Well done and so true. This writer has turned a sincere sentiment about the wrong way to spend Christmas into a poem and tells the right way to spend Christmas. I thought this poem was well done. And has a good message.
This review is a personal opinion of the reviewer.
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This vividly describes a marriage that is on the rocks. Both people involved are so bored with what is going on that they can not see the forest for the trees. Plus, due to all of this the wife in the relationship has become some what lazy. ...This was well written, entertaining and interesting. The writer is a natural born storyteller who should keep on writing.
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I thought this poem was well written and entertaining. An old subject that has been written about quite often but this poem has a little twist in it that varies from some of the old versions. I do think it could be expanded and made longer. But it is still good in this form. Write on.
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Interesting the way the writer wrote this poem and the subject matter. This is a long poem and I liked all of it, but especially this verse:
Wish I could call you
make demands
remove the shackle from my finger
and admit how I feel
what I want.
and especially this line: remove the shackle from my finger.
Well done. This poem expresses so much.
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Chapter 2 continues to be interesting and entertaining. I really enjoyed the way the writer wrote the descriptions aroundd and along Route 666. This was very well done.
The dialogue was fantastic, believeable and realistic. There were several lines that caught my attention, but I can not repeat them in this public review.
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This writer has taken a simple thing like "words" and turned it into a lenghtly poem exploring all of the different things "words" mean to this writer. What really impressed me was the numerous time the word "words" was used and done so without sounding boring. Excellent job. Write on!
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This short but nice poem reminds me of the fact that I, too, like to walk in the park on a warm day. Unfortunately, I can't do much walking anymore, only wheel-chairing, but that's what makes this poem so special to me. Good job.
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This was a well written verse and it also contains an important lesson in it about snakes. This would be a good poem for children that play in the woods to learn as a safety measure. Good job. Keep on writing. P.S. It rhymes good.
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This writer has illuminated the pain of hurting Love. Well done, well written, and interesting in the way it was presented. The poem itself seems to flow from one verse to another keeping the thread of the thought alive. Nice job.
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This is a well written poem where the verses seem to flow one after another and tell a story. The writer is very articulate in the use of the english lauguage making this poem stand out and become entertaining as well. Good job.
Write on!
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Very enlightening piece of writing with a good moral to wind it all up. This writer has used talents to creatively produce a well written narrative proving they excel in this genre. Very well done. Write on!
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I thought this was a brillantly written tribute to the characteristics of touching a man's face. It was an entertaining piece of work. But the line I liked best was the last one:
"With those unspoken words he told her one the most exciting truths a woman would ever want to know - that he too longed for touching her face, in ways nobody had ever done before." .....Good job. Write on.
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This writer is spontaneous. She saw a news item on CNN and immediately got a poll up and going. Marvelous. And it is a good question: Would you give up a day's pay to spend more time with your family?
This is a nice narrative about a cat named Princess who looks like one of my own kittens. This writer also gives us a brief history of cats which was interesting and entertaining. And although I do not normally do this in a review, if you would like to see one of my cat stories:
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This is an amusing piece of work. It is entertaining and light hearted. Shelley seems like a flustered cashier.
u in the first paragraph should be "you."
O shouold be "oh." These abbeviations may work in the chat room but in writing you need to use whole words. And it reads a little rough. Write on.
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First of all, took a sample of your work to show you examples of line breaks.
Once upon a time, there was a noble prince named Redimere who lived with his father King Caelestis in a beautiful castle in the land of Lucidus. Redimere was an honorable man and a strong and mighty warrior. He was engaged to marry to a beautiful princess named Ecclesia, whose golden hair and fair skin, along with her grace and charm, would like to have won the heart of every noble man in the kingdom.
The people who lived in Lucidus were very fond of Caelestis and his son for they ruled the kingdom with equity and justice. They also possessed the Sanguis Numen. This noble blood possessed the power to heal, and was rumored to keep its bearers from suffering death.
Lucidus was very beautiful, and all of the meadows, mountains, forests, streams, and lakes radiated with inspiration and mystery. The harvest of the land was very abundant. The grain barns were always full, and the fruit was always ripe and delicious.
This story is interesting and entertaining and the writer exhibits a talent for this genre of writing. It was an enjoyable read. Keep writing.
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Emotionally charged story about living in war torn Germany during the war. The writer uses dialogue to tell this story and it is realistic and believeable. The story is entertaining and to tell the truth, this writer needs to seek publication for this and all of the rest of the stories.
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This is a great tribute and testimony to the Mormom faith. Well written and interesting. The writer must be Mormom or he has studied the Mormom bible. I have a little personal experience with LDS and I found the article to be right in line with the doctrine of the Mormom beliefs. Good job. Reviewed by INMAN
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This writer writes very realistically about anger. The man in this story is obvously not happy with himself and that is why he is constantly angry with his wife, violent at times. I actually know people like this.
Which makes this story so good.
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This piece of writing brought back memories of this reviewer's early years when he experienced the river for the first time and camped out on the banks of a river. This was well written and interesting. I enjoyed it very much.
Yes, I think it can be expanded. Maybe more detail.
But overall it is good.
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I thought this was a light hearted poem with deep, philosophical content. Clever the way the writer told the story of birth and death and ethe events between the two. Well written and concieved. This writer exhibits creative qualities of the craft.
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As war stories go, this one was pretty good. It starts off at the beginning of a man called Doc's career and takes it all the way to close to the end of his days. I liked the first part of the story that was a mild history lesson. There were some graphic parts to this story, but nothing I haven't heard from friends that were in Vietnam during the conflict. Overall, well told story.
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A novel idea for a word search. Actually, I do not do to good at these, so I do not do them, but my wife does them all the time and even buys books that are full of word search puzzels. My hat goes off to the writers that create these masterpieces. I would imagine that a lot of time and thought goes into the process.
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This was a chance encounter of the right kind. But I felt sorry for Lianne, because she ended it without telling him the truth. If all of this had happened to me -then her being blind would not have made any difference. Still, a good story, interesting and entertaining. Good job.
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Something about her made this place doubly special, and he had no clue what it is. "is" seems to ber wrong tense. Should it be "was"or am I reading it wrong?
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