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Review of Natural Morning  
In affiliation with Heavenly Roses  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Natural Morning by Kings

This is a lovely little poem. It paints a crisp clear picture of that moment when the light of the sun swallows up the darkness and the world seems to sit up and rub its collective eyes.

The meter and musicality of the piece are just right. It lends a lightness and freshness to the poem that seems to compliment the theme very well.

It is a wonderful thing when we take the time to stop and enjoy all that there is around us. It is even more wonderful when someone can capture it on paper. I really doesn't matter whether that is with pixels or words as long as the legacy is left as proof of the wonders that we so often take for granted,

Thank you for sharing your morning with us. May you be blessed with the joy of many many more.

Write on!

Rose

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In affiliation with Heavenly Roses  
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a happy little piece of family history I have happened upon. I really am becoming a fan of the Random Read feature.

Four Generations-Captured by Harry

Sometimes the content outweighs the structure, language and flow. For me that is the case with this particular piece. The subject matter and the story are so endearing that the rest just does not matter.

The image of these six men standing frozen in time for all eternity is so awesome. I am sure that some frustrated English teacher type would tell you that this was not a poem at all but merely an outpouring of emotion and a collection of thoughts that are strung together with little or no punctuation. You know what I say to that....bologna! This is a poem....a poem of one of the finest types. It is a piece of your heart that you have translated into words and placed it out here for us all to share.
To you I say Bravo, write on and tell the frustrated English teachers thanks but no thanks. I really appreciated the last line. As if the images of all of those boys was not enough to put a smile on my face...that last line made me laugh out loud.

Thank you so much for sharing this. Three cheers to you and your 4 generations of men!

Rose
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Taking a tour of the most credited reviewers ports has lead me here to yours. Thank you so much for giving of your time and talent to support and encourage your fellow writers here at WDC.

Pieces of Our Lives by Christina

One of the lies our Mothers never meant to tell us "Sticks and stones may break my bones but words will never hurt me." Words do hurt and quite often they hurt more than physical blows because there is really no regular mechanism for healing. And whats more since there are no physical signs of the injury, if no one is there to hear, the victim is often not believed.

A wonderfully brave and insightful work of poetry. It addresses a topic that most of us deal with in one way or another and very very few of us are willing to discuss in the open. I applaud your casting a light on this awful secret.

My favorite part:
It causes hurt deep inside
Words reaching secret spaces
Hence forgetting honor or pride
We see no sorrow on the faces.

It is so well written and so absolutely true. I think that the next time some one says that something that you've said didn't matter and forgives you with ease and grace. You should reach deep inside and let them know how truly sorry you are and make an effort to help overt yet another indelible scar.

Well done...

Rose
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Thank you so much for all of the time that you spend reading and reviewing the work of others. This is a review the reviewer day and this little review is submitted with gratitude for your service.

They Look So Perfect by:Frontierman

The beauty and perfection that is an unborn child is indescribable. The pain that is inflicted by the untimely and sometimes unexplained loss of such a child is equally indescribable.

This piece was very gripping and touched me very deeply. I am a woman who has been blessed with children as well as touched by the loss of a child more than once. I can fully understand and echo the anger and frustration that you speak of having for our dear Lord and Savior.

Thank you so much for sharing this piece. So many have been in the place of which you speak and all too often the words of others are not only of no comfort but are thoughtless and cruel. It is good to see that the loss is real and the anger and frustration are not unique and that ultimately somewhere on the other side in the morning there is the promise of the return of hope.

Very well written...thank you for sharing this vital piece of wisdom with our community.

Always,

Rose
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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It is with great pleasure that I come to visit the port of the most credited reviewer! I wanted to let you know that all of your time and effort has not gone unnoticed.

If Six Weeks Remains by Yellow Rose

This is an interesting title that leads into quite an insightful piece of poetry. The piece is extremely thought provoking. I do not think that anyone could read the title without thinking, "What would I do?"

The path that the author has chosen for the to do list for the six weeks that remain is admirable and one that I would think most people could relate to.

I think that the best part of this piece is the down to earth honest nature of it. This is quite admirable. I think that quite a number of people would be scrambling should they find out that only six weeks remain. I only hope that if I should find myself in that situation that I would be able to approach it with the grace and faith of our dear Yellow Rose.

