I thought you did a great job on this piece. I had to smile thinking of the man I love. Awesome Job! I enjoyed how you lined it up, made it different and nice to read. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have absolutely no suggestions to make.
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Now for your review....I thought this was perfect. I thought of a time when I was with someone else and it had to end and I felt so Free. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work!
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Now for your review....I thought you had the right idea here. You did a great job. However, I would recommend putting a space between your paragraphs and double checking some of your spelling and punctuation. I can go through this and give you an indepth review through email if you would like a hand making corrections. Remember this is up to you and you are under no obligation to make changes to your work.
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Now for your review....I thought you did a great job on this piece. I didn't find but one thing wrong and that was the fourth line needs a space after the comma. Other than that, I thought it was perfect and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work!
Wow, I thought this is perfect. I thought about my own daughter and pray she is always safe. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. I thought this was excellent and very well written. Great Job!
I thought you did a great job on this. I do have a couple of suggestions. How about putting ? at the end of each of the lines as they are questions. Also, the title Millon should be Million.
what happens when he sees what its made of its should be it's
Now, you don't have to make these changes at all if you don't want to. They are simply my suggestions.
Excellent. I thought you did a great job and I enjoyed reading this. You brought a smile to my face when I read this piece knowing I feel the same way. I found nothing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece. I have no suggestions and I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I loved this one. I think you did a wonderful job on it and you brought a smile to my face, maybe not the intent, but none the less you did. I thought of my own Grandfather and how I miss him so even after all this time. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Another truly excellent piece.
I thought you did a marvelous job painting the picture of the afternoon in the park. I could picture everything clearly and although I'm not fond of chess, it could be a sight to see. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work!
Wow! I can see why you recieved a plaque for this piece. I think it was truly wonderful and sad. I couldn't find a thing wrong with this and I have no suggestions to make. It's truly sad when the elderly are forgotten and pushed aside. Excellent and beautiful work.
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Now for your review....I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece. I have a few notations below. They are simply my suggestions nothing more.
First off...I should always be capitalized when pertaining to oneself.
As I lay down for bed , but still the night is sleepless No space needed between bed and ,
I absolutely LOVE THIS. I had to laugh. You did a wonderful job on this and I only found one thing which I will make note of below. I think it's all right to look as long as that's all it is. Though I have to agree...it is great for the muse to get kick started on new ideas.
It wasn’t something that happened all at once; it kind of sneaked up on me. (sneaked should be snuck)
Of course you don't have make the change if you like it the way it is. It's simply a suggestion.
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Now for your review....I absolutely Love it! You did a wonderful job on this piece. I think it's perfect. I have no suggestions and I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of. Great Work!
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Now for your review....Very nicely done. I felt the fear and prayed for her strength to leave him. I don't have any suggestions and I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of. Great Work!
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Now for your review....I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece. The only suggestion I have is to maybe center it or break it down into stanza's or paragraphs as I call them. Otherwise, I truly enjoyed reading this.
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Now for your review....I thought you did a great job on this piece. I can picture my daughter doing exactly that, if I wasn't here in the morning for her. I would like to point out that i when pertaining to yourself should be I always.
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Now for your review....I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece. I truly enjoyed reading this. It had a nice rhythm to it and easy to read. I had to smile at your words. Great Job!
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Now for your review....I thought you did a great job on this describing the fear. I have a couple of things to make note of, they are simply my suggestions, nothing more and you are under no obligation to make the changes.
I can help but worry about it. (can should be can't)
You ask if somethings wrong with me (somethings should be something's)
Its not that I dont trust you (Its should be It's and dont should be don't)
I dont want to live with out you (dont should be don't)
Otherwise I think you did a wonderful job and I hope to see more of your work in the future.
I saw your link and decided to read it. I love it. I thought of how I am with my fiance and you made me smile. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of or any suggestions to make. Great job and I love the use of color.
I happened across this piece and I thought it was great. I have one note to make...i should always be capitalized when refering to oneself. I noticed a couple of times i wasn't capitalized. Just a note, if you meant it that way, it's up to you. Great job otherwise.
I came across this piece and I thought you did a great job on it. You brought to mind a few different things. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions to make. Excellent work. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I thought you did a wonderful job on this piece. I couldn't find a thing wrong to make note of and I have no suggestions. I think you did a great job describing the feelings of being unwanted. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
I came across this piece and I felt my heart break. I have children of my own and I pray for their safety and never face what you described here. I think you did a wonderful job and I couldn't find anything to make note of. I have no suggestions and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Now for your review....I thought this was a heartfelt and loving piece. I couldn't find a thing wrong and I have no suggestions to make. It's sad when you loose a parent but even worse when there are things left unsaid. I think you did a wonderful job in this tribute to your father.
Keep up the great writing!
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Though I have to agree...it is great for the muse to get kick started on new ideas.