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Review of Hotly Scored  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A short and simple piece, yet it manages to say a lot. It is full of dark emotion and pain. The piece has good flow and structure. My favorite part is the final stanza. I don't recall ever hearing or reading the phrase "unlearned pain". That sounds quite powerful.
You did a good job presenting your thoughts. They come across clearly, not complicated, which may cause a reader to have one of those "head scratch" moments. Overall, a nice piece. Thanks for sharing with us. Keep up the good work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Like A Flower  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This review comes as part of your Loyalty Package 2 from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON . *Smile*

You did a great job comparing your state of being to that of a flower, withering under the darkness and despair or blossoming under the warm light of positivity and love. This simple approach was very effective. Your piece was full of emotions, negative and positive, which flowed together seamlessly.

The rhyming is consistent and the flow is steady and even. You did a great job keeping it all going and keeping me interested from start to finish. I've never compared myself to a flower, but it certainly was a unique analogy that worked very well for your intended message. Thanks for sharing this with us. It is a nice read.
Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This review comes as part of your Loyalty Package 2 from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON . *Smile*

I like the thoughts behind this piece. I absolutely agree with them too. Promises are not cheap words to be tossed around and broken when it's convenient. Broken promises lead to broken relationships, broken hearts, and broken spirits.
This piece flows well and has solid structure. You did a great job following the chosen rhyme scheme. The last stanza is my favorite part. A nice, powerful statement to bring the piece to a close.
You put a lot of emotion into this piece, adding to the serious tone. It definitely shows what can happen when the promises we make are not followed through faithfully. Nicely done! Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This review comes as part of your Loyalty Package 2 from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON . *Smile*

This is such a feel good piece that is written well. It has a nice, steady flow and great overall structure. Your personal and faithful relationship with the Almighty is quite apparent.
The piece is full of warm, light-hearted emotion, giving off a positive vibe. You present your thoughts clearly, never leading the reader astray into some unnecessary tangent. I was able to feel your passion for the Lord and see the love you have for Him.
I think a lot of people tend to forget that He listens to us all the time. He can hear all our thoughts and prayers, each and every day. You definitely do not have that problem. *Wink* Thank you for sharing this with us.
Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Seeing as how I wouldn't know anapestic from antipasto, I'll take your word for it. *Wink* My knowledge of poetry is very little, though I am trying to learn more from time to time.

As far as the piece goes, it's nicely written. It flows well and has a lot of emotion poured into it. The darkness surrounding it is apparent, showing a soul that has reached a point when moving on is the desired outcome. I think it's a powerful statement you've made here. You present your thoughts clearly, allowing the reader to follow along easily and not get sidetracked.

This somber piece stands strong and is a good example of what a person may feel like when ready to feel Death's embrace. Nicely done! Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a feel good piece. The positive emotion and energy just jump out at you. I can feel the contentment and the thoughts of "all is right with the world." It's too bad that we cannot experience perfect, joy filled moments like this more often. Too often our lives are filled with stresses and mounting problems that detract time that could be used for satisfying moments such as the one you describe in this piece.

Your wording is a very good fit for the warm, pleasant mood that is present in this piece. It has a steady, even flow, allowing the reader to easily follow along. You managed to keep it all together and not go off in unnecessary tangents. Thanks for sharing this piece. Nice job! Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Falling For You  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well written piece. I can see why it received an award. The subject matter mirrors the feelings that many have felt before. How often do we find ourselves thinking about someone new while still thinking about a person we lost? We try not to advance on to the next until we are ready to leave the previous behind, but that does not always follow according to plan.
Our hearts lead us in directions that our minds may not agree with, causing emotional conflict and pain. Your piece shows that we inevitably surrender to our inner feelings. You did a great job presenting your views.

The piece has a steady, even flow and solid overall structure. You followed the chosen rhyme and syllable scheme consistently, not always an easy task(I should know *Wink*.) Thanks for sharing this quality writing with us. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Angels Listened  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This review comes as part of your Angel Package from Just because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON .

This piece is very good. Your words paint a vivid picture of what the Son went through so that we may be saved. His actions are too often forgotten. Instead, many people believe their own actions will save them. They will get their answer to that soon enough.

The piece flows fairly well and has good overall structure. I can sense the emotions you poured into writing it. There is a good mixture of light and darkness, with light shining brightest at the end of the piece. The last stanza is my favorite part.
You did a great job with sharing your thoughts about how our Lord's death and ultimate rising provide us with the Hope needed to save us from an afterlife of damnation. Nicely done! Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This review comes as part your Angel Package from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON .

