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#3195459

Review of Icy Love

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Rated: 13+

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Hi Wyn! It is me again

This was written for 'The Writer's Cramp.' A contest where you have a prompt and must create a new story or poem within 24 hours. Quite a feat if you muse is working against you. Yours seem to be guiding you in your attempt to capture the essence of the prompt.

This reminds me of two lovers, perhaps Native Americans, who have a cave for their shelter or a fur covered home. They are able to ignore the storm for the storm between the two lovers is more intense than anything that may be going on weather wise.

Electric's out, from frozen sleet,
This line makes me think you are indoors and the time is more recent then I thought when first reading.

Warmth spreads out beyond the hearth,
Its comfort fills the room;
Orange flames cast light and start
to hold at bay, the gloom.
I loved this verse!

Great job with the prompt and the deadline!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3195457

Review of Dear Me

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Rated: E

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I am not sure how one rates a 'Dear Me' letter. Here, you have correct spelling and punctuation. Grammar seems fine.

I love reading these. I can't wait to write one in January. It will probably be posted late as I will be visiting my daughter and grand baby in Cali, but I will be taking along my journal

Did you keep all your promises to yourself? I know there is tons of stuff in your port, but as popular as you are on reviewing groups boards, we needs tons to read. I hope you are writing daily!

I loved how you were talking to yourself on this. Dual personality...We will...heehee. I talk to myself and yes, I answer too!

Good job on making goals. I can't wait to see what you do for next year. The site, or whoever created this contest, should have a follow up. I would love to know who actually stuck to their vows to do this and that.

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3195423

Review of Poetry Terminology

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Rated: E

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Hi ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

Wow! This crossword makes me realize how little I know about poetry writing and umm..perhaps reviewing. This is like a class in itself. I challenge any reviewer to do this crossword. It is not an easy go.

I tend to review things differently than some. I read to feel something. I try and help as far as grammar and spelling are concerned, but it has to be very obvious for me to even notice any errors if I am engrossed into what I am reading. I do need to take a class though. New Horizons, here I come

I think you did a wonderful job with this. You challenge all of us to learn while have fun. I m ay not know the answers now, but i would by the end of the crossword puzzle.

The only suggestion I have is that you have a source link for others, who may not know as much as you do about poetry. This way we can look up answers if the questions are not easily understood by the Google search bar.

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3195417

Review of Winter Comfort

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Rated: E

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Hi jaya

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

What a beautiful tribute to your son! This will be a treasure for him in years to come.

He is the spring to my winter,
fills my world with warm presence.
He is the Sun that shatters fear,
So pretty. I believe this is a perfect example of use of simile. I am still learning the proper names of certain 'terms'. The comparison of your son being the sun and your spring is a beautiful way to describe what he brings to your life. Note: needs to take a refresher course at her local college.

My waiting eyes and hopeful heart,
read the news of his coming home.
I am not sure why exactly, but for some reason this makes me think he is overseas in combat? If not, I think many mothers who have children overseas could relate to you poem regardless.

I enjoyed this very much! I am positive that you son enjoyed it even more.

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3195406

Review of Scribbling for Self Discovery

for entry "Suicide"

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Rated: E

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I am visiting your port and offering this humble review because you signed my guest book and hopefully filled your end of the deal and reviewed the person who signed below you

I am reviewing this whole concept, as I have done before. this is one thing I did not notice last time I was browsing through this folder. I am sure there is much I missed, so i am sure I will be back.

You know how I feel about this program and that I am excited for you to take it to schools and recovery centers.

I am curious to what the answers to this question were. Would you mind if, eventually, I make a similar poll. It would be a great addition to my book.

I will answer the question right here. yes, i have tried when I was a teen. I was limited to what I had access to and thankfully I did not succeed. Teens, today, have access to so much more as way of prescription drugs. More of a means to succeed. i only hope that they think before they act upon what is a temporary situation. I do not think people stop and really think of people other than themselves in distress. I can only plead that they do.

