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Review of The Ring  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is great *Smile*
I really like the twist of this story.

Losing a ring in the ocean was akin to tossing it in a volcano or flinging it over Niagara Falls.- I liked this line

One cut revealed something strange - a metal object.- I think the ring could be describe more creatively than 'a metal object' here.

This is a nice story. I really liked it. Short but sweet. *Smile*

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Review of Reviews  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well said.
I agree with you all the way.
Especially that the review should be positive and not to tear the person down.
I think it takes a lot to put your work out there for all to see and to have someone rip it apart doesn't help anything.

The reviewed author should come away from his review feeling that he has gained insight to his writing and has become a better writer- great line *Smile*

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Review of Glen  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is very good.
I'm sure it was emotional for you to write but I thank you for sharing such an uplifting piece with us.

You are really talented with your adjectives.

You have done a wonderful job writing this. I did not see any errors reading this and it kept my interest all the way through. For me a good story does that. *Smile*

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Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I thought you did a very good job writing this.
It was very heartfelt *Smile*

The flow was a little off, but the content of the poem made up for it.

Bring him home safe and sound- I think this line sounds better without 'and sound' on the end.

Good Job! *Smile*

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Review of Ashamed  
Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I like this poem. The content is great.

I realize ashamed is the name of the poem but it seems that the word is repetitve. Maybe you could use:humiliated or embarrassed.

It's hard to critique a poem that seem personal because I'm sure you are putting your feeling and emotions into it. Again you express yourself very well.

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Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is very good.
The title is very good for this poem.

The only thing about it is the word 'free' is used frequently. Maybe you could use liberated, unbound, or something of the sort.

I think this is sad poem. I think you have written it well. As a matter of fact I can almost see a ribbon on this item *Smile*

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Review of Demon in Me  
Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I think you did a great job writing this.
I don't know if this is true, but I commend you for your expression. I like how you tell just how you feel.

I think this is very good. The flow of the poem is very nice.

I think someone going through the same thing reading this might find it helpful.

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Review of Promise  
Review by Shadow
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is very good.
The flow of the poem is very nice.

I really like the style you wrote this in.
you have nice inagery here.

that is my bind- this seems a little forced to me.

Hidden tears, muted screams- great line *Smile*

I think the title fits this poem very well and you have written this well.

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Review of The New Me  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is interesting.

I'm so tired of smelling
your depression- I thought this was a very interesting and creative line. I never thought of depression as a smell *Smile*

You are very expressive in your writing and I think it adds a nice touch to your work.

Good Job *Smile*

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Review of I Am Who I Am  
Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is good.
You express your feeling very well in this one too.

I like how the first and last stanza are the same. I also think those are the best ones in the poem.

I think the rhythm is inconsistant but I really like the content. The rhymes are good. When I say the rhythm I mean the flow of the poem *Smile*

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Review of Taking New Flight  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very good.
You have done a wonderful job writing this.
The flow is great, the rhythm and rhyme is good.
Your word choice is great.

spreading my wings and taking new flight- I love this line and it ends the poem well *Smile*

Great Job!!! *Smile*

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Review of Understand  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (4.0)
I thought this was very interesting.
Again you express your feelings well.

This sounds like a love for someone you met on the internet and your mom is trying to warn you to be careful. I have to agree, you have to be careful if it is someone whom you have never met before.

Anyway, I think you did a good job writing this. You have great imagery.

Keep up the good work *Smile*

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Review of Blanket of Love  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is great.
I think you have done a wonderful job writing this.
You express your feelings well.

I like this line-I need to feel
that blanket of love- It gives the image of love being warm and fuzzy *Smile*


I one day I wish- This doesn't sound right

Great Job!!

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Review of Dirty  
Review by Shadow
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is good.
You have some good descriptions here.
You seem to have a knack for song writing. *Smile*
I think this one flows very well and the chorus is good.

My skin glistens under your touch- I like this sentence.

Great job!

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Review of Angel Eyes  
Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
This is good.
I think you did a good job with your word choice.
I was wondering if you write the music for these too or just the words.

I don't have another suggestion for one but I think another title would be better, because I know there is another song with this title and I think there might be two.

Good Job.

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Review of Your Creation  
Review by Shadow
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Oh my. I have to say I really did not like the content of that song. But I think you did a good job writing it.
I like how you have the echos.
Is this suppose to be like heavy metal or alternative?

You did a good job writing this even if I disagree with the song *Smile*

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Review by Shadow
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a great story. Great imagery througout. I think you have done a wonderful job writing this.

Mackenzie didn't know what to think of the immacurate home. It was three floors, a bathroom on each floor, six large bedrooms, a kitchen, living room, parlor, lobby, dining room, library, office, attic and basement.- this seems to be in the wrong place. She couldn't have noticed all of this just on her way upstairs to her room. Maybe you could describe the house a little bit as she is walking to the door.

without cringing about thinking about when the last time the tub.-{c:rose the last time the tub what? *Smile*

before she ran off to that birthday part for her friend Morgan.- birthday party

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Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I think this is great!
I really like the story and I love how you began and ended it.

This is a sad thing that happens all the time and if this is true, I hope the other person realises it and you two and do something about it *Smile*

I like this line-
I drained my heart

Keep up the good work *Smile*

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Review of Broken Bottle  
Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This was very good. I like how you described the bottle falling. Very good imagery.
The content is great, I love the ending.

Her mother lying next to her- this line confused me.

I think you did a good job of writing this. *Smile*

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Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (3.5)
I think this is good. Interesting. I liked the ending.
The picture is nice too *Smile*

He was a frightful being
all green and hairy
With eyes that flashed lightning
And his breathing just as scary- this stanza doesn't flow the same as the others and being and lightning doesn't really rhyme.

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To tell my tales as a youngster- to me this line sounds funny saying tell my tales. maybe it could be
To express my tales as a youngster or something like that.
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Review of Rainy Night  
Review by Shadow
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I think this is very good. You say very little but it comes out as so much.

I like how you started and ended with the same stanza.

The imagery is great. I think you did a great job writing this. I like the red its a nice touch for the poem.

Great Job!

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Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very sweet poem. I think you did a good job writing it.

I think your word choice is good in this poem.

I like you repeat 'Please do not cry' throughout the poem. I think it adds emphasis to the story.

great job!

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Review of Bad Kisser  
Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is good.
I thought the flow was nice and the story was good.

Two strangers sitting in the dim-lit light.- in this sentence it seems like lit and light or repetitive.

Maybe
Two strangers sitting in the {murky,shadowy} light.

I think the title in this one does not suit the poem very well.

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Review by Shadow
Rated: E | (5.0)
I thought this was very interesting and fascinating.
I think this is a clever story.
You did a good job writing it.
I think the title is great for this story and the 1st line does its job of reeling the reader in.
The content of this story is very good. I enjoyed reading it. I thought it ended well too.

Great Job *Smile*

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Review by Shadow
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
You describe the pain well and I think you did a good job of writing this. But it leaves me questioning what is causing this pain.

I like the how you described the encounter with the child in the middle of the night with the spider on the wall.

in the middle of the story it gets confusing. I'm not sure if you are describing a dream or if its suppose to be a metaphor or what.

Most of what you have written is very good but this story leaves me questioning.

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