This was a lovely poem...thank you for sharing it with us. And thank you for taking the time to read rate and review so many works around the site. Your work is greatly appreciated.

Always,

Rose

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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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A well written tale of our times. I love the way that you have taken such a simple and undeniably beautiful thing like the daisy and made it the center point of your work.

I find the structure of the piece enchanting. I like the way you have chosen not to use capital letters in the vile and disgusting part of the piece. It is as though these particular stanzas are not even worthy.

My favorite part is the reference to those of us who attempt to find the beauty and morality among the vile wasteland that has become our world.

"...for which the service minded search for,

and tried to retrieve, risking the high price
of becoming victims of ridicule, ill fame
hate, malicious gossip and quite often loss
of dear lives,..."

Your choice of words is excellent. It leads the reader down into the dumpter and then skillfully back into the field of sunlight and beautiful golden daisies.

Thank you for sharing this piece with us. I have no suggestions save that you continue to grace us with your insight and vision.

Always,

Rose
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Review of Finding Me  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Welcome aboard! Glad to have you here at WDC! It is my pleasure to offer this review of your debut piece.

This is an outstanding work of poetry. I am especially fond of your use of vocabulary. Many people are afraid to use words that are not in common usage. This lifts your piece to a level that fits very well with the title and message. Discovery and rediscovery involves risks as does using vocabulary that forces people to think...to reach beyond the comfort of their everyday speech. Well done!

The flow and form are both engaging and compelling. It is great when a poem almost reads itself.

The third stanza is my favorite...the image is outstanding!

And, yet, surviving by clinging to moonbeams
Hope, joy, love, lust, and warmth
of and from people of all kind
Swimming in the dark, alone, but in shoals

I have but one suggestion for you...write, write and write some more. You have a gift and it would be a shame not to nuture and share it.

Always,

Rose
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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I have thoroughly enjoyed my time here in your port. I hope that you have enjoyed your Power Shop reviews and that you will reccoment us to others as you travel about in the community.

Heart to Heart C-Note Shop #4 by Whome

I really love this collection.. The combination of the water color images of flowers and the touching words is just wonderful.- These loving and inspirational c -notes will surely be appreciated by any and all who receive them.

Thank you again for making your portfolio sucjh a warm and inviting place. You should be commended for all that you do here in this community.

Keep up the amazing work!

Rose
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Review of Spoken With Love  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Spoken With Love by Whome

This is a quirky little love poem that says more with its down to earth references than most pieces convey with their flowery cliches.

It is a real shame what Hallmark and the large retail markets have done to most all of our holidays. I really enjoyed this piece. I liked the clever way in which it was written. The rhythm, meter and rhyme of it are quite compelling.

My favorite part..."You had gone out and bought me the biggest paper weight, A KITCHENAID mixer and a deep fat fryer, in slate."

True love, it seems is more than just hearts and flowers. It lasts and endures far beyond the honeymoon period and it finds a new home in some of the most strange and interesting places. There is always love in the whrr of the mixer as it prepares the batter of a celebratory cake. There is much love in a proper batch of chips.

Well done, Best of everything to you and your Earthy Valentine.

Thanks again for giving us a chance to experience your talent and peek in on your life!

Rose
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello, it is a pleasure to visit your port today. I hope that you will enjoy your Power Shop Reviews!

Spring Is On The Way by Whome

This is a poem in the Haiku style. This is a style that always intrigues me. I must admit that I don't believe that I have written anything in this style since College Writing. This particular example is quite solid. Though I feel very strongly that you could probably create a much stronger piece...

This piece really does create the feeling of Spring coming. The middle line is my favorite. "Sunshine illuminating"
I'm not sure why but I really can see the sparkle.

A sound example of a charming poetic style!

Thank you for sharing!


Rose
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Review of Cusp  
In affiliation with Heavenly Roses  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is one of my favorite things to do on a cold damp morning like today is here in the Northeastern United States. Here I sit snuggled under the covers in my bed reading and reviewing whatever the "Random Read" send my way...

I have just adored reading this little piece. The imagery is just amazing. I have had each and everyone of my senses awakened in reading your piece. The rhythm and flow of the piece are as effortless as the descent of that "lone lea" that you speak of.

I especially like the reference to the fawn's disregard of "Labor Day traditions". They are one of my most favorite signs of fall.

