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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of The Golden Buddha  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provided a lot of food for thought. Thank you for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of AKIN  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of the recurring dreams I have of my ex-boyfriend. Definitely disturbing.

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Review of Dear Pip  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I wish I could put my ex behind me like putting a file in a cabinet, but 9 years later, I'm in therapy trying to rid myself of the trauma. It wasn't just cheating, though. It was verbal abuse and sleep deprivation from the verbal abuse while he was fueled by meth and I wanted nothing more than sleep.

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Review of Flower Field  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was refreshing to read. Thanks for sharing this lovely piece.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Review of Ambush Bug  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture in just a few words and provided a lot of food for thought.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds like a complete summary, but the presentation could use work. I recommend including a question or three to entice the reader.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This demonstrates how, sadly, religion is often used to control people. While not as extreme, similar things happen in America.

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Review of what's my sin!!!  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Who am I?  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of God Complex  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was very intriguing and provided a lot of food for thought. Personally, I've come to believe that god is in everyone, and we see it best when we fall in love.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a fun piece to read. It certainly had a unique flair.

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Review of Nurse not there  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds like a very odd experience.

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

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Review of Intro 2 Me! :)  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a simple and to-the-point introduction. I think it could have used a few more details like why you got into writing in the first place. Perhaps search the internet for interviews with your favorite authors for inspiration.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of A STORMY NIGHT  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

These are some very strong sentiments. It reminds me of one of my favorite songs, "How Can I Keep From Singing?"

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Review of A box of nothing  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

How long have these feelings been ongoing? Was there any particular triggering event? It sounds like depression that needs to be treated one way or another. I see that this is labeled "teen," so if you don't feel you can ask your parents or guardians for help, a school counselor is a good person to start with.

If you are worried about cost, Medicaid often covers mental health services, and the income threshold for minors to receive Medicaid, at least for California's version known as Medi-Cal, is higher than it is for adults. That means that minors can sometimes qualify for services even if their parents' income is too high for the parents to use it themselves.

https://www.coveredca.com/pdfs/FPL-chart.pdf?fbcli...

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Review of Nobody around  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of THE LAST WESTERN  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely blurb, and I like how it includes a question. However, I find that questions are more dynamic when the answer is more open-ended rather than a simple yes or no. Who/What/Where/Why/How questions are ideal.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

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Review of entry 30  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a bit of "Visits to the Confabulatorium" by Soramimi Hanarejima. I absolutely love the style.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

That was indeed an interesting time. Every time someone mentioned toilet paper, I shared a link to "I Use Tabo."
https://youtu.be/Vzb98tQp53I

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start. Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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