I thought this was truly short and sweet and to the point. I thought you did a great job in those short little lines. I couldn't find a thing wrong and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I absolutely loved it. I had to laugh thinking of myself. Excellent job and I enjoyed the color, the font was a little small, but it was great otherwise. I did find one thing listed below.
day by day as I go on.I'll look out my (space needed after the period)
I truly enjoy reading your work. You write beautifully and your words are touching. I enjoyed this one tremendously. I thought you did a perfect job and I couldn't find anything to make note of.
I can't wait to keep going through your port to see what else you might have.
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Now for your review....I thought this was great. I truly enjoyed reading this and would suggest to arrange these into paragraphs instead of the spacing between each line, but leaving a space between the paragraphs. Now, by no means are you under any kind of obligation to take my suggestion. It's your work and it's up to you.
Great Job and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I was reading this and it just stopped. I wonder if there is more. If there is I would love to read it and I will raise my rating. I thought with what you had you did a good job explaining but left you hanging.
I hope to read the rest and more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I absolutely loved it. I admire your strength and your courage to share this with everyone. It takes great courage and strength to move forward and think about tomorrow. I thought you did a great job with this and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I have a couple typos I will list below. You are under no obligation to change your work, it's yours and yours alone.
I wont ever forget how it felt to know, (won't)
Will there every be anyone else, that you can meet? Will lighting ever strike twice? (every should be ever) & (lighting should be lightning)
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Now for your review....I thought you did a great job on this and I didn't find a thing wrong. It was short and to the point. I know how you feel when writing just doesn't work. Or the right words are just not there.
I thought this was well written and full of honesty. I thought it was heartfelt and touching. I admire the strength it took to write this and post it for the site to read and review.
I don't know if I would make this as poetry as it reads more like a short story to me. Remember that's just my suggestion and you are under no obligation to change your work.
I thought it was great and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I've read so many of your works that I thought this would be great to check out as well. Read a little more about you. I enjoyed reading this and found it enlightening and interesting.
I can't wait to read more of "Home of the Gray Dog" and if you have another after that.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfectly written. Though it was short and to the point, I thought it was perfectly done. I couldn't find a thing to make note of.
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Now for your review....I thought this was excellently written. You did a great job and I admire your honesty. It takes great courage to share yourself as you have for the world to read.
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Now for your review....I found this to be cute and informative. I enjoyed reading it and hope to read your novel sometime soon. You just never know when the urge will strike you. And remember you never have to justify you're desire to write no matter how little or how great. Just write if you choose to.
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Now for your review...I thought this was great. I had to laugh. I could picture this happening. I could imagine the looks on your kids faces and couldn't help laughing. I thought you did a great job and I couldn't find anything to make note of.
Another wonderful piece. I enjoyed reading it and the color use was great. Perfect for Autumn. The images you included were great and again I enjoy seeing something along with the poetry or story. Gives you something more.
Excellent work and I couldn't find a thing to make note of.
I loved this. I thought it was filled with heart and warmth. It's a great thing for a child faced with a loss. I didn't find anything to make note of in the actual piece. However, again I would make the top paragraph a different color to make it stand out.
Remember that's just me and of course you don't have to change it if you don't want to.
This is absolutely adorable. I loved reading it. You have a great imagination and you write wonderfully. I did find a couple of things which I've made note below. Remember they are only my suggestions.
I would also like to recommend changing the top paragraph...the note to the reader to a different color. Make it stand out and not as a part of the story.
Tim shed a tear not(which) couldn't be seen.
He made friends with the stuffed green duck and two other Teddy Bears that were bigger then(than) him.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfect and straight from the heart. I enjoyed reading it and I couldn't find a thing to make note of. Your words were very descriptive and very well written.
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Now for your review....I think you've done an excellent job on this. I couldn't find a thing to make note of. You brought some thoughts to mind with your words. Great Job and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I thought you've done a wonderful job on this. I didn't find anything to make note of. I thought this was heartfelt and touching. I enjoyed reading it and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfect. You've done a wonderful job and I couldn't find a thing to make note of.
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Now for your review....I thought you've done a wonderful job with this piece. I couldn't find anything to make note of.
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Now for your review....I thought this was well done and heartfelt. I truly enjoyed reading this and I've made a few suggestions below. Remember this is your work and you are under no obligation to change your piece.
to explore eachother (each other)
during times that werent right (weren't)
never have i fallen so quickly (I)
his patience i denied all hope from (I)
to produce something words cant describe (can't)
as though theyll never separate (they'll)
we were made for eachother (each other)
where i belong (I)
i cant hide myself from him (I can't)
one i could solely accept (I)
where i feel his delicate touch (I)
but seeing me as i am (I)
i only care to return (I)
for all the mistakes i have made (I)
loving him isnt one of them (isn't)
I would also add some punctuation, capitalization where needed and maybe even break this down into small paragraphs. Now, remember this is simply my suggestions. You don't have to make any changes to your work that you don't agree with.
Wow! This was perfectly done. You did an excellent job and I found nothing to make note of. Your grammar and spelling were perfect and you punctuation is as it should be.
I hope to read more of your work in the future. Great Job!
Keep up the great writing!
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