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Review of Deadly Clowns  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)



Review of Deadly Clowns

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I enjoy painting and I understand the difficulty in finding just the right colour. i am not sure that this story meets the scary quality.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This needs more work. It is a good beginning.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Larger font.




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Review of Moving on  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Moving On

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Your writing promises the steps to moving on. I didn`t find these steps. There are a lot of thoughts and general comments but there is no laid out plan. I found it hard to read and understand what your ultimate goal in this writing.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font and better spacing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I think you have a good start. It just needs to be more organized.


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Review of The Cry  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of The Cry

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem about the damage we are doing to the environment in which we live. It is written from the viewpoint of Mother Earth, It is a cry for help. It is a painful lament.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Mother Earth who is being damaged and the rest of us who must choose what we do to assist the environment.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep up the good work.


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Review of Bad Boys Games  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Bad Boy Games

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short story about a relationship that falls apart when the young man starts to cheat. More detail of the positive times would make the failure of the relationship stand out more graphically.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Two major characters, The writer and Antonio. While they are described as being in university they seem a bit immature.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

pass relationships - should be past
cousin birthday party - should be cousin's

FINAL THOUGHTS:

It needs a little work.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of If Only I Could Talk

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A day in the life of a dog. Tuesday it seems is not usually a good day. Perhaps more detail would be beneficial. The poem does portray the loneness and boredoom of the animal.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A dog's view of a boring day.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

More information. Express how the dog feels about being left alone.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

a good start but it does not go far enough.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)
From Here to Eternity
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Review of Burned Bottoms  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)


Review of Burned Bottoms

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

It is funny how a story like this always brings such memories to mind. I shared in the revelations of the smells of life and family. When it came to burn bottoms our family was different. There were the crys for the rolls but they were always sitting on a counter. Forgotten and never having blessed the oven.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

a well planned tale of holiday and sharing.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review of A Winters Night  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of A Winter's Night

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A series of impressions of cold and night as felt and seen by the writer.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Simple images of winter and the cold that it brings.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Expand your ideas and images.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Review of Old Time Thanksgiving

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A series of memories tied together in a wonderful free form poem that highlights those happening at a families thanksgiving meal and celebration.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Tying the memories together in such a way that one feels it is their own family.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed the poem.


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Review of The Nightmare  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)


Review of The Nightmare

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A complex story with a lot of unusual and unexplained happenings. There should be an opportunity to clarify some of the character and plot.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A good general plot but it needs to strengthened. Concentrate on one phase at a time. The trip, the capture, the escape, the rescue, etc. Character need a little better description as well.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Two simple things. Use a larger font and create spacing to make story more readable. Open a novel and look to see how it is formatted and try to make your layout similar.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

This story needs work but there is a lot to work with.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)




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Review of The Night Before Christmas

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Is it a Christmas miracle. A little almost nativity story using characters
from the television show "The Young Riders".

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Stuck in a snowstorm Buck is trying to make it home for Christmas and takes refuge in a cave with a man named Jose and his wife who is about to deliver a baby. buck assists.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good story. No suggestions for improvement.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Have a happy WDC anniversary.


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Review of The Last Guardian  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)




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Review of The Last Guardian

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

There seems to a battle going on from the creatures in this cave to those that are referred to giants above. The ending is creative and well told.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It seems the giants above have resorted to poisoned food and a strange mist that kills. Chemical weapons used against this civilization.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Have a happy WDC anniversary.


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Review of The Devil Lies  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)




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Review of The Devil Lies

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is a story about trusting. It lets us know that we have to be careful about who we trust. it also teaches us to realize that some will lie to us and they usually press us for acceptance.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

In this story the devil pressures a man to accept his protection. It is a false security. The two characters are the devil and the man making the wrong decision.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Are you still writing? Share your stories on WDC.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Have a great WDC Anniversary


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Review of A Moment Of  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)




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Review of A Moment of

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A gift of music shared in a moment and the feeling that are felt if not expressed about the sense of power it provides.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

the lone character at the keyboard creates music that captures the characters of the audience.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

i enjoyed the way you told this story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Please enjoy your WDC anniversary and keep writing.