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#3195400

Review of Feathers

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Rated: ASR

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I am visiting your port and offering this humble review because you signed my guest book and hopefully filled your end of the deal and reviewed the person who signed below you

ken, I would wish to express my deepest sympathy to you over the loss of your wife. I avoided reviewing this, even though I have read it a couple of times, because I did not know what to say. I am still at a loss of words.

The words are so beautiful but painful.

I must be water.
Highlighting the peaks,
shining light through the prism
of time and coloring her past
in rainbow hues.

I must be hope.
I cannot be truth.
Hope is so much better than truth and I understand your reasons to wanting to take up that role. I believe you did a wonderful job at loving her completely!

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#3195395

Review of Think.. what else should our lives be

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

I am visiting your port and offering this humble review because you signed my guest book and hopefully filled your end of the deal and reviewed the person who signed below you

This is beautiful. Is it an acrostic? You say it is your first. You first what? Prose or acrostic? It fit a definite form but what that form is I am unsure of.

The words are indeed an optimistic way of looking at life.

What else should our lives be but a labyrinth of emotions
Of choosing the correct pieces to create our master jigsaw
Of building bridges in order to cross the surging rivers
Seriously, all I can say is "wow". This said so much to me and touched my heart! It made me embrace my life and want to build those bridges.

If this is not entered into a contest, it should be!

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#3195392

Review of Have You Ever?

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Rated: E

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Hi Kristi

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing. This review is being brought to you on behalf of Helping Hearts and The Paper Doll Gang

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

Overall Impression:
Wow! This is beautiful Kristi! At first I thought it would be something written similar to how Dr. Seuss (a great imaginative mind) would write...The have you ever....Anyways, you may have asked the same questions as him and while I saw some similarities here, but yours was sweeter, gentler.

Suggestions:

Think of that which may be seen in a sigh
the same might be heard as you watch a kite fly.
I do not think they would evoke the same feeling...perhaps wonder that we can hear a kite and see a sigh... This was the only part that made me pause and not for long...at all!

What I personally liked the Most:

Do you ever listen as thin clouds whisk by,
or visualize the music from a parade nearby?
This piece so deserves this award! the beauty in it's simple questioning of whether we open our minds enough to be able to hear what is normally seen and see what is normally heard is brilliant. I think I could hear color, or at least imagine what it would sound like. I can visualize and hear so much more when meditating. Something, this poem has reminded me I need to do more of.

Summary:

I love this! I want a copy of it in print. I need to get a printer. I would put this in my journal. One of your best!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3195386

Review of My Groovy Guestbook

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Rated: E

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Hi Kristi

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing. This review is being brought to you on behalf of Helping Hearts and The Paper Doll Gang

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

While I have signed your guest book, I have never reviewed or rated it. So here I am

The layout is nice and the image is soothing, but to me, what is important is the content. I am meaning the messages to you. This is a true testament to the kind of person you are. It is nice to see so many people saying wonderful things about you.

There is not much to review in reviewing a guest book., lol. The spelling and grammar are spot on. Ha!

I am so glad that I have had the chance to meet and become friends with you. You are a true gentle (yes gentle..*giggles*) spirit. It might be covered up from that loud voice and umm....naughty, potty mouth and humor (that I happen to lub, but inside...you care so much for others, that is what shines the most.

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3194741

Review of Aliens, Critters, and Dinosaurs

for entry "The Green Balloon"

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Happy WDC Birthday!

Hi Shaara!

I am so happy to wish you a WDC birthday! I am also pleased to have found your children's folder. I shall be back to visit.

I thought this poem was adorable! The poor discarded balloon becoming happy in play with the cat.

I appreciated the form you used and could see this being made into a picture book

The rhyme scheme was followed and again, the form used was perfectly fitting!

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#3194731

Review of LOVE & HEARTACHE

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Happy WDC Birthday!

LOL! The deadline for this contest was in August and i do not see an open round, but people love your contest so much they seem to be entering for this month. is there something I missed?

The layout and idea of this contest is well done. You do have an invalid link on the page.

I know how busy you have been and hope things slow down soon for you at a more comfortable pace.

You know how much I admire your strength and contribution to WDC! I think you are awesome

let me know if this contest is indeed open

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#3194153

Review of Goin' a Fishin'

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Rated: E

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Hi Kristi

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I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

This deserved a

rating for the following reasons.

