A very well written piece. A few typos and a lack of punctuation detract from the full impact of the words. (More boundaries I know, but necessary ones) Great use of language and description. Keep writing :)
An excellent piece! Very well written and structured. Your use of descriptive language sets the mood and the cadence is excellent. Well done! Keep writing :)
I like this piece. The philosophy and psychology of the inextricably interwoven thread of bonding between a child and it's parent is wonderment to behold. Yet as you clearly state, that bond is not always returned in full. Well written with good communication to the reader of your thoughts. It struck me as somehow sad and inevitable that this is parenthood. Keep writing :)
A well written piece. A typo just after "pebble drops". It lacks a little cadence and has a few continuity problems, but with a bit of work you could create something even better. Keep writing :)
A nice piece. It needs a little work with spelling and grammar and cadence. Reading your work out loud sometimes helps. You have used some good analogies and descriptions. Keep writing :)
I love this piece. Your use of language excels and your use of quotation marks and slashes enhances the exact nature of your argument in philosophy. It's either/or/and any combination of the above that will bring whatever/however/whomever to that place of today/tomorrow. I find this piece original and tight. Being succinct reinforces its immediacy. Well done! Keep writing :)
I like this piece. Very well written. Succinctly telling so much with a few well chosen words. You have captured the emotion very well with your use of language and the intesity of that language. The language is intense, but the overall feeling is one of acceptance and knowledge. As if you are looking back from another time and place. Keep writing :)
A very emotional piece. Almost fatalistic. I like the way you have no Capital letters or punctuation. It all adds to the "feel" of desolation. Keep writing :)
I like this piece. It's a condemnation of how insular we have become and how we disregard the plight of those less fortunate than ourselves. I especially like "their ignorance cuts like knives". I think that is the truth. This is well written and well paced with an excellent message to us all. Keep writing :)
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