This is a nicely written piece. It possesses great balance between negative and positive emotions. You did great with keeping the rhyming scheme consistent, and managed to keep everything flowing nice and steady.
I absolutely agree with the last two lines. Each of us determines what happens as the moments of our life pass by. All consequences are a direct result of any action, inaction, or reaction our minds decide on.

The events of the world, good and bad, all take place in a moment's space, as you cleverly show us. I think you did a great job presenting your thoughts. They were clear and concise. Thank you for sharing this with all of us. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Macabre Dance  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This review comes as part of your Friendship Package from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON .

This piece looks like it could be a scene straight out of Dracula's prom. *Wink* It is emotionally dark and a tad morbid, but it works. Your words are descriptive, allowing for the formation of clear mental images that enhance the reading experience. I could picture blood flowing from lips as it was drank heartily. Quite gruesome indeed.

The piece has a nice, steady flow and good overall structure. My favorite part was:
Forget your troubles
Become one with the hatred
That is deep within you
A firm, powerful statement that jumps out at you. Nice choice of words.

This is a solid piece that probably came from that dark place we all have inside. It does not always show itself, but I believe it dwells within each and everyone of us. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Dear God  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This piece is a desperate cry for help when faced with internal turmoil. It is straight and to the point, showing an outpouring of emotion to the Almighty when His love and caring is needed most. The simplicity of the piece is perfect, because I don't know about anyone else, but when I seek His guidance, the last thing I'm worried about is using complex dialogue. It seems more real this way.
We sometimes need reassurance that He listens to us, even though we have learned that He listens to everybody, all the time. Still, we often ask for signs instead of just believing it to be so. I'm guilty of that myself.

Your piece, though short in length, manages to say a lot. It flows well and has good structure. I'm sure He heard every word. *Wink* Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a nicely written piece. The subject matter is different than what I'm used to seeing. I think you did a great job showing what sort of letter a person's mind would write to their soul. I found myself nodding in agreement with the thoughts and views you presented. I'm sure a lot of people feel the same way, that the mind is the racy, non-stop entity, while the soul is the calming, easy going half of the equation.

I certainly have experienced many moments when my mind just blurs everything together, thought after thought just piling up inside my head. Sometimes my soul doesn't always slow things down right away, but it eventually works its wonders and my head slows down.

Your piece flows well and has sound structure. The use of bold for "I" and "you" seemed appropriate, albeit unnecessary. Thanks for sharing this, I enjoyed the read very much. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Pigeon Parade  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
It sounds like your backyard would make the Audubon Society proud. *Wink* As far as a valuable life lesson being found, I'd say the pigeon showed a bit of perseverance after suffering social rejection.
Your piece is lighthearted and gives an interesting look at the daily activity of your new-found "pigeon pals".
You use very descriptive wording which allowed for the formation of clear mental images, making for a more well rounded reading experience.

I liked the last paragraph, showing the interaction between the male and female pigeons. The male doing all he can to woo the female, only to be shot down in flames. It looked like an all too familiar scene one would see at a local club. Well, minus a slap in the face of course. *Laugh*