1. for you first poem (you didn't state what age you were when you wrote it)it was very, very good!
2. It was written from a boy's point of view. You had to think out of the box.
3. It was funny. I totally misread this line at first so I went out there and showed 'em my stuff. haha!
4. It had a definite rhyme scheme and you followed it to the end.
5. this reeked of good ol' boy country charm and was endearing!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3194148

Review of Vindication

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Rated: E

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Hi kristlove! This review is brought to you from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"

Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

What a neat new form. I was thinking it was familiar but you put a definite twist on it and created a brand new poetry form. One that could be a little difficult with the syllabic count. I think I will challenge myself and try this! I have to write something for rising stars and this is a good place to start as my muse has left me. lol

I love the words you chose to use. It speaks of heartbreak and pain that eventually becomes a catalyst to a brand new way of looking at things.

I see a somewhat pattern of the number of lines per verse. Is this part of the new form? If so, you might want to add it.

The poem flowed and told me a story. I loved it!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3194120

Review of Bitter Tears

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Rated: E

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Hi Kristi

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I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

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First, Great job on the poetry form. The poem was beautifully written and followed the 'rules' of the constanza perfectly. The constanza seemed to be a difficult form to follow and do well. You did a fine job.

The images is beautiful and the words that follow are heartbreaking. Is this about what I think it is about??? It made me want to cry. You express your pain so well. I hope it helps to purge it like this in form of poetry and I hope that this touches many who may 'feel' your words.

This is one of my favorite of yours. I do not like what I think it is about, but I love how you expressed the horror of what you experienced.

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3194112

Review of Spooky Spirits

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Rated: E

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Hi Kristi

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Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

Hi Kristi

is this newly written? I found it to be a different experience than what I am used to in regards to your poetry. This was light and a little silly, fitting the Halloween season. I think you did good job but you know what poems of yours I like best...

I loved the rhyme scheme. It did not seem forced. I love the orange ribbon and think this piece was deserving of an adornment.

I like how you broke up the verse with the bat lines and the image of that pumpkin is frightening.

The ending verse made me giggle as I pictured all those 'scary people' fighting over the gizzards, i almost thought it was Thanskgiving at my house

Thank you for the read and Write on!

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#3194098

Review of UNTIL THE END

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Rated: E

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Hi SHERRI GIBSON

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

Dear Sherri,

Your port is filled with poems about your mother and you can feel your intense love for her in each and every one. This one as far as technicalities were concerned flowed well and the rhyme scheme was true. More importantly, the message was clear. Your love for this woman, who was both mother and best friend will never die. You will meet again and I believe she is watching over you and is so proud. I can relate to your pain in some way...and I know it hurts. I am here if you ever need to share memories, vent or anything else....

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3194093

Review of MERRY CHRISTMAS, MOM

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Rated: E

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Hi SHERRI GIBSON

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I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

I do not think there are words to describe or critique this poem. It is so heartfelt and I could feel both your pain in losing this wonderful woman and your gratitude in having her in your life. I feel so at loss of words of anything helpful to say to you. I know the holidays are right around the corner again and hope that you still feel her presence as she watches her little girl strive and succeed in life and in raising her own family. ((again huge mental hugz)))

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3194083

Review of I DON'T KNOW

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Rated: E

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Hi SHERRI GIBSON

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

I can relate to this poem. I love the words you used to weave this story about discovering a new, not easier but fulfilling path.
The rhyme scheme AABB was excellent and did not seem forced but a natural part of the poem. I found the flow a bit off as you needed to add a syllable or two to certain lines, but I read it with total understanding of your message contained within the poem.

The path to freedom didn’t come easily, and doubts filled my mind
as I strove to capture rainbow dreams that were better off left behind.
this I can relate to. I always seem to be running away from myself and from God. I am always thinking I can do it alone...I have issues with trust, even with God. the flow of this was wonderful.

I am thankful i had a chance to read it. It seemed to 'appear' right at the perfect time in my life. funny how those things work, huh?

