Interestingly done. It was different and a great perspective. Got the thought process going today. I found nothing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make.
Nicely done, maybe someone will read this and think first. I didn't find anything wrong but I would highly recommend putting a space between your paragraphs. It makes it easier to read and keeps it flowing all together while reading.
I thought that was adorable. It's a well written tale. I found nothing wrong to make note of but I have one suggestion. Instead of writing, Beginning, Middle, The Ending, simply put * * * * centered.
However this is solely up to you. Great job and keep up the great writing. Good Luck!!
Kris
Excellently told, people should listen to stories of history so that they learn from the past to learn how to change the future the right way. Hmmmm...nice food for thought. I didn't find anything wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make.
This was adorable. I can see why you won 1st place. Excellently written, no mistakes that I could find. I would recommend the ---- you had to center it. But other than that. Perfectly done!!!
Interestingly done. I thought you did a great job telling this and I didn't find anything to make note of. To me it felt as though there could have been a little more. But that's simply my opinion.
I would recommend putting a line inbetween the paragraphs, makes it easier for reading and keeping your place. However, this is strictly up to you!!
Katherine,
I think this is an absolutely wonderful cause. It not only gets people reviewing but helping people outside of WDC. You've put a lot of work and thought into this forum. The incentives are great, but the reasoning is great in itself.
Excellent work and I hope to be able to join and be a part of such a helpful project.
You have definitely written some powerful things and this is one of them. I thought you did a perfect job. I found nothing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work. I can't wait to read more of your work!
I thought you did a wonderful job on this. I enjoyed reading it and can't wait to read more on the Lisa Lansing Diaries. I think this fits perfectly and made me stop to think. I didn't find anything wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent Work!!
I must say this is truly deserving of the beautiful orange ribbon. You did a beautiful job writing this piece, you brought tears to my eyes a few times. I think you paid beautiful tribute to each and every one of the five. Thank you for sharing the pictures. I love seeing who items were written about.
If only more people would take the challenge you've given. The world today is simply rude and obnxious. At least that's how I feel most days. You have a point and it does feel good to do something such as simply smile or hold a door for someone or how about saying "Thank you" to someone. It brightens the day for both you and them.
Great advice and I hope lots of people take your challenge.
I'm sorry, I had to laugh, I could almost picture the look on your face. Though, I would have elaborate and not laughed at you, irregardless, I thank you for sharing. You did an excellent job. I would recommend breaking the paragraphs apart, makes it easier to read if they are separated. But of course this is up to you.
First off, I would recommend fixing the indents, they show as little boxes instead.
I found this to be insightful and very personal. I found myself sitting here agreeing with you and knowing just what you were talking about at the end. "Some Thing", I think that's the one thing which is always in the way. At least for me. But you can only do what you can to get the things you want done, done and try again the next day. Thank you for sharing!
Wow. I must say you did a wonderful job describing the inner turmoil. You poured your heart into this piece and I thank you for sharing. I found nothing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work! Keep up the great writing.
Nicely done...too bad there weren't more entries. Oh well...I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece. I don't know if I would have been as calm and not lost my cool in a similar situation, but you told the story well. I could envision her with Dave and her ranting at him and the crowd watching her as she walked across the room. Excellent work. I have no suggestions and I have nothing to make note of.
This was WONDERFUL. I couldn't help it...I had to laugh, cover my gaping mouth and laugh some more. You did a great job painting this picture for me. I truly enjoyed this and I wouldn't change a thing. I found no mistakes and I have no suggestions. But I can honestly say, this was hysterical...I had to keep reading just to find out what would happen next.
This is sweet and absolutely adorable. I enjoyed reading it and had to think of giving one's life for the one you love. I didn't find anything wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. You did a great job telling this story. I could picture the little tin soldier.
Wow...you did a wonderful job on this piece. I have to sometimes agree with the little boy and then there's the times when I agree with the old man. I guess thinking as the old man, you tend to get through life a little easier and happier. Makes one think.
I hope you enjoy your stay here. WDC is packed full with lots of wonderful people, advice and friendships. If you ever need a hand please don't hesitate to ask. Someone is always available to lend a hand or point you in the right direction. My emails always available and I'm always here.
Now for your review....You brought a smile to my face when I read this as I thought of my fiance. You did a wonderful job on this piece and I think you described the kiss perfectly. I found nothing wrong and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work!
I had to read this one. My daughter graduates next year and I am at a loss. I've begun a letter, which I hope to finish in time. However, I think you covered everything in this piece to your daughter. You put your heart and motherly advice all in one. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
I hope you enjoy your stay here. WDC is packed full with lots of wonderful people, advice and friendships. If you ever need a hand please don't hesitate to ask. Someone is always available to lend a hand or point you in the right direction. My emails always available and I'm always here.
Now for your review....Excellent piece. I enjoyed reading this as are my thoughts lots of times. You poured your heart into this piece and that's all that counts. Thank you for sharing. I would recommend i should be I and destoryed should be destroyed. Other than that it was perfect.
I have to say that I think it's an honor when someone writes something about a friend or someone close to them. I think it's a precious thing and that's what you did here. You told her of her importance to you from your heart. I enjoyed reading this and I found nothing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make.
I hope you enjoy your stay here. WDC is packed full with lots of wonderful people, advice and friendships. If you ever need a hand please don't hesitate to ask. Someone is always available to lend a hand or point you in the right direction. My emails always available and I'm always here.
Now for your review....Truly a heartfelt piece. I enjoyed reading this and it reminds me to always talk, one way or another, with the one I love. I have one suggestion...i should be I, but other than that, I wouldn't change a thing.
I happened across this piece and it did bring a smile to my face thinking of my own life with my now fiance. Two people who shouldn't have been together and so many think is wrong.
I would suggest meet should be changed to met...that is as always up to you. You do not have to make the change unless you agree.
This is absolutely beautiful! I, as a mother, would love to have my daughters write something like this for me. It's heartfelt and wonderful. You've done an excellent job and I hope you've shared this with your mother.
I have no suggestions! Excellent work and keept up the wonderful writing!
Kris
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I found nothing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make.
