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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Beholden *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
Great poem! It reminded of truck drivers for some reason. Maybe perhaps I spent too much time talking to them at cafes or diners and they use to tell stories like these about something generally vague.

We all had that experience where we remember something so vague that its only clarity is erroneous or some type of flaw. It's like seeing a purple bear. You don't remember the exact description of that bear, but you do remember it was purple.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
None, it's perfect! Just like the girl with her gap front teeth. Nice write!

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Review of Poem Hearts Cone  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Theodoris Wolvber *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
This is a haiku. I enjoy reading haiku poems as they sometimes can have so much meaning in just three short verses. In this case, I think more detail is needed because the first verse confused me a little bit. The second verse is a filler or passing the time moment. The last verse seems to indicate that this poem is about overcoming something difficult/challenging.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
The only real grammar error I see if, I can call it that, is the spacing of the poem. The second and third verse should be combined as one.

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Review of Thankful  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
Yeehaw!! Yes sir! That's right! This here is what we call instant classic gold. Going 5 times platinum!

Now, that I got my country reaction out of the way, here's what I really think. When I first read through this, it read like a country song. I almost broke out my guitar.

It reminded me of two country songs: Reba McEntire's Fancy and Metallic's Mama Said. You're probably thinking, 'Metallica? They're not a country band.' That song, off their Load album, sounds pretty country to me. Anyhow, amazing lyrics! Nice work!

HAPPY MISTAKES:
None, it's perfect! I can see how this won in a contest. Great job! Keep on writing!

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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello David Michel *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
My original thought was, "Wow! I get 3 haiku's for the price of one! Must be my lucky day!" I like the detail you used to describe the settings for each. Nice work!

HAPPY MISTAKES:
Grammar and punctuation, there's nada.

In terms of syllables, there are issues; particularly with, "Mather Point" and "Chaco." Mather Point has 8 syllables on the second verse. The third verse has 7. Chaco has 6 syllables on the first verse.

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Review of Payback  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Whiskerfacebythefireplace *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
I love the humor in this. It's great! I think the poem was suppose to be a haiku? If so, the first verse has 6 syllables; at least that's what I count. I could be wrong though, but I thought that would be something to note.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
The word, "jello" should be, "Jell-O." Other than that, great write! Keep on writing!

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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello katwoman45 *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
This poem goes way back in terms of when it was written. I remember that year, it was the year I first joined this website as well. I was young and naive at the time. I had many inspirations in my life. Inspiration and passion were my fuel back in those days. My muse were people in their 20s that were ready to conquer the world. It's funny how upsetting/devastating it seemed to have disappointed or to be scolded by your muse. They say things that make your feel inadequate but create that drive that makes you succeed through the same challenges that they go through.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
None that I can see. Great poem! Keep on writing!

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Review of Life with Physics  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello SeanFear *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
I love your thoughts! You speak with such passion that it's awe-inspiring. It's like I'm listening to a professor at work here with such organized and thoughtful analysis of the modern day misinterpretations of a physicist in Kuwait. I can't say I can relate, but I can say that it must be similar to something like majoring in Biology or being a male-nurse. It's like no one takes you seriously no matter how intelligent or crafted you've become.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
None that really stood out. Great job!

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Review of Overthinker  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Smartie *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
Yes sir! You just summarized the embodied of chemistry in a marriage. At least that's what I took it as. Great poem!

HAPPY MISTAKES:
No mistakes, but I did find the poem spacing to be a bit too much for my taste. Overall, nice write! Keep on writing! *Smile*

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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello đź’™ Carly *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
This poem was given to me randomly using the randomize button. Is there a thing as a randomize button on this website? lol. Anyhow, my first impressions of this poem was terror and fear. You included a picture before the poem and that was pure genius. This picture just reassures the terror and fear that one would feel after reading through the poem. It's like something Freddy Krueger or Pennywise would use as a tactic to reassure fear remains present in their victims as they are terrorized. Great job!

