed. I hope that things have improved for you since you wrote this poem.
Technical suggestions:I noticed a typo in the intro. You have misspelled depression in the title.
I enjoyed reading your poem
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Impression: I loved the way that this poem flowed. It has an almost lyrical quality to it. I felt myself carried away by the words.
Technical suggestions: I felt that the end did not flow quite as well as the rest of the piece. The penultimate line mentions the final word and this is only a personal opinion (so please feel free to ignore) but I felt that it should end with just the single final word 'goodbye'
I enjoyed your poem
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Impression: I really enjoyed your poem about the wolf. It is a sad fact but I think that many of us at times feel like the wolf in this poem. I thought that the repitition of the last line of each verse was very effective.
Technical suggestions: I felt that the meter faltered in a couple of places. Some of the lines seemed a little too long.
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Impression: This is a heart wrenching piece of writing about your experience of abuse. It is very hard to know what to say when reviewing a piece like this. I felt that this was a well written piece allowing the reader an insight to a very personal piece of your life. I find that writing is therapeutic and hope that you find the courage to finish this piece of writing for yourself even if you choose not to share it with others.
Technical suggestions: 'of five years..' I detected an extra space here.
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Impression: I found your description of your cat very vivid and your love for her was obvious in your writing. I found myself easily able to visualise you petting her, feeding her and looking after.
Technical suggestions: I feel that you need to have a look at your grammar in a few places. For example:
'she peeped out for a Christmas photo from us.' This sounds as though you are giving the cat a photo rather than taking one of her. My suggestion would be ...'for us to take a Christmas photo of her.' However This is your piece and you must do what feels right to you.
I enjoyed reading your work.
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Impression: This is a very interesting idea for a story. I particularly liked the twist at the end. I knew that something wasn't quite right, but I wasn't expecting that!
Technical suggestions: 'maid who cleaned the room,' I wondered about this sentence, whether you meant the particular maid who cleaned room 209 or, if there was one maid who cleaned all the rooms. Just out of interest please could you tell me what Fluff is? I'm from the UK and fluff is what you find under the couch when you havn't cleaned for a while and I'm sure that you wouldn't want that in a sandwich..lol ! Thank you.
I enjoyed your story.
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Impression:This story had me gripped from begining to end. I found myself easily able to identify with your protagonist. I felt that you had described her feelings and emotions well. I found myself wanting to know more, like what in life got in the way? I really enjoyed this story.
Technical suggestions:I noticed a typo in the last line 'wll' I think is supposed to read 'will'
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Impression:Very wise words. Bringing up a child is probably the hardest job in the world. I agree whole heartedly that we should spend less time trying to understand our children and more time enjoying them for who they are.
Technical suggestions:I noticed no errors and I have no technical suggestions.
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Impression: This is a well written poem about the scars left by a failed relationship. I found my self able to empathise with the speaker easily.
Technical suggestions: Whilst I didn't detect any set meter there were a couple of places that caused a little bump to my ears. However this may well be a result of my 'English' pronounciation of some words.
I enjoyed your poem
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Impression: This is a good short poem about how it feels to be lied to by someone we love. The rhyme and meter are good.
Technical suggestions: I feel that there is a lot of scope for expanding on this theme. I would have liked to have seen more. You could expand the description of the poem on the intro a little to encourage more readers.
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Impression:I enjoyed this lovely poem about the wonders of nature. I found that the descriptive language that you used made it easy for me to visualise all the things that you could see through your window.
Technical suggestions: Some lines begin with capital letters whilst others don't. I think that you meant to only start new sentences with capitals but this sentence
'The smell of the fresh air,
The setting of the sun.' does not follow that pattern.
What ever you decide to do I feel it should be consistent.
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Impression: This is such a beautifully, sad heartfelt poem. The pain and desperation that you felt when writing this are palpable. I really hope that things have improved for you since you wrote this. Living with an addiction is a nightmare for both the sufferer and those that live with them. However much one tries not to it is hard not to blame ourselves. Just remember that addiction is an illness and someone else's struggle is never your fault. Keep strong.
Technical suggestions: None
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Impression: Perfect meter,perfect rhyme, perfect message. What more can I say. I loved this poem form beginning to end. I'm definately adding it to my favorites. As someone who has spent most of their life running away I found your poem inspiring. Thank you
Technical suggestions: I noticed no errors and have no technical suggestions.
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Impression: I love this poem. I think that is extremely well written and that the message within is very relevant and pertinent to all of us.The rhyming is excellent and the rhythm is generally very good throughout.
Technical suggestions:I really wanted to give this poem a 5 because I enjoyed it so much. But there were two lines that caused a little bump to my ears no matter how many times I read them 'We validate because we’ve read our books –
We know we’re right.' The rhythm seems to falter here a little. I guess you could either shorten the first line or perhaps lengthen the second to something along the lines of ' we know that we are right'.
However it is your poem and you must do what feels right to you.
I enjoyed reading your poem.
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Impression: An exciting and engaging story. Just goes to show that you should be careful who you fall for! I felt that you handled the first person narative well and that as a reader I got a real sense of how the protagonist was feeling at all times.
Technical suggestions: I have no technical suggestions.
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Impression: A poem all the way from A through to z !! This is a lovely poem about your boys. I think that you have managed to capture their nature's well in this. I got a picture of happy, fun loving boisterous boys!!
Technical suggestions: A-Z poems are really hard to write and I think that you have done well here although the meter faltered a little in a few places which can be a problem with this form of poetry. I also wondered if in this line 'Holding their hand through strife. hand could perhaps be plural as you are talking about more than one boy. Although this is only a personal opinion.
I enjoyed your poem.
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Impression: This is a very sad poem, and yet there is hope in it to. I particularly like the repeated line tomorrow I will do better. This shows a sense of determination and that there is a belief that you should never give up! The lines about the mirror and the plate make me think that this is a poem about an eating disorder, something that I know alot about which is probably why I was so easily able to relate to this poem. If I'm wrong sorry.
Technical suggestions: None. Keep on writing, it's good for the soul.
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Impression:I love this poem. The imagery that you have used is stunning. I really felt as though I was there in the snow watching and waiting for the world to wake. My favorite part was the line about the snow angels.
Technical suggestions:I didn't notice any errors and have no technical suggestions.
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Impression:I really enjoyed this love poem. I thought that it was well written and I really liked the idea of the way you used the parts of the body.
Technical suggestions: I wasn't sure about your use of ambrosia. As this is the food of the gods I felt that the sense of taste went better with this. I feel that scent goes better with smell. However this is only a personal opinion.
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Impression: I love this poem. It is so hard to write a love poem without it becoming to cliched or sickly sweet (which is probably why I never try!!) You have managed to write the perfect love poem here ( I wish someone would write something like that for me one day........lol!!) Right , now I think I'm going to have to go and read the story.
Technical suggestions:None
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The following comments are intended to be helpful. They are only my personal opinion so please choose to ignore them if you wish. 
Impression: Again this poem says it all in very few well chosen words.
Technical suggestions: I feel tht there is room perhaps to expand on this theme a little. I really like the way you have refered to yourself in the theme of this poem and feel that there are other specific characteristics of poetry that you could use in comparison.