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3194061

Review of Indian Princess Poca Bow-Wow

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Rated: 13+

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heehee, you posted the picture of Princess Poca too! I did not know what to do with the prompt at first. i just sat laughing at the taco Bell pup dressed in her NA wear.

I think you did an excellent job using the prompt. the story is very sweet! I kind of used the same theme as you in my own story. I also talked about how domesticated dogs (wolves) came to be.

Forgive me if my suggestions are wrong or you do not agree...

There in a grove of pine trees next to the salty water was born to Wind Song and Bear Hunter a girl child they named “Willow.”
I think this sentence would be better read with a couple carefully placed commas.

Willow grew quickly as the young of the people did and when she was six summers old Grxx, one of Bear Hunters’ bitch dogs, gave birth to a litter of six.
I am not sure of the connection between the dogs and willow's growth. The sentence is a little confusing with the mix of different 'events'. I would consider breaking it up.

There may be a few other areas you may want to recheck but I decided to enjoy the story

I love that Willow took the runt as her own and found worth in something others would consider worthless. I love the message!

It was a pleasure to read such a lovely story, Sticktalker!

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#3193727

Review of On Progress

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: E

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Hi Just an Ordinary Boo!

! This review is brought to you from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"

Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

I am here again

I am glad I love your work, as you are most of my reviewing groups boards. I jumped at the chance to find something new in your port to read. I must say I was a little confused by you handle and your tag image. I almost did not realize it was you I was reading until i saw your familiar port with my dinner laid out in front of me

This poem is enriched wonderful imagery! You made me think with your description of this poem. It is like do we miss the point by trying to 'get ahead' if we do not stop once and awhile and appreciate the moment. If we keep climbing- without ever looking down to see from where we have come from or enjoy the scenery from where we now stand, do we miss the point? You stopped and enjoyed the moment...

But what head or hind is there
on a world that's round?
All's a part of the same journey.
loved this ending. It make me contemplate my own journey. Thank you!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3192523

Review of What the mind can't hide

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: 13+

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I am reviewing you not only for the above group, but also to fill my five review owed to you for your win of my package in Robian's auction. Actually, I am reading your pieces because you speak words i need to hear. I have found that i have read much of your work. I read almost an entire story before this one and did not even realize that I have read an reviewed it before. You words, while telling your own story, mirror my own life in so many ways that rereading a piece can be like you are speaking directly to me. I forget what i read before and am seeing it through new eyes. I am not sure if you can understand that. I read depending on my mood. Sometimes, you pieces make me feel like you are talking about you and I am disconnected. I feel for you, feel your strength, but then other times it is as if you are speaking to me or about me.

I do not want to take about the technicalities of the story you wrote here. it doesn't matter to me at this time. I want to applaud you for your honesty. I wanted to make my review private, but then thought...why? If Michelle can be so honest and still loved, why can't I share a little of who I am without feeling like a total nutjob?

You are going to have to forgive me if all my 'I's' are not capitalized or there are typos as I am speaking from my heart and do not feel like I can do that backtracking to correct things that my editor doesn't 'redline.'

You are an amazing woman. You made better choices than I in your life but that did not save you from experiencing the same ailments as Me or any other 'lucky recipient of mental illness'. This is an ailment that do not take into consideration our life choices, our status, our upbringing. It is so fair that way.

reading your story, I just felt released. Released from the stigma of what depression is. I felt a definite connection to your words, to you. As you know, i am dealing with my daughter and her illness. I am not so lucky as to have a man who can support me financially in the manner that allows me not to work and prosper...unfortunately I must stay home at this time and care for my child. a child that he loves, but is not his. I have failed to admit that I have some severe mental issues of my own. depression being one of the biggest, along with post traumatic stress and PAD. Fun, eh? I do not have the money now, but have seen numerous counselors, none who could reach the depths of my buried secret and feelings. i have actually tried to admit myself into a mental facility only to be told I do not fit the criteria. You see, i am well versed and know what my problems are. I can almost tel the doctor what i should do to help myself, yet i cant do those things that would help me. I feel like I am climbing a mountain daily and I do not like the scenery. i want to just stop...I also have the flee disease. If i do not like something i run or tune out. I did better when I was a teen, hid myself well. i could do anything and my mind was rock solid, but my heart was cold.

