I like the ending that everything turns out to be fine. How everyone is now rich beyond belief. The most important part is that the money was giving to the architect. They made millions and yet they still love one another. The stock came through without any harm. It is something that I will want to read on a nice day.
It was a great story. You gotten in trouble for just moving into an apartment. You show all the trouble that happen during the hearing of the sound. The next time you move into another apartment. Normally you will believe that the same thing will happen. But this time you will know better. It made you laugh to know all that trouble comes from just hearing a sound.
It a scary short story. The vampire appear even in the doctor office. I'm prettty sure she does believe in the vampire. What if he bite the doctor than she has to run away but he probably doesn't see him behind him. There is plenty ending that will let the story go. Write more it gets instresting.
It a great story. This world has learn a lot of things from the technology that is going around now. It show how a computer can get a virus that will surely put the thing to death. Although you have to be inform of the newest technology is it really neccesity. Life can get some lesson learn but in the end you live your life well. Thank you for writing this story, I has learn a lot from it.
You wrote a good story of how two brothers can feel the same way toward a girl. Yet she can only pick one. The other must suffer the pain that comes with it, while the other feel the happiest of love. Then it the knowledge that God gives to the two to leave one another. Can you see the angels coming when you know not what happen to yourself? Yes God will not leave you in time of troubles.
It is a great story of seeing into death. How she misses Thomas so much that she have to tell her story. She will be remember on for her appearance by Tom. You capture the night great. All the feelings that runs through Tom makes you feels it like you were really there. Continue to write your stories.
Those who know Hypatia may agree with you 100% but those who has just meet with Hypatia will give you an agrugment on if she trying to compare the old world with the new world. There is a different. People no long believe in spells or other things that cannot be told by nature.
It is a sad poem of love that has lost. I hope you finds someone to takes the place of the other and maybe this is your true love. You will always has yourself and they can't destroy that for you.
Its a good horror story. The knife and other stuff fills you mind with what can happen next. You then wonder how in the world with all this stuff can someone turn you down. Well you have to go on with you life and like in all horror stories Tina is the next one in line.
Its lovely how you vision the ocean as you are over it on the bridge. You can see all the inside of the ocean and how it makes people feel inside. You also long for the road to home after being on the bridge. It makes home feel so wonderful to be around.
It is a nice poem of the bards. How they connect in the convention. They talk of things that while drinking their tea. The bards knows they place in the world of writing. Many has written about bards but they has never tells of mostly their names.
Did you really find that written on the bathroom wall. Telling things that they feel and then they realize that what everyone should feel. It goes down till it comes to one last word and it stills gives you the feeling in your veins.
This story tells of a young girl who loses someone special and has to turns her life around to live with the society that her life is entwine with. They expects hight expertation of her and she no doubt has to give it to them. She doesn't wants to do it but she has to in their world.
There is things that you may see twice in your lifetime and dejuv happens. Many people thinks that it is not normal for dejuv to happen but it is something that should happens. That what I think and in your story you seem to don't know what is real and what is just a dream. Once you get it in your mind it'll let you know.
I gives you a 4.5 because I really wants to know if Tom die or not. I know that I should assume that he did because you say that it was last time she saw him. I thinks that the stroy has great characters in it. Is this really true or just made up? Sometimes you should really enjoy writing for young people. This sounds like you do good writing.
Itis a lovely stories. Who will ever guess that the husband picks Droleen? I'm currently surpise that the wife Greta does end up with a parson. It's not a fairy tales but a story with a good ending and a twist no one will expect. Good writing ahead for you.
You shouldn't let people call you that no matter how they means to say it. You is a person that needs to be insure with words other than the words they uses.
It is a nice story of finding each other. Through all the trials that they life went through they seem to always found each other. It is a inspiration to has faith in the person who you is trying to get away from, only to find out that they were always there all the time.
I know that you might think that I shouldn't gave you a 5.0 rating but I like the feeling that you gave. Most all writers goes through that stage. It makes you feels wonderful and know that the worst has pass. There is only one mistake that is in the word sentence in your writing. You wrote sentience insist.
You'll always get through it if you try very hard. You can only hopes for the best through this. It makes you mad that you have to go through it when you just want to get rid of the person. Thinking that he'll understand this and all the time he/she wants you to hink of they ways.
It's a nice poem. I wonder if you're talking about a rose or someone. Being special mean a lot. And to has people who love you is very special. Keep writing you poem and the feelings that you have inside of you.
It was a lovely poem. You the flowers looks so pretty. There is a great thing that came from writing about flowers. You see yourself inside the flower and know that you blossom along with it growth. You can enjoy this poem with a cup of coffee. It was lovely keep writing.
What a sad story. It makes you cry. I wonder how old was the youngster. It's keeps you interest to what every happen to the family. If the youngster every ask them about that night or does he/she grow up try to do what he/she father does.
Its a funny story that Hal was always late even for his own funeral. How could someone be late for their own funeral. Hal found a way. Because the car ran out of gas. Another excuss that Hal will use for begin late. Nice story. It could have been longer.
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