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Review of Warping Radiance  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Prosperous Snow

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Title

The title works well with the poem. It pulls the reader into your poem. It also has perspective and power.

Rhythm & Flow:

You did a great job with the form. It has good rhythm and each line flows nicely into the next line. Good punctuation, it helps the flow of the poem. I don't feel like the poem is forced.

The poem is interesting and has a melodic sound. It has depth and power. I didn't notice any cliches.

I have no suggestions to offer. It is well written.


Conclusion:

Particles dance through space,
with rainbow radiance
I love these lines. It sounds so beautiful.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*



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Review by The Dark Faery
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Big Bad Wolf


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Great word find, monsters. I'm a big fan of horror, especially vampires. I found all the words, it was easy. Still I enjoyed looking for them.

You gave great direction and it has a nice appearance. The word selection is amazing. There are plenty of words to look for. My only suggestion would be to add some color in the directions.


Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing!


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello dog pack

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I'm a big animal lover too. So I had to stop and read this one. You have poured a lot of love into this piece. It hold power and beauty. The rhythm is good. I noticed there is no punctuation in this poem, by adding some it would help the flow.

The title works well with this poem.It adds tone and lived up to my exceptions. Good imagery, I could see each cat and dog as if they were next to me.

Nicely written.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Ethereal Journeys  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hello Turtlemoon-dohi

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Title

The title has power. I love it. I found it featured in the Spiritual newsletter and I had to read it. And I'm glad I did. It also establishes tone and perspective of the poem.

Rhythm & Flow:

There is a good rhythm to this piece and it pushes the story at a good pace. Each line flows well into the next line. Good word selection and alliteration.

Imagery & Emotions:

The imagery is amazing. I could see the story unfold as I read. It was like I was setting next to my ancestors.

Conclusion:

The idea of the poem in interesting and it sounds melodic. There is a message here, the journey of spirit. This poem has power and beauty.

gossamer light
as dreams suspend between Earth and stars
Amazing description and favorite line.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello HuntersMoon

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Title

A good strong title, it fits the poem. It's also enticing to the reader as what kind of view are you talking about. I feel it also helps set the mood of the poem.

Rhythm & Flow:

With the rhyming scheme, this piece has a nice rhythm. And the lines flow nicely into each other. And it sits nicely on the page.

Imagery & Emotions:

Where to begin, I feel wonder and amazement, sadness, loneliness, and a loss. The imagery is captivating. I could see and almost feel wind the stars.

Conclusion:

A well written poem. And interesting to read. It has depth power,and beauty. Good punctuation and word selection. I like the first stanza the best because I feel I'm standing outside staring at the stars and dreaming, something I enjoying doing.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review of Autumn leaves  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I like your poem. You have captured the sights and feeling of fall in your poem. It is full of imagery and emotions. There is a good rhythm and each line flows nicely into the next line. The title fits well with this piece. This piece has beauty. Good word selection and placement.

natures finest hour
Nice description.

I would suggest on capitalizing the "leafs" in the title.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello BlueBear007

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Welcome to WDC.

Great story, I had to laugh. I have two cats and five dogs I understand completely.

The title pulled me in to read your story. It started out a little slow for me. I feel the second paragraph slows the story down. The story line moves at a great pace. And I could see the story unfold as I read.
I feel this short piece is well written.

I do have a suggestion:
My sweetheart was done work . . . done at work or done with work, something is missing here.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Study of the soul  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Latcherous

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Welcome to WDC.

Starting with the title, it pulls in the reader. And I feel it works okay with the poem. I feel it is a little misleading. I see the studying, but I don't see anything about the soul.

The rhythm is good and moves the story line at a good pace. You have captured emotions of what is could be like before an exam. The first three stanzas are the best. I'm not for sure about the last one, I think maybe too many I'll. And it slows down the rhythm.

A few grammar issues and by adding punctuation you help the flow and rhythm of the poem. When you use a contraction you need to add in the apostrophe . . . didn't, isn't. And also capitalize the I's. With a little tweaking this poem could rock.

Remember you are the creator here, these are just my opinions nothing more.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Tinker

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It's me again doing your review for I Write 2018.

First of all the title, it's an interesting title. It holds mystery and pulls in the reader. I have to say I wasn't expecting "the box" to be a nurse.

Good imagery, I can see a man on a small bed covered in white and this tall and large woman standing next to him watching and recording his vitals. There is a good rhythm and flow to the poem.

I can offer no suggestions. I feel you did a good job at writing this piece.

Good luck in the contest.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*



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Review by The Dark Faery
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Hoovers

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I love the title, it's majestic. I feel it works well with the poem.

The is a great rhythm to your poem and I notice the rhyming scheme. And each line flows nicely into the next line. I feel power and see beauty in this poem. It offers imagery and emotion. There is sadness for the poor Nightingale.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Faerie Magic  
Review by The Dark Faery
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I had to give this one a review, I love faeries.
This piece has lots of imagery. I can see the faerie ring you talk about along side the clover and bluebells.

The title works well for this piece, it lives up to my expectations of the poem. It has beauty and depth. The rhythm is good. And each line flows nicely into the next line. This piece is well written.