HAPPY MISTAKES:
No mistakes I could see. A+ all the way! The only suggestions I would make is to add, "this" before the word, "woe." That verse weakens the flow and rhythm of the poem and if you added one more word to it, it would balance this out. Just a thought

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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
Excellent poem! My guess is that when this was used in a contest, it placed top 3? Regardless, I found this poem mesmerizing. Using the weather as a symbol of perseverance and hope is truly invigorating. This is reassured with the last verse: the sun comes shining through.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
None that I saw. Great job! Keep the writing inspirations going!

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Review of Parents!  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
It's Great! Perhaps too realistic for my taste *GoLucky*. I can relate. My parents have all this wisdom and knowledge that just baffles me, but when it comes to technology and devices, they're cavemen. Great write!

HAPPY MISTAKES:
Didn't see or noticed any grammar errors. Nice job! The only suggestions I would make is to shrink (tiny) to make that verse more dynamic or immersive.

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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello đź’™ Carly *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
Absolutely superb! I love the colorful words you used in this poem such as, "weary," "tremble," or even "serene." Nice job!

HAPPY MISTAKES:
My only suggestions is to add a dash to "in between" and make it one word. On the 9th verse, consider adding the word, "a" before, "tree" for a better flow.

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Review of In all the world  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Joe House *Smile*
THOUGHTS:
I like it! This is one of those poems that can be used in a conversation with your love/crush. I know during my schooling days, I use to write down would-be conversations to say to my crush. I literally took 2 hours on some evenings just to craft the perfect message.

HAPPY MISTAKES:
There are a few verses that could use some revisions like the first verse: In the world. It sounds a bit vague, maybe something like, "In this world" would be better because it makes it more personal. Just a thought.

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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.5)
NOTES/ERRORS:
A few minor errors I can see like the use of "But" at the beginning of a few sentences and some missing commas along with the word, "be" in your title that needs to be capitalized. Other than those, it's good!

SUMMARY/THOUGHTS:
I didn't noticed those errors until the second read through. I was intrigued by the story. I found it humorous at the end as well with the last sentence. I always find it interesting how elderly people love to tell stories and they seem so intriguing. It's like they have a Ph'D in oral storytelling. Great work!

*Delight* KEEP ON WRITING! *Cool*
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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't normally review sigs or images, but this one really stood out to me. It's like the pearly gates opened and the angels were calling to me to click-and-review. The colors are so beautiful. Everything blends well. I'm almost at awe as to what has transpired here, a masterpiece. Great job!
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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! The roads/highways are beautiful. I like it! Thank you for spreading awareness of the happenings and events in your community/country. I remember reading articles awhile back, about current events happening in India. The culture and traditions of India have similarities to Native-American traditions as with some of the struggles and problems that plague the nation.
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Review by Leeboi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello BariRandom

My Thought(s):
I really enjoyed reading this story. I felt the hate, despise, and frustration of the narrator/character.

The only thing I disliked is the sentence, "It’s both the best and worst thing about this generation—They shut up when they get annoying, but are never able to stick it out when you need them under duress." This sentence is a negative projection of the youth in the modern society; at least, that's what I interpreted it as, but I understand this is also a part of character development. For some reason however, I took this as author bias. Perhaps my college professors taught me to be too sensitive in reading literature and short stories. That in its own right is bias.

My Favorite Part(s):
I love the word play you used throughout the story. Words like, "hisses" and "graduate" or even the sentence, "like a bird on cocaine" are absolute genius on display. This type of word play really humanized/demonized the robot Kristina and that's not something easily achieved, humanizing a robot. Great job!

My Suggestion(s):
1st Paragraph, 2nd Sentence: If I had had my coffee, maybe I would feel differently remove one of the "had."

Is there steam coming out of her ears? Awesome. Consider adding an exclamation mark behind the word, "Awesome."

Here is a beautiful sig created by...uh...Emilee? Yeah, we'll go with that, Emilee.

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Review of Chuck Norris  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (2.5)
*StarY*Created by the lovely Leger. I thank-you once again. LEEEGGGER!!!*StarY*

Why I chose your piece?
The title of your poem made it impossible not to click. Great title! Hail to the king as they say.

What I think of it?
I think it is okay, but needs work. I'm not sure if this is one of those poems where it was written intentionally in a Looney Tunes type of fashion. It is awkward to say the least, but it does make you grin.

