WoW! What an awsome story you have concocted. This was truely very well thought out. I payed very close attention to everything the best I could, and I found a lot of typo's. Mostly words missing here or there. But I found this to be a pretty good read. I also noticed that this too hasn't recieved much attention in the rating wise. It's very late and I'm dead tired, so I will have to finish the reviews I owe you tomorrow.
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Oh my gosh, I'm crying I'm laughing so hard. This was brilliant!! Totally awsome! I have thunk about things like this, but never dreamed of writing it. I have been trying my hardest to write fantasy such as this, but it just doesn't come out well at all. This totally rocks!! The greatest part I liked and could picture so well was:
“Cause if they did, don’t you think Mom would have come up to me one day and said. ‘We need to have a little talk. One day your head is going to pop off, and I’d like you to be ready so that you’ll know what to do.’? I could really use that talk right about now.”
And again, I found no spelling errors.
This deserves a 6.0
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I thought this was way cool!! I loved it all the way through. And you even remembered the sock at the end of the story from the beginning of the story. It was awsome. Really great job!!
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