I thought you captured the sense of this poem really well, the mistake made by the child and having them wished it rectified, but without luck. Nicely done.
That was a nice poem to read. Well themed about this site and the early days of navigating. I think that generally everyone here would be able to remember. Nicely done.
Good effort at describing this situation in a poem. I only noticed one problem with grammar. In the line - He life is troubled. Should that be her life?
This was an interesting poem to read. I found it to be well and accurate to the theme touching on most, if not all aspects of love. Nicely done, good work.
I thought this was an entertaining version of the theme and I enjoyed reading it. good work.
I have only one suggestion. In the segment below, I think it would work to word it this way. As dawn approached, the house...........
As dawn approach the house was a pile of charred wood. Ivy’s father turned toward the couple and smiled. He was told what happened and accepted the fact that Ivy couldn’t stay with him.
He walked over to Ivy and hugged her, tight. “I just want you to be happy.”
I know the feeling, it's nice to look back on the first poem written and such. I enjoyed reading this one. Having the verse sum up the first line in each was a really good idea. Nicely done.
Very nice. I thought you summed this up really well, putting in a variety of aspects to match the acrostic style of this poem. Even though it was varied, it still fitted together really well.
This was a good poem to read. A nice trip down memory lane, lol. I thought you captured that setting really well. The ending was good, suitably abrupt to match the day described.
I thought this was interesting to read. The two verses seemed to highlight opposing sides of the coin, so to say. The first being negative, and the second, positive. Good work.
Nice work here. I especially liked the last line, it summed it all up nicely and anchored the theme of imagination very well. Adding the link for the contest afterwards was a good plan too.
This was a nice acrostic poem. I also enjoyed reading the story behind it's creation. That added more interest to it and gave the backstory really well. Good work.
Great poem. It caught my interest as a style double that I hadn't seen before, the prime part that is. Very nice layout and shape to the verse. Nicely done.
This is good. I liked the way you tied in the poem with the title and the sketch after the words. Each furthering the message of the other and coming together like a jigsaw.
That was interesting to read. The title caught my eye and I found the poem matched it well. It described the highs really well, focusing on them which gave it a happy feel to it. Good work.
Nice poem. I thought it was very entertaining to read, and I'm totally able to relate to it. Thankfully I'm the only internet buff here, so I don't worry about the phone too much.
Very nice. I liked the layout and how you carried the Christmas theme into the colours of the first letter in each line.
This poem really made me smile. The boy trying so hard to sneak down, then what he sees, no thought to previous plans and immediately heralds his location. Amusing.
Nice work at an acrostic. I have to admit the title word caught my eye. Interesting term. I also thought you did well at wording the theme of reviewing on a personal level. Well done.
This was interesting to read and an effective message. To me it spoke of the speaker needing another person, perhaps more than they needed them. As in a bit of a crush. Good work.
Oh yes, the school sports days. I remember them so well, participating that is. Well done at conveying this as the view as a spectator. It ended in a great way for the team though.
Good theme, a problem that can strike anyone trying to write, for various lengths of time. I thought the layout was interesting. Variety of line lengths certainly made it eye catching. Good wording, you captured the sense of how some blocks can be. Knowing what you want to say in your head, but it's resisting the transfer to paper. Nicely done.
That was an interesting idea, a poem to express your views about reading certain verses by other authors. I thought it worked really well and you captured the sense of wanting to live up to their standard as an ideal. Nicely done.
I thought this story was nice to read. It captured the stage of first holiday alone very well. In this instance, Christmas. The ending where the pieces came together with the wording blocks and Garfield was good too, it added a bit of hounmor into a seriosu topic. Good work.
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