Any errors or mistakes?
Verse 4: Remove the 's' in "roundhouses."
Verse 5: "Its" should be, "It's."
Stanza 2: You mentioned Burger King and Chuck being served Big Macs there. Consider revising this to Whoppers.
Verse 10: "But with Chuck the best new is" this line doesn't make sense; consider revising.
Verse 11: "Corana Virus" should be one word, "coronavirus."


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Review of Porcelain Hands  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Capturing the moment...that's what I drew from this poem. It feels like one of those 'prom' moments where the character or characters are on cloud-9 and there's nothing in the world that could destroy that special moment.

I like the first stanza. I think it is a very good strong starting point. It engages the reader and creates a hook to keep reading forward.

My only suggestions would be to fix the stanzas that comes after; particularly the rhyming scheme of the poem. Every two verses, there seems to be a rhyme. The rhyme scheme breaks with the verse, "I reach in slowly," "gently." It went from every two verses to a single verse.

Overall, I believe if this was written from pure passion then there is nothing wrong. It is an excellent piece of prose as is. At the end of the day, that's the only thing that really matters: Your thoughts and whether the piece adequately captures your moments on paper. Everything else is just prologue, as a wise man once said.
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Review of The Jungle  
Review by Leeboi
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The verse, "They fly in the air and I look and a snake bites my hand"

The, "my hand" part should be moved to the next verse. I only say because it ruins the rhyme and flow of the poem; it's out of place.

Consider adding it in the next verse: I lay on the floor hand poisoned or I lay on the floor with my hand slowly being filled with poison.

Other than that, great poem! Keep up the amazing work!
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Review of The nectar  
Review by Leeboi
Rated: E | (4.0)
RECOMMENDATIONS:
The first verse, "It is early, and the sun is starting to peek out." Change "peek out" to, "rise." It would make it less wordy.

The parts, "Tick, tick, tock" and, "Drip, drip, drip" should be on separate lines to create some immersion like a comic book effect (POW! BING! BANG!)

Consider capitalizing, "nectar" at the end of your poem. Nectar is a character in your poem much like how you would use, "mom" as a character except you would capitalize it to give it more characterization aka poetry technique.
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Review of Winter and Spring  
Review by Leeboi
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Errors/Typos:
First paragraph: Reminds me that what I do doesn’t matter. That my power is limited, if it exists at all.

This portion is a sentence fragment and has singular/plural issues particularly with the word, "power." I would revise it to: It reminds me that what I do doesn't matter; that my powers are limited, if any exists at all.

In terms of the rest of the story, I would say it's not a bad draft. I like the emotions the narrator of the story displays throughout. The only thing I would suggest is to add more development/background as to why the character/narrator has negative experiences with "him [Spring]." It seems abrupt that some violence or negative altercation has occurred at the end of the story without prior development. In other words, it went from the character expressing feelings of resentment of "him" to some violence/actions occurring without anything in-between.
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Review of Pillows  
Review by Leeboi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hmmm... ... *Squirrel*

I had to read this a few times to comprehend. So pillows are humans/family members/people? The part that confused me are the verses/lines, "People call it house," and "Is the pillows aren't friendly here." I guess the question I have is: What are pillows?

Either way, it's genius! I love the metaphor. If "pillows" is meant to be vague and only identify one's general sense of comfort then this poem hits all the right tunes/notes. I'm intrigued! Great job! *Smile*

PS: On the 6th verse/line, the word "i" should be capitalized... ...unless that is a technique you're using to convey how small you feel when your pillows are away from you then it's perfect.
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Review by Leeboi
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It's crafted beautifully! *Hug*

Your poem conveys realism in emotions. The despair and hopelessness that one has to endure because of depression and unfair circumstances is something many people don't truly understand.

I love the poem! I felt the pain and was reminded in humbleness that life is not equal for all and that some must strain off into a path of despair.
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Review by Leeboi
Rated: E | (5.0)
LOVE IT!!! Poor ol' Jack. I enjoyed the rhymes and the clever ending verse. I didn't expect that. The poem is well written. The only thing I would recommend is to add one more word to the last verse to create a better flow. It's no biggie, but adding something like, "greatly" before "lacked" would create a better flow and establish more sympathy for the character Jack.
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