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Review of The China  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)


Review of The China

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A couple has a fight and woman cuts off her ponytail (hair) and stomps off presumably with the car. Starting to clean up notes the china cabinet.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

In the cabinet is a set of I suppose expensive china. It was to be used for their wedding but never was. It seems that the current argument is about using it for thanksgiving dinner. Fred accidently breaks a plate. Tina comes back in a rage and leaves again. Fred washes all the plates and then proceeds to smash them all.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I like Fred.



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Review of Christelica  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


Review of Christelica

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

So this new word is both a noun and a verb. There are five statements that are used to define this word. The definitions are quite varied.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This person has a strong impression of his two daughters.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

an interesting concept.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)

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Review of Dialogue

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This exercise in dialogue only contains 18 words of dialogue. too much emphasis is put on the actions of the speakers rather than the words.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It seems it is a stressful meeting but that is not indicated by the dialogue.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Try to writ it again with more actual dialogue.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

The reason for this review is to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review of Starlit Sky  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of Starlit Sky

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting poem about a young person looking up at the starlit skies and sharing the memories and teaching about the stars with a younger person.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The stars have been there well before any of us. It is somehow comforting that they will be there throughout our lives.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

The reason for this review mostly ias to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)


Review of Upon My Bleeding Horse

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I have read and re-read this poem and still find difficulty understanding the meaning. I did note that there seems to a strange haunting or movement to some darkness.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I like most of your poems but unfortunately I am having difficulty with this one. If you wish to enlighten me I would be most pleased.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing.



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Review of Life ink tattoos  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Life Ink Tattoos

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Our writing is compared to tattoos. Meaning those writing stay with us just as a tattoo will always be with us. It is a valid thought but our writing will go on even after our physical presence is gone.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Interesting thoughts but words go beyond life.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.



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Review of to feel better  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Review of To feel Better

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Whatever causes one to get to the state you describe should be avoided. I enjoyed suggestions for dealing with the unpleasant feelings.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

In three short four line verses you describe the things you have done to get over these bad feelings.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Larger font and centre will make the poem stand out more. Always think of how the reader will view your work.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and please enjoy your WDC anniversary.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)

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Review of June 6, 1944, D Day

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I enjoyed your thoughts on how things could have been different. The problem is that England became an armed camp with armies from America in 1942. As for the the invasion of England there are many different scenarios. I think if the Germans had captured or destroyed the BEF at Dunkirk they should have invaded England in the summer of 1940 or 1941 at worst.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I enjoyed your thinking but if Germany could have invaded in 1940 they would be able to subdue Russia at their leisure.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

If the German Wehrmacht listened to the generals instead of their mad Furer things would be very different.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Most of alI want I desire to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review of My Difference  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of My Difference

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short little poem comparing the ability to overcome because of size. It makes a valid point.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The poem asks if we can make a difference. It answers the quest with the last line "If I just think I can."

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I want to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of Swept Off Her Feet

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short flash fiction story that would excite the heart of any parent. It is concise and well written.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

An accident that could happen any day. A child bleeding and the cause not quickly apparent causes a panic induced trip to the hospital emergency department.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

This story has everything one would expect. I would suggest a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

The purpose for this review is to to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review of The Ice Pick  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)

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Review of The Ice Pick

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story about four people dealing with a bright light which is a being and eventually causes some evil to befall them.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I was a little confused about the plot. I also don't understand why the ice pick lands in Matt's heart twice.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I'm getting older and prefer a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Most of all I reviewed this selection in order to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review of Stung  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

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Review of Stung

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I don't know this name. I am presuming that this person is a wrestler.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The free verse poem is quick images of wrestling.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Perhaps a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

The real reason for this review is to wish a great WDC anniversary.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of Some Unanswered Questions

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

There are unanswered questions. Perhaps they should stay unanswered. It does not matter for I don't see any answers available on these weighty ideas.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

What happens after death? Are we aware of what happens here after we have passed to whatever? Heavy questions. why do we want answers?

(c:yellow) SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None other than wait and see.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

On second thought..... make the font larger.



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Review of Little Lady Luck  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Little Lady Luck

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story with a twist at the end. The story sets up someone looking for someone in the casino. Then there is surprise as they jump up on the blackjack table.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Meeting in the casino. Then we find what jumped up on the table is a small white cat.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of An Attempt at Rediscovering Love

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I do not disagree with your premise because my own experience shows me that a person can have many different loves. The strength of love depends on the amount of mutural effort put forth by the participants.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I guess I'll have to see that movie.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing.



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Review of The Sirens.  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of The Sirens

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

As an old sailor I have heard all the stories about the singing sirens and the fact that they lure sailors to their deaths.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

i enjoyed the images of the sirens and your description of thier activities.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I like the soft flow of the poetry.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.



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Review of Woman's Worth  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Woman's Worth

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short poem that characterizes the authors view of women.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Woman are all different and yet very much the same. I liked the last verse best.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep Writing.



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Review of There is a road  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of There is a Road

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I enjoyed your poem about roads. We travel many roads and often are unsure of which road we are on. Guess I should have purchased a map.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A Larger font would make your poem more readable. Think always through the eyes of the reader.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing



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Review of CIRCLES IN MOTION  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Circles in Motion

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Your free form poem got me spinning in circles. Life in cycles is of course not a new concept but you have expressed it with great vigor.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed reading your prose.



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Review of Significant Other  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of Significant Other

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Space travel and the colonization of other planets or moons is the theme of this poem.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It is an in-depth review of the thoughts pertaining to space.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I have read it several times and I enjoy it.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of A Single Bag of Popcorn

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short story of paying things forward. A word in passing can change so many things. You don't really know who or what but of course that isn't whats important.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The story lets us know that what we might think of as insignificant may have great meaning for others. Well done.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I did this review to wish you a great WDC anniversary.



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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Fathers and Daughters

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A sixteen line poem about a man watching the football game and listening to a phone message left for his daughter. It is a romantic message.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A father with a phone message for his daughter. A difficult way to find out your child is growing up.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.



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Review of The Little Lion  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


Review of The Little Lion

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story to read to a little girl whose pet which she calls a lion but is actually a cat. The story could use a little more work.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Part of the way through the story the King and Queen each other. I thought they were already married.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Larger Print?
Then after words afterwards

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep sharing your work with all of us.



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Review of Love  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of Love

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I've read a lot of poems about love. You were very direct in what you feel love is.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Love while a gift from god needs people in order to be something worthwhile.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None at this time.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for sharing your work.



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Review of Time to Shine  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)

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Review of Time to Shine

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Finally the day has come for the audition of a life time. A woman has this opportunity and has some fears in her mind.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Alice has watched others go for auditions and succeed and now it is her turn. Both the plot and characterization is great for flash fiction.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing and sharing with us.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Have a great WDC anniversary.



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