My name is Raffikie I am one of the reviewers for the Weekly Newbie Challange: As English is my second Language I will comment on your writting only. This is a very beautiful description of how quickly life flashes by us before we know it life has passed us by and we have saved no memories of it. I like your reinforce ment of the words tell them about today and tomorrow, and how important this is.
My name is Raffikie and I am one of the reviewers for the {weekly newbie challange}
This is a very powerful piece of poetry I love it it stired up many emotions of past rejection I had felt. your words were short sharp and to the point well done. I love also your breakdown of thr word 'W.O.R.D.' I have English as a second language so I cannnot comment on your grammar and puntuation. good luck with your future work.
Hi I really enjoyed reading this, it stired up some old emotions for me, thank you for providng such thought provoking words, I am happy to read for you at any time. I cannot comment on the gramar as English is a second language for me good luck in the future with your writting.
Ah this is beautiful, and how true this is with hind sight we would all do things that little bit different. You write well and with emotion I like that in a writter very much your work made me fill up with tears, stop and text my mum to say how much I loved her. thank you for that. good luck with you work in thw future. I am happy to read for you at any time as English is my second language I cannot comment on your grammar.
I realy enjoyed this beautiful piece of work, I felt like you were speaking to me personally and I had your undivided attention. Your work reads and flows well, I am affraid that I cannot comment on your grammar as English is my second language am am working to improve it and am more than happy to read for you at any time good luck with your work in the future.
Hi yes it is a bit like reading from a diary, thank you for sharing your thoughts with me, I only saw one little spelling error, the last paragraph you have written Pall is it ment to be Paul? good luck with your work in the future
Oh this is a beautiful piece of work, I hope you realise your dream to draw for manga, you write with enthusiasum and passion about your subject well done good luck with your work in the future
This is a very meaning piece of work, not many people can write with the emotion you have put into this well done. your son must have broke your heart many times with his addiction I am glad to hear that he is comming to terms with thing. will you br writtng more of his long journey back to the real world?
Hi This is a wonderful story it is written well and you feel as though you are the main chsracter, The story flows by so quick you cannot believe you have read it through well done I look forward to reading the next instalment, will these eventually become a book?
Hi Jerry as always excellent work, with a special; twist in it, I love the reference to outspace where the senttry is guarding the ship I could just imagine it all taking place out there. I felt a little dissapointed when it was seen to be home on earth. you must write some more like this. May I have ytour permissiom to sign it to my students, Thank you for your wonderful stories. Raffikie
Weel Jerry yet another piece of very moveing prose from you, your work as evry is excellent I really enjoyed the read, I have introduced this site to my parents and they too have enjoyed your work especially this last piece as they have now been married 53 years. Thank you for the pleasure you bring.
I enjoyed reading your work It brought bach to me the pain of that first love lost never to return. Thank you for the reminder of my youth the pain of unwanted love is the worst of all good luck woth your writtng
I found this to be a beautifull piece of work, it flowed well, and I enjoyed the read thank you for this, to me it sums up what we all try to get out of life and only a choosen few succeed.
ooh! another chocolate lover, I realy enjoyed your work I almost had to leave and buy some chocolate then remembered I had some spare in my drawer. Your descriptions were excellent I could taste the different flavours with you, I am overcome with curiosity as to what was written in the note, is there more to follow?
Hi I really enjoyed reading this, your details of the story were very moving it has made me look at the homeless people in a different way, and no matter how hard we try, we cannot help everyone all of the time and like you say in your story they are there to remind us of what may happen to us.
Hi I enjoyed this piece of work, sometimes our dreams seem very real and often come as warnings for future events, or somthing we are trying to hide from in our past. were you or your family involved in the 2004 Tsunami? The writng flows as though you have actually expirienced it first hand thank you for sharing this with me.
I have enjoyed your three chapters, it appears to be a good start to a very promising book. Are you writting more? I canot wait to see what happens next. As i am deaf with English as a second language I cannot comment on your grammar etc, I am more than happy to read for you though.
Hi. I enjoyed this poem, it made for a pleasent read I can see one little typing error captive you have a double 't' instead of 'tive' but otherwise ok I cannot really comment on grammar as I am deaf with English as a second language. I would like to read more of ytour work.
I found found this piece very moving in two ways. 1st the simple way through ignorance of the situation that was being described of the horrors of the death camps. 2nd the way diference of cultures and sumerschools, I hopr that we never forget the horrors of the death camps and as long as people can tell the stories then we shall never forget. Thank you fior this
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