I have no idea why i am sharing this with you...with anyone who chooses to read my rant. I guess you just reached out with your words and grabbed my heart. You showed me I was not alone. You showed my that I have been pretending for so long....making excuse after excuse for my behavior. my favorite one and I might add, my husbands is ' I am not feeling good'. he actually started writing it down on the calendar...

I hope that you do not fall- your doctor worries, but i do not. you are the most proactive person I know. if you fall, that would scare me. I am learning from you....do not feel pressure to be anything for me or others...just know that you have inspired me (probably not enough to take action yet..in a funk right now or should I say "I do not feel good?" ha....) but I am bolster by your words.

have you published? I would like to consider buying your books (when I am working again...lol)

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#3192462

Review of My Silly Cow Haiku

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: E

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Hi Maryann

!

Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing. This review is being brought to you on behalf of Helping Hearts and The Paper Doll Gang

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

For you first poem, this is a well written haiku. I found it very cute and funny. You say it was part of a campfire? Was everyone speaking in haiku? i would have loved that! I am not sure how you came to thinking about using a cow for the star role of a haiku, but it worked. The syllable count is perfect and again, for your first poem...it rocks!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3192461

Review of A Ghostly Poem

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: E

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Hi Maryann

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing. This review is being brought to you on behalf of Helping Hearts and The Paper Doll Gang

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

Overall Impression:

A cute poem about the, not so scary, result of living in a haunted house.

Suggestions:

Inside the house radiated darkness and dread.
It didn't feel right, that the last owner died in her bed.
I loved the first line, the second lost its flow for me. Also, reading further down into who was actually haunting the place, I wonder if reference to the owner dying in her bed matters. ??? I just noticed this part as not fitting or flowing as nicely as the rest of the poem.

What I personally liked the Most:

The poem was cute and a complete story in poetry form. The rhyme scheme was consistent and did not seem forced in most places, except for perhaps the line mentioned above. Spelling and grammar seemed fine. I am not the best with punctuation, but yours seemed fine.

We needed a house as our family grew.
The price that was asked seemed too good to be true.

The house sat in grandeur at the top of the hill.
Yet, an aura about it gave me a chill.
Great starting lines to your story poem. I enjoyed the read and this just started off the good times

Summary:

I enjoyed this. Good luck with the contest!!!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3192457

Review of Star Trek Message Forum

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: ASR

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Hi Maryann

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing. This review is being brought to you on behalf of Helping Hearts and The Paper Doll Gang

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

OMGosh! Who knew there were so many Trekkies on WDC. This is a message forum created by Maryann for you Star Trek fans. I am not one

but I know of some...lol.

This is an active forum which shows that is it well written, easy to understand, and user-friendly. I like how you have contests, tributes to fallen Trekkie actors and even a collaborate story. So much going on in here!

Spelling and grammar are perfect, layout is nice, and the images are a nice touch.

This is a definite recommend to anyone who is a Star Trek fan! You will feel right at home

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni

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#3192106

Review of Beautiful Day

Review by Just call me Omni

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Rated: E

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Hi Numb Hands

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Hello, my name is omniblueeyes

I am pleased to have the honor of reading a piece of your writing.

Please take this review for what it is; my personal opinion. I am not a professional editor, nor do I portray myself to be an expert in reviewing. My intent is to share my feelings concerning your work with you, nothing more. It is my sincere hope that you will find something useful in it and disregard the rest.

I am visiting your port and offering this humble review because you signed my guest book and hopefully filled your end of the deal and reviewed the person who signed below you

A beautiful poem about a beautiful day

You seem like you are sitting watching a scene unfold and writing about it. I love how you break down every element and moment and capture it.

The only thing that confused me was the last line:

Wouldn't it be nice if the world could be so happy?

Was not the world happy that day or do you mean the entire world and all people? You just went from describing a scene as you were actually watching it to suggesting it was not true. That line felt a little out of place with the rest of the poem.

Spelling and grammar were perfect and I enjoyed the poem a lot!!!

Thank you for the read and Write on!

Just call me Omni