A beautifully written little piece about a beautifully adorned short little season.

Write on....Rose
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Review of We Danced  
In affiliation with Heavenly Roses  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Good evening, Rose here, just stopping by to spread some joy and leave some presents for the 12 days of Christmas!

We Danced by emerin-liseli

What a lovely picture you paint with this charming little story poem. The images of the snow and ice covering the trees and blanketing the patio are just wonderful. I am so enamored with your take on the circle of life theme. The pan of your camera from the encounter in the gym as kids to the stolen kiss in the wood to the current day dance in the snow with the children as giggling witnesses is just priceless.

I was saddened for a moment by the footprints being filled in by the new snow. This did not last long though I can see the joy in the snowball fight and the other new and exciting things that the family and the memories of the past will bring.

Very well done.

Write on!

Rose
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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All-Encompassing Light By Maria Mize

A powerful anthem. A trumpet of truth. I really enjoyed reading this piece.

I sincerely hope that many people will read it and see the pure truth in the words. Our Lord and Savior is coming...He above all is a Man of His word and He is coming. Are you ready? Is your house in order? Have you been walking in the path that He has laid out for us?

Please, everyone...heed this dear poets words. . . make sure that your light is not under a bushel!

Well Done

God Bless,

Rose
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I Love You, Because by Tim Chiu


This is an exceptional work. It is difficult to tell whether the author is speaking of a human object of his love or a devine one. I think that this is what gives the poem its almost transendental quality

I want to experience this love. i think that the closest that I have ever come is during adoration. Being in the presence of Christ , body, blood soul and divinity is an indescribible joy.

Thank you for sharing your love with us. It is a prescious thing and I hope that it is with you for all the rest of your days!

Well Done!
Rose
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Review of I Will Know  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I Will Know by SGuiles77

This is a wonderfully moving and unique work of poetry. The use of metaphor and oxymoron is just exquisite. I found myself wanting to read the piece over and over again.

I think that you could make an amazing leap to a whole other level if you looked at the physical appearance of the words on the screen or paper. You have painted such an amazing picture of exploration and discovery it would be awesome if the poem resembled the human form perhaps.

Overall this is a wonderful piece of poetry. I thouroghly enjoyed reading it. Even though I think it might be improved by my suggestion remember it is your work and it is outstanding just the way that it is!

Well Done~
Rose
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Review of His Hand in Mine  
In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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It is with a smiling heart that I drop by your port this evening. I so love prowling through the volumes that my fellow Rising Stars have put up for us all to enjoy. Thank you for sharing your talent!

His Hand in Mine

What a sad, touching and at the self same moment joyful and empowering piece. I often wonder why the old saying about not knowing how good it is to have someone or something in your life until they are gone is proven true over and over.

This piece is just beautifully written. You have captured a feeling and painted a picture that has touched my heart. Thank you for sharing this slice of your life with us and keep up the good work.
It is easy to see why you are a Rising Star.

Rose
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Review of Game Break  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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This is a very well written piece. It starts out so matter of factly. I love the way that you transition into the hot steamy quicky.

It really touches a chord it seems to me to be so realistic. I can imagine them lost in their ecstacy and being drawn back to reality by the sounds of the game in the distance.

It was a pleasure to read this piece and I will be sure to stop by your place again soon. I am thrilled to be able to pile another 5.0 on this piece it is truly deserving!

Write on!!
Rose
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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A poetic glimpse at some end of life issues.

The form suites the subject matter very well. I must say that the pattern that the words create reminds me of the tracings created by the very machine that you describe.

I feel your pain as you describe how you feel this medical intervention has violated your loved one. I am not sure what the circumstances are or were but I sincerely hope and pray that you all receive a peaceful and gracious release from this pain you've described.

Thank you for sharing this very personal piece with us. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

Write On!!!
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Review of Soar  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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A beautiful work of poetry.

I am deeply touched by the faith, hope and perseverance described within its lines. The imagery is beautiful. I was especially taken by this stanza...

Rest comes for the weary,
dreaming amid the stars.
Rooted deep within your rock,
you last and retrieve,
the truth is revealed.


Thank you so much for sharing this inspiring work with us and best of luck to you in the contest.

Write On!!!

