Hi SamLBinj, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. I loved the poem I could almost see the witches dance round the cauldron, casting their spells. your work read and flowed well It has a wonderful rate and rhythm to it, making you want to sing along. Good luck in the competition and with your work in the future.
Hi phyduex, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a very emotional and beautiful story it brough tears to my eyes. your work read and flowed well. if this is not too painful for you, you could develope this into a much longer short story about how you are coping with this. Good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi phyduex,my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a fantasic poem, I really enjoyed the read it kept me captivated till the end. Your work read and flowed well. I liked very much the way it rhymed. The rate and rhythm, for me were perfect, it brought your poem to life. I think with your style and enthusiasum you could get away with usiing this as an opening chapter of a short novel.*read* Good luck in the competition and with your work in the future.
Hi icecroc, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challeng: as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. I enjoyed reading your work thank you for sharing it with us. Your work read and flowed well I felt your work was charged with emotions from the past. Good luck in the contesat and with your work in thw future.
Hi Drecver, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewes fro the Weekly NewbieChalleng: as English is my second Language I will comment on your writing only. I really enjoyed the read of the poem. Your work read and flowed well. Your writing mad me feel some of the isolation as well, well done. good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi Locksley, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. I enjoed the read very much your work read and flowed well I have the feeling you have just finished in a relationship and I was quite a jug to let go. Good luck in the contest and with your work in the future
Hi Georgie, my name is Raffikie I am one ofthe reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my secong Language I will comment on your writing only.
*samile* this is an interesting short story Your work read and flowed well I have enjoyed the way you have made the reader think about imagination. good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi Kayla, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writng only. this is an interesting poem. Your work read and flowed well. It has a good rhyme but the rhythm is a little jerky I enjoyed the overall theme of the poem. Good luck with your work in the future and in the contest.
Hi Moon Beam, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reveiwers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a very good short story IOt could have read much more. It would make a good opening chapter to a book, may about the Vampire couples travels who knows? your work read and flowed well. You made me feel as though I was part of the story, well done.
Good luck with your work in the future, also with the contest.
Hi rkilgore, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a very beautiful poem, I enjoyed the read very much. To my it showed the love of a father for his daughter,and the great wrench he endured when he gave her away to another man. Your work reads and flows well. I love the the gentle rhythm and rhyme of your work. Good luck with your writing and in the contest.
Hi Erin, my name is Raffikie i am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. this is an excellent piece of work I really enjoyed the read. Your work read and flowed well. I could just imagine an orchestra playing this. I liked very much the way it rhymed. good luck in the compitition, and with your work in the future.
Hi coolestscottie, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a good short story, ireally enjoyed the read. your story line was very good and believable. Your work read and flowed well. Your main character was good and I liked they way she flashed back to being her grandmother. This would make a good short novel I think. Good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi radioshea, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a wonderful short story, I was captiveated until the end, Well done. Your work read and flowed well. Your characters were strong and believable. I could feel the emotions from the characters. This would make a very good opening chapter for a book and maybe Jonny does not give up on the piano after all. Good luck in the competition and with your work in the future.
Hi youngwriter, my name is Raffikie I am one oof the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second langiage I will comment on your writing only. This is a good short story, I enjoyed the read. Your work read and flowed well Your characters were strong and bveliveable. I think this would make a good opening chapter to a book about Stanley and his family. Good luck in the contest and with yur work in the future.
Hi Jem my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge : As Aengkish is my second language, I will comment on your atory only. This is a very moving account, I enjoyed the the read. your work read and flowed well, there was one tiny mistake you had written (his shoots his words at me)(maybe he soots his words at me?). your chaaracters are strong and believable. good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi komal, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writng only. This is a very emotional piece of work, I enjoye the read and it moved mr to tears. Your work reads and flows well. I enjoyed the way it rhymed, it set its own rhythm. I feel you could devolpe this into a book about the plight of children in war toen areas using this as a powerful introduction. Good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi Jenny my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challange: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a wonderful poem I really enjoyed the read. Your work read and flowed well. It has a nice lilting rhythm to it. Good luck in the competition, and with your writimg in the future.
Welcome back to WDC I aggree there are many beautiful people to help us achieve our hearts desires.
Hi coolestscottie, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weeekly Newbie Challenge: As English is my second language I will comment on your writng only. This is a beautiful poem, I enjoyed the read. Your work reads and flows well. I like the way it rhymes, somes every line sometimes alternate. Good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi reneaiscool, my name is Raffikie I am one of the Reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challange: as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a wonderfully emotional poem. your work read and flowed well. I liked the way it rhymed, simple but effective. Good luck in the contest, and with your work in the future.
Hi A Beautiful Mess, my name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challange: as English is my second language, I will comment on your writing only. This is a beautiful poem, I really emjoyed the read. Your work read and flowed well. I liked the way it rhymed.
Simple but meaningful. Good luck in the contest and with your wotk in the future.
Hi Shy poet, my name is raffike I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challange: As English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a very interesting poem, I enjoyed reading it. It read and flowed well. good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
Hi Michelle Lynn, my name is Raffikie I am one of The reviewers for the Weekly Newbie challenge: as English is my second language I will comment on your writing only. This is a beautiful and emotional piece of work. I really enjoyed the read. It reaad and flowed well. You needa space in between no and one. I loved the way it rhymed, it brought it more to life. good luck in the contest and with your work in the future.
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I loved the poem I could almost see the witches dance round the cauldron, casting their spells.
