I thought this was a very nicely laid out newsletter. It features many interesting topics and just reading through the newsletter itself is entertaining. Keep up the good work
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Well written for one paragraph. Could be a great introduction to a short story or a novel.. Not enough here for good character building. It might become an interesting story, just not enough here.
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First of all, the third line in the last verse needs to be changed. It is wrong in several different ways.
Also, some lines seemed to be forced. However, overall it is a good poem, tells of a truely broken hearted person.
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This segement was very good. Aldric goes into battle and the way it was written there was a moment with it looked like he faced his doom. Switch to Gwedolyn who is told the Kind is coming, the suspence builds as looks like she will take her life rather than meet the King. Then the Kind appears and it is the newly crowned Aldric.
Now this is the way iot is suposed to end. Aldric and Gwendolyn become King and Queen a live happily ever after.
Well written, interesting and entertaining.
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Good story and the dialogue is great. Very realistic and believeable. And the interaction between the characters is awesome. Good job. Keep writing.
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The warrior continues his mission and it is a solitary one, with no room for love or passion. This segement was well written and as the stroy progresses the attention the writer pays to detail is inspiring. Good job.
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This part of the story is kind of tragic. The warrior and Gwendolyn are in love, but the warrior feels he is on a mission and rather than mate up with the woman, instead he continues his own mission with destiny. Very good read. Keep up the good work.
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A good narrative on the trials and tribulations associated with catching mice. I've been there, but when I gave up with the repellants and potions I resorted to the old fashioned method, I got a cat and the cat did such a good job, I've had cats ever since.
Good job.
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Talkling about a ghost child. Well written and interesting. However, it is also a little vague. Good job.
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The writer has told us beforehand what the poem is about, and the poem is well written and thought out. However, it is my opinion that the poem is too vague to reveal what it is about. What this poem is all about is left up to the reader.
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After reading the first two contributions of the Warrior I was skeptical that more could be written and turn out so well, but I was wrong, this third addition is even better than the first two.
The writer masterfully tells a story about a warrior who once loved peace and quiet but now has become an all out conqueror. Well done.
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However well written this piece of writing is, I can't tell if it is a tribute to an actor or to the play the actor is in. Lots of praise for the actor and the play.
Interesting in context and entertaining throughout. Good job, Keep writing.
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Well written narrative. Interesting. I especially liked these lines:
Many do not realize the resources available among humanity and often do not give thanks to God who provides them when they do. Life is a gift and revalations are part of the wrapings not to be discarded without thought.
Good job, keep writing.
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A very concise poem about mainly little girls and it is full of advise. This poem was emotional in a way as it warned of what happens to little girls when they blossom. Good job.
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I enjoyed reading this narrative. It was interesting and entertaining. I also learned a few things by reading it that I did not know. There was some emotion in this piece of writing.
However, there were several recognizable paragraphs, but the writer did not show them. I feel like the paragraphs should have been installed and also that lines breaks be used after the end of each paragraph.
Write on.
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Actually, I'm rating the review as much as the actual poem. The poem was well written and interesting. It was well conceived and it is the opinion of the writer.
The review that was given was biased in the fact, that the reviewer was inserting his/har own opinions and ignoring the written words of the poem.
Then the writer gave a good review of the review and I could not have done a better job myself.
This is an excellent piece of writing. Keep it coming.
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I thought this was a good poem, however, the writer tells just enough to capture your interest and then leaves the whole poem vague. Write on.
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I've known a few people that had these kinds of hobbies. This poem is well written, the verses seems to flow thourghout the poem. Interesting subject. I liked the last three lines:
"meet me tomarrow night
By the hotel lobby."
She's become his hobby!
Good job. Keep writing.
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A short narrative on a weathervane and change. Well written and interesting, the writer exhibits creative qualities. Entertaining, especially if you like flying horses. And in the end the narrative was emotional. Good going. Keep writing.
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This writer continues the story of the Warrior who just happens to be the good guy in this story. Interesting and well conceived. This writer exhibits the creative qualities of a poet with insight. Good job and keep on writing. Bravo for a good read.
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All of these stories were excellent. I enjoyed "The Escape." It was thrilling and exciting. "How I lost My Baby Girl" was also good. The courtroom dialogue was so realistic. Sounded like some courtrooms I've been in. "Rangers Revenge"was also real good. The lad was a young Ranger.
All of the stories were interesting and entertaining. Let's all keep writing.
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Nice poem. Good rhyming. Interesting. Makes a statement. That is done in the very last line of this piece of work.
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Writer exhibits creative qualities. Keep up the good work. Keep writing.
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This was a good story about young love. Well written and entertaining. I think you need a line break after every paragraph and after each person stops speaking. Good job other than that. Keep writing.
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