The piece has a nice, steady flow and solid overall structure. I haven't read many pieces about birds, but this was a good one for sure. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of The Tree and Me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This was a heartwarming piece. It possesses good feelings of a past being remembered and re-visited. There is a positive vibe and sense of emotional attachment shown toward the old tree.
The piece has decent flow and structure, with subject matter not really tapping into anything original, but it stands strong nonetheless. It has a charm all its own. I think you did a good job presenting your thoughts about the tree and your history with it. Your wording is descriptive enough to allow the reader to form mental images as they follow along. Nicely done! Keep up the good work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Love's Too Blind  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This piece shows how love is one emotion that can follow both light and dark paths. It can be so joyous and crippling, all in the same day. Your words showed a lot of negative and positive feelings. They flowed at a steady pace and kept my interest as I read along.
The piece has solid structure, not veering from its intended course. You did a good job presenting your thoughts to the readers. Love is such a tricky emotion. It lets us see things how we want to and not as they really are, blinding us to facts that may break our spirits. Thank you for sharing this. Keep up the good work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of A Darkest Sleep  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This piece certainly gives a good reason to leave the light on. *Laugh* Nightmares haunt many of us during our time of slumber. Why must our dreams be trespassed by such horrible images and thoughts? It's a question we may never answer.
Your piece has fairly good flow and structure. The words are full of emotion, fear being very prevalent. You kept the rhyme scheme consistent throughout. Overall, a pretty good piece. Keep up the good work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (3.5)
This was a very somber piece, filled with a lot of dark emotion. There was some hope sprinkled in toward the end, which was good to see. The flow was very uneven, making it difficult to get into any sort of rhythm while reading. This may be due to translation into English(I'm guessing Vietnamese is your first language). The sentence structures were broken in a lot of places, but I did manage my way through and still understood what you were trying to say.
You tried to paint a vivid picture with your words, and you came through in some spots. This piece has a lot of potential, it just needs a bit of polishing and tweaking to smooth things out. I believe you have the talent to go a long way, you just need to work a bit on clarity when changing from one language to another. Keep up your good work and positive direction. Never stop trying. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Promise Me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
It definitely has potential. I was trying to read it with a soft rock or R&B mindset, not easy for a metalhead such as myself, but I gave it a shot. You show a lot of emotion in the piece, both positive and negative. This piece would definitely fit as a sappy, sweet love song. You words show feelings of love and pain felt within. Not to bad at all. I'm not an expert songwriter by any stretch of the imagination, but I think you did a decent job. Keep up the good work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Heaven On Earth  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
It's a nice piece, but what exactly would one be floating to? Heaven I'm guessing. The piece has an overall positive feel. I understand the wanting of a Heaven on Earth, an end to all negativity and suffering.
Your piece has decent flow and structure. I only noticed one incorrectly spelled word, "discision" should be "decision". You have a good concept here, it just needs a bit of tweaking. It takes more than making the right decisions to make this a heavenly place. I like your thinking, I too wish that this earthly realm was more like the heaven above. Keep up the spirited writing and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Don't Worry Mom  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This piece is a nice tribute to your mother. It is full of positive emotion and warmth. The way it is structured, at least for a poem, is a bit different than what I'm used to seeing, but it still worked.
I could sense how you were feeling now that you are wearing the hat of a parent, remembering what your own mother went through bringing you up. You kept everything simple and easy to follow. Good job! Keep up the nice work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This piece is well written, sounding very intelligent and eloquent. Your word usage paints a vivid picture of a scene that has been played out countless times in Central Park. I'm from New York and have witnessed similar scenes myself. I miss the days of my youth in New York and this was a nice reminder.

The piece flows well and has great overall structure. It has a positive vibe to it and was a pleasant read. Thank you for sharing with us. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike {e:cool]

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Review of Do Not Enter  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This review comes as part of your Gift Points & More Package from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON .

This looks like a good case of personal withdrawal. Sometimes we do not want to share our thoughts and feelings with others, or be around them for that matter. This piece is full of darker, more negative emotion. It flows well and has good overall structure. Your words reflect a troubled mind that wants to keep its doors closed to any that may wish to pick it apart. The knowledge they try to obtain may be something that they are better left without. People have good reasons why they wish to keep certain things to themselves.
You did a good job getting your message across. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Review of Freedom's Key  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This review comes as part of your Gift Points & More Package from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON .

This is a nicely written piece. It has a positive, hopeful vibe to it. I can feel the emotion put into it. Your words are well chosen and easy to follow.
Freedom is something that is often taken for granted. Without the sacrifices made to preserve it, we would soon find ourselves not enjoying it anymore. There are plenty of people on this planet that would love to experience the kind of freedoms we have here in the U S of A.
I like the way you presented your views. Great job! Keep up the good work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This review comes as part of your Gift Points & More Package from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON .

This definitely sounds like an embarrassing, yet quite comical moment. I think at one time or another, most people have a moment such as this. I certainly have.
The piece flows well and ha sound structure. You kept it straight and simple, never deviating into unnecessary word usage. It is light-hearted and gives the reader a little chuckle at the end. Nicely done! Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This review comes as part of your Gift Points & More Package from Just Because I Want To and SHERRI GIBSON for being one of this weeks Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers.

This is a nice little tribute to our country and those that fight to protect it. My grandfather was in WW II and I carry his dog tags with me each day. You have filled the piece with positive energy and emotion, showing pride for the U S of A. I salute you! *Wink*
We should never take freedom for granted. It always comes with a price. I join you in saluting those brave souls that make it a welcomed reality. Thanks for sharing this with us. Keep up the great work and positive direction. Write on! *Smile*

Mike *Cool*

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