I love your descriptions in this, the lines 'A breath of beauty, midsummer's dream' were my favorites. This poem was simple, yet so full of feeling. You did a good job of expressing your feelings! Keep up the good work.
Welcome, again, to my contest! It's good to have you in the second round.
The review: This poem was so heartfelt, I really enjoyed it. I could almost feel the emotion being emitted from it. You did a really good job with this; keep up the good work!
Description: The descriotion of most of the carecters is absent in this piece. What made me give it such a low rating is that it does not exactly say who is the person narrating the poem. Because of that, the poem is really confusing.
Imagery: It was pretty good, like I said the absence of the charecter distracted me.
Flow: There was not much of a flow to this piece even though it rhymed.
Suggestions: I would suggest putting another stanza in that describes who is speaking/thinking.
Errors: I found no spelling/grammar errors in this poem.
Personal/Overall impression: I really liked the feel this poem gave, and I also like the point to the piece. Good job!
This is soo simple, yet at the same time so beautfiul. In this case, a few words express emtion wonderfully. Great job...(and also, i'm sure you already know this but I thought tell you anyways, there are no spelling/grammar errors in this piece)
I like this poem. It's pretty good. I would suggest putting it in short stanzas instead of those long sentences because then it seems more like a prose. But overall, good job!
I'd like to say that this is one of the most beautiful pieces I have ever read. The flow is perfect, and it is discrptive and certainly well written. Amazing job, keep up the great work!!!
Sincerely and always, Malli_Jade
Check it out, all are welcome...
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First I'd like to say thank you for entering my poetry contest!
The review: I liked this poem, but it was rather repetitive. You seemed to use the same words over and over. It kind of exausted them. It has a pretty good flow to it.
First off, I'd like to say thanks for entering my poetry contest!
The review: I like this piece alot. It decribes with true sincerity the peaceful and quick lingering of a falling star. It all was written well and is very dicrpitive. Good job; write on!!!
Sincerely and always, Malli_Jade
P.S; Here are the gps for entering
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I like this poem alot, because that is what many of us wish we could do, but unfortunatly cannot.
The one thing I did not like about it were the colors in it. They distract the poem, and I had to read it many times times to understand it. I would suggest, if you want color in the poem, make it all one color. But that just really distractes the reader. (Just my opinion)
This is a beautiful piece. It reflects lost memeories so much...I could feel each drop. The color makes it lighter, yet sorrowful...the fact that it is in the center is better, too. Good piece!
The first part of the is poem does not have a very good flow too it, the words seem almost cut short, not allowing the person to drink in the emotions.
The second part is much better, and it made me feel like I could feel the air and the sea.
Good read. Write on!!!
Sincerely and always, Malli_Jade
P.S here is the gps for enetering
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Description: The descriotion of most of the carecters is absent in this piece. What made me give it such a low rating is that it does not exactly say who is the person narrating the poem. Because of that, the poem is really confusing.
Imagery: It was pretty good, like I said the absence of the charecter distracted me.
Flow: There was not much of a flow to this piece even though it rhymed. 
Suggestions: I would suggest putting another stanza in that describes who is speaking/thinking. 
Errors: I found no spelling/grammar errors in this poem. 
Personal/Overall impression: I really liked the feel this poem gave, and I also like the point to the piece. Good job!