I like the first stanza because of the imagery of the fae.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Shadow Prints  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Moody Blue

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What a cute poem. Shadow sounds like an amazing pet, fur baby.

The title works well with this poem, it lives up to my expectations of the poem. It has a good flow and a good rhythm. Nicely written with good imagery and lots of emotion, love.

I like the title, Shadow Prints has a good sound and imagery. I also like the first stanza.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Mastiff

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A short piece, nicely written. The title works well with the story. This would make a good story. If this piece only required 100 words great job of getting the point across.

Description of setting and lots more about the main character would make this piece really rock.

I like the story line and the way it is written.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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An interesting piece. It has a nice flow, the plot moved along at a good pace. I had to give a laugh at the end because the same would happen to me. I could see the story unfold as I read. Good description about the setting.

A suggestion, give some physical description about your main characters and through in a character flaw, like a limp or running his hands through his hair. It makes your character more real and believable.

Thank you for sharing. I liked your story.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Gutshot  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A good title, it pulls the reader in. A short piece, but I could the scene happening as I read. It left me feeling sad for poor old Stump. The ending is good, it left me wondering who and why? Nicely written.

I have no suggestions for this piece.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review of The Curse  
Review by The Dark Faery
In affiliation with Group ~ Reviewing with River  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Graham B.


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What I like:{/b}

rising like a spear piercing the desert. I like the description. Also I like the title. It's mysterious and pulls the reader in.

Overall Impression:{/b}

Nicely written. I didn't notice any grammar/spelling issues. Dialog is good, I can track of who is talking. The plot moves at a good study pace. Setting is good. I could see the story unfold as I read.

A good hook in the beginning, starting off with action always grabs the reader. The ending is good. You have left it open to add more if you desire. And it gives the reader a chance to use their imagination as to how Joe and Lyanna get back t town, or do they.

There is mention of a curse, but it is never told as to what the curse is. And I feel there needs to be more character description. It is good to leave somethings to imagination, but I like to have some idea what the characters look like.

Suggestions:{/b}

One suggestion would be to add character flaws, like biting on the upper lip or running a hand through the hair. These flaws make the characters more realistic.

Final Thoughts/Conclusion:{/b}

With a little tweaking I feel this story could rock. But again these are my opinions. I enjoyed reading your story.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Tinker

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First of all I like the way the poem is displayed on the page. This is something I need to try.

I like the title it is creative. And it works well with this poem. I feel you captured the form perfectly. It has a good appearance and rhythm. Each line flows nicely into the next line.

I like the second stanza the best, especially
shifting over and over and over,
through centuries.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review of NaPoWriMo 2018  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello Carly

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I had to laugh. I love Bugs Bunny. I feel you nailed it with Elmer Fudd. I can see him with his gun hunting Bugs and Bugs standing behind him.

You did good at following the form. It has good rhythm and good imagery. The title fits perfect for the poem. Nice job.

Good luck with the contest.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review of Star Shine  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Quantra

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A sweet and loving poem. I can feel the love you have for your wife. I like the phrase star-shine. It's pretty.
The title works well with this poem. It has a good rhythm and flow. It has depth and beauty. The message is easy to read. Great job.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review of Ghost Dog  
Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello HuntersMoon

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I just had to say what an amazing poem. A tear ran down my check as I read your words. There is a lot of emotion and imagery woven into this piece. I love the title, it works well with the poem.

Good luck in the contest. It should win first place hands down.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*



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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Pamela

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A good title, it works well with the poem. And it lived up to my expectations. There is a good study rhythm. It has a good flow to it. However, by adding some punctuation it would flow better. Also not every line has to be capitalized.

There is depth and meaning to your poem. It is interesting. It contains emotion and has great imagery. I can relate to your poem. I like how everything turned upside down in your life and you found the strength and courage to over come it. And with positive thoughts of making it better.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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An interesting story, full of emotion. This piece is well written. It makes a person think about their life. The story line moves at a good pace. And the title works well with the story. It has somewhat of a happy ending, maybe not the one desired but at least being with family that care and love you. In time I hope you find peace and heal.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Genipher

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You asked for help with punctuation, here are some of my ideas.

Capitalize what you consider to be the beginning of the sentence. Add in commas or hyphens to give a pause with thought. Use a period when you feel you are at the end of a sentence. just like writing a story only shorter lines.

The discontent and scratches,
that have filled my bitter soul.
My self-determination,
to reach my earthly goal.

I hope I have helped. Great poem by the way.
Good luck.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review by The Dark Faery
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Dave

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Wonderful title, it's catchy and it works well with this poem. It has beauty and depth written into it. Great imagery, I can see Tink flying through the universe. There is a good rhythm and each line flows nicely into the next line. It makes wish I could join in the fun.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Hello turtlemoon-dohi

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Keepers of the Sky-Gate, I love the title and it works well with the poem. This piece is amazing and resonates with me so much. I also am a Light Worker. There is a good rhythm and flow to this poem.

Good imagery and good word selection. This piece has depth, beauty, and power. The last stanza holds my heart the most.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*



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