Angelina
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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This is amazing. It is well thought out, well constructed and masterfully written.

I adore the way that you set it all up. The truth is we never know! We should really all "live like we were dying," because we all are. Some of us have just been blessed or cursed with a clearer idea of when.

I only wish she hadn't hung up after the beep!

Thank you for sharing this story with us and best of luck in the contest.

Write On!!!
Angelina
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Chapter 4

This is the chapter that truly captured me. It was at this point that I knew that I would read the entire story.

The creative problem solving skills of the original man were simply outstanding. I could see him with these two replicas following along behind him and just had to know what in the world would happen next.

The imagery of the towns people building towers along the road was excellent. I loved the way that you handled the replicas personality flaws through this section of the story.

With the discovery of the third replica, I was beginning to groan again. I honestly thought that you were taking a good thing too far.

The thought quickly disintergrated as you developed the character of this third replica. The intricacies of him made me stop and take notice. I was positive that the story would never have been as worthwhile without him.

Chapter 5

This chapter served to be another major turning point in the story. The addition of the fog struck me as hokey at the start. I was quite leery of what you were trying to conceal within it. The encounter with the Black Witch and the introduction of the females was well done. The interplay between the men and the women lead me to believe that they would not ever reach the castle. I seriously thought that each of their problems were to be solved by the meeting of their female companion.

The fork in the road was a wonderful tactic. The true message and point of the story was beginning to take shape. As the men and women parted, each going down their own path, followed by their replicas, I applauded.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Please, please forgive me. I accidentally hit the enter key before I had completed the review of the Preamble and Chapter 1.

Anyhow, I was, by the end of chapter one, intrigued and eager to find out exactly where you were going to take this tale. Though you were still talking about a road to see a Wizard, there was something different, and I was eager to find out what it was!

Chapter 2

Here is where you truly parted company with the old plot line. The character that you met along the Golden Road was quite a surprise. Having your traveler meet a twin on the road was definitely new. Having this twin be someone who could not tell the truth about himself made the story into a true page turner. The interplay between these two becomes nothing short of genius.

Chapter 3

As the two men continue down the Golden Road, I too, like the original of the two men thought that maybe the twin would be "cured". Of course this was not the case, the only thing that could help him was the wizard.

As they approached the oddly shaped building, I must admit, I again, became quite apprehensive.

I was quite pleasantly surprised by what they found. This additional look alike was very interesting. The store, with nothing for sale was excellent and the signs were outstanding.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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The preamble has all the elements of a great story. It captures and holds the readers attention from the very first line. It begins a solid foundation for the main character to develop from. You have included some outstanding imagery as well, which, honestly never hurts.

The first chapter, I must admit, started out a groaner for me. I found myself rolling my eyes and praying that you would part ways with the incredulous Wizard of Oz plot line quickly.
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Review of Where I Belong  
Rated: E | (5.0)

This is most definitely where you belong! You have a God given gift for sharing a tale. You are able to create them like no one else can.

This poem is no exception. I was captured with the first line and lead skipping with delight straight through to the end.

I guess it is a good thing that Gabriella sometimes knows the Stars better than they know themselves. Think how much we all would have missed had she not recruited you to take this leap.

Another excellent piece of work. Thank you for entering the contest...Best of luck to you!

Write On!!!

Angelina

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Review of A Word to Live By  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Sage advice!

This is well written and dare I say vital information for not only parents but all people who come in contact with and have a hand in influencing the growth and development of children.

It is astounding to me, how many teachers today, really don't even appear to like children. Communicate with them, don't be ridiculous, they give orders that they hope will be followed. Hear them; are you kidding me? They spend the bulk of their day telling them to "Shut up and listen!" Encourage, now this one they do employ but only when parents or members of the supervisory staff are around. Accept, now this is really funny. The teachers today are so unaccepting of children that if it were up to them all of our children would be as stuporous as the patients in the mental institutions used to be. Respect, well obviously, that does not exist. It would be impossible considering that the other elements have been so glaringly disregarded.

Of course, I realize that this is not true of all teachers. My children have had a few amazing teachers but unfortunately I have come in contact with many many teachers who fit the picture that I described above.

Thank you for writing this amazing piece of work. I hope that you will share it with everyone you can think of who has a hand in the future of our children.

Write on!!!
Angelina
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