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Review of Cold Torture  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)




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Review of Cold Torture

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A woman scorned is nothing to laugh about. Francine's husband has been cheating on her. She cuts herself with a knife and orange juice gets into the wound. She suffers terrible pain because of this. she decides what to do.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Francine is the only strong character and her feeling and expressions to being cheated on by her husband with her best friend Kelly. Good definiton of her pain and her resolve to do something about it.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

We never find out what happens to Kelly.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Have a Happy WDC anniversary.


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Review of The Domino Effect  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)




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Review of The Domino Effect

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A well written multi-tiered story of deceit and murder in a law office.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Gina Norris catches seventy-year old lawyer Larry Dunder kissing Fern Stanton. she tells her friend Angela Banks that she took pictures and is going to blackmail Larry. There is a great double twist in the story that makes it worth reading.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

My only suggestion is that you have a wonderful WDC anniversary.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of Random Thoughts Gleaned Walking My Dogs

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I thought this poem might just be reflections of thought but was surprised the thought come from the actions of the dogs that are being walked. Each thought makes sense and the simple wisdom is well applied to man.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Dogs and man are very similar it seems. I enjoyed the thoughts behind the poem.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I am glad you were able to gets your thoughts into a book.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Well Done.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of Not According to Plan

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A great story poem about a girl who is expected to marry a certain guy. Someone else comes into her life and she chooses him surprising friends and family.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

things change and often they change for the better. This is a great story told in poetic form.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions for improvement.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

A very enjoyable story.


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Review of I Make No Apology  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



Review of I Make No Apology

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I just wondered what I did for you to express your wrath so deeply and with so much anger and emotion.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The next time I want to ream someone a new asshole I will pull out this poem to use as my starter.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Tell me what caused you to get to this point.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thoughts that I often would like to express.


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Review of The Body Double  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of The Body Double

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story where a rich man has been diagnosed with liver cancer. He has a clone prepared for him to take over. I presume they will move his memories and thoughts to the clone.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Bill, the doctor and the clone. The actual happening are a little confusing. I think the clone develops liver cancer and bill in frustration shoots himself. I could be wrong.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Have You Seen the Light

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

He states he lived in darkness and depression but saw the light and she made changes in his life. However he left the light and now suffers because he was blind.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

He and she who is the light. A sort of metaphor for light and love.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing. This was good.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)



Review of Beautifully Scarred

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Good synopsis of a longer story. It leaves room to develop both characters and plot.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

They seem unlikely partners at this point. You might need to cement a relationship before trying to involve Amira in BDSM activities.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Larger font with spacing between paragraphs makes your work standout.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

write the rest


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)



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Review of Father Lie & Pregnant Sin Visit Camelot

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The tale of the infidelity of Guinevere with the fabled knight Sir Lancelot has been the material for much writing. This is a review on one such writing of the story. This would not just be infidelity of course it would also be considered treason.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This review includes not only the main characters but introduces many of the other knight involved in the story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Please enjoy your WDC anniversary.



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Review of My Bestest Friend  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



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Review of My Bestest Friend

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good poem about a lifelong relationship. Existing through high school and the years after as each started a family. But people do seem to drift apart. I am glad you could find each other again.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Friendship is a great tie. One of the strongest bonds that exist.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Please enjoy your WDC anniversary.



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Review of My forever love  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)



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Review of <y forever Love

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

you are a lucky man to have had the benefit of that lady for even that short period. What benefit to have the memories of those year, months, days, hours and even minutes you had together. You were blessed. Thank you for sharing your blessing.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Clear facts and the introduction to one who seems to be a wonderful person.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more of the memories you shared. you will find it hard but it will help.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Write more and please enjoy your WDC anniversary.



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