This is a nice tribute to Lisa. It shows what a wonderful person she must truly be. My daughter's name is also Lisa. She's always helping someone else and keeping things straight.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece.
This is a very interesting piece. However, you might want to go in and edit it. Maybe it would help if you read it out loud. That usually helps me find errors I'd miss otherwise. I felt there were just too many to list, plus I was engrossed in what you were saying.
I agree that religion should not be shoved down another's throat. We should not put others down because they don't believe the way we do. But, we should set an example before others and let our lights shine.
As far as praying, Christians should not be ashamed to pray in public, but God also hears our silent prayers.
This is written well. I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. Unlike a lot of folks, you've remembered to double space between paragraphs. That's one of the first things I look for.
I've never heard of Hare Krishna until I read this piece.
Mercy! This is an interesting story. It begins with childlike innocence. Then it moves on into what I thought might be puppy love. From there true love, then all of a sudden the whole scene changed to death.
I found no typos or misspelled words. You held my interest.
I felt that I was huddled beneath the desk with them.
Well now. This is a little wierd. I'm taking it that Jake was in a coma.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. It seems to be a little short, but I realize sometimes stories with promps require only so many words.
Keep up the good work and continut writing.
Grandma Penny
You grabbed my attention early on, and now you almost have me mesmerized. Nothing like a good mystery!
They thought that it was run down old rambling house that would better just to sell.<--Somehow, this sentence just doesn't read right. I think you might have left out a word or two. Maybe if you read it aloud, it will help.
Wow! What a lesson. I found no typo sor misspelled words in this little story. It was interesting. Actually you held my interest from beginning to the end. I'll have to admit, my interest was a little stronger because of your age.
Very well written. This is true. I don't know why folks have such a hard time understanding where the husband, wife, child, etc. fit in. It seems they all are trying to switch roles.
I was taught very strictly. My husband and father of my children had a hard time understanding that for me to be submissive to him or in subjection to him did not mean he had the right to rule me. Since he was a true Christian and studied the Bible, he eventually began to understand.
I don't understand why children or anyone teaching them gets the idea that they should be set foot loose and fancy free without discipline.
If we would just get back to the basics and quit trying to look so smart, it certainly would help, huh?
As far as the way this is written, you've done a good job. I found no typos or misspelled words. It does look like you've done your research.
Deuteronomy 22:5; “A woman must not wear men’s
clothing, and a man must not wear women’s clothing. The Lord your God detests this.” I don't know if you're reading from the New King James version or what. I checked in my King James Version and here is what my version says: The woman shall not wear that which pertaineth unto a man, neither shall a man put on a woman's garment: for all that do so are abomination unto the Lord thy God. I'd say it depends on what part of the world a person lives. I know in some places the men wear robes rather than pants. Some women wear dresses and some wear skirts and blouses because of their interpretation of this scripture. Yet a lot of blouses pertain to (resemble) a man's shirt.
Again, you've done a good job writing this.
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
This is a very interesting piece. I think this is one of my favorite Bible stories. Isn't it amazing that after all those years, He still does the same?
I think I like the last line of this best.
Her heart told her that this man must be a Profet!<--I think the correct spelling for this is Prophet
This is just too cute. I thought sure you had really walked away from your job to go to the beach. I know when you opened your eyes after using such a wild imagination, you were truly disappointed.
As it has been with all your writings, this is a very interesting piece.
I found a few things I think you need to work on to make it more acceptable in the publishing business.
Inside are two rooms I'm not sure which you need, but I think you need to separate this with a comma or semi-colonone for sleepingprobably a comma is needed here the other for living.
On Monday eleven souls lived in the cottage on Tuesday there were only ten.I think this is considered a run-on sentence. It needs to be broken down.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
What a clever idea. Those are cute little songs. I'll bet you do have to do a lot of laundry and cleaning with so many siblings. Let me guess! You all share with the chores.
I think you did a great job with this little writing project. I'll try to check out more in your port later.
Grandma Penny
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