This item was amusing to read. I enjoyed seeing what the solution was in the end. Well done at putting humour into it. I found it funny the contents of the teacher's desk drawers.
That was a sad story/memory. I thought you recalled it really well. What I found most distinctive was the yearly visits didn't give much chance to see the transition. Instead the change was very notable from one visit to the next. Nice work.
Reviewing folders is new to me. But I liked the way you laid this out. The decription above is really well done and it certainly sets the tone really well.
That was a good entertaining story to read. The quest went off well, enough problems arising in it for the girl to overcome that made it a challenge. I liked the ending how the court dispersed as if it had never been there. Good work.
I thought this was really interesting to read. You summed up the genre picks very well. Fantasy travel. Certainly was quite a trip. Neat choice of names also. Nicely done.
This article story was really good to read. Cats can be so amusing and you've got some really good memories here. It certainly made me smile. Kittens can be even more amusing and this item reflects that quite well. They certainly have disctinctive personalities. Nicely done.
That was an interesting poem. To me, the speaker was the person who died and was reflecting on how people came out of the woodwork for the funeral/wake as well as commenting on the sudden wake up call to get things in order, priorities. Nicely done.
That was a good short story. I liked how you worded the ending, having it as both an ending and a beginning. Just one thing I noticed in the first paragraph.
Close at her heals was her ever present companion, Fred the cat.
It might be different where you're from, but here, it's spelt heels.
That was a good poem to read, very clear imagery. I thought it had definate conservation value for a side theme. Nicely done at projecting the message. Good work.
This was nice. It seemed almost what could be written in a letter to a mother to thank her and to share the burden. Good work. I hope it goes well incorporating it into your novel. Good luck.
That was an interesting story. The twist was a good one, even though the clues were given, the other man just didn't pick up on them with being suspicious only for himself. Nicely done.
Even though I have not heard the Cd mentioned, i thought this poem was really great. It accurately portrays a girl who has to move on and leave the childhood behind her. In this case an old trusty piano that got her wherre she is today. Nicely done.
I thought this was good. As with your description, I can clearly see the situation. Especially with the second verse. But in general, well done. It was easy to read and nicely laid out.
I thought this was quite amusing to read. The one sided aspect to the dialogue wasn't a problem as the reader got enough ideas as to his replies from what she said. What I found most amusing was the ending where she is lining up to do it all over again. Good work.
Good story. I thought it was interesting how you put in facts over the timing in history within the story. Great idea. Nicely done.
Spelling, punctuation and grammar challenges:
Bear in mind I might say things a bit differently with spelling, but trying not to be too localized.
“Teodore we will run out of food if the Russian army don’t stop taking our live stock livestock. Everyone is afraid and hiding in their homes, especially with younger men at war.” Teodore said nothing back to his wife, and headed outside to his backyard where a group of soldiers were talking. He approached the Red Russian officer who was in charge.
NOTE:
The typos I found, I replaced corrected in red text. The punctuation and grammar challenges I found, I replaced with green text. All other comments, questions, thoughts and/or plot challenges, I listed in blue.
To me this was a nice poem written about a city built on the beach and in the between area on the sand before the towering buildings and not having yet entered the streets. Nicely done.
That was an interesting take on a real life meeting after chatting online. Nicely done.
Thee is just one thign I would suggest. When you're talking about people's names, perhaps starting with a capital letter. Claire, as opposed to claire.
That was fun to read. Kids can be so amusing, that's for sure. But it was nice it ended up without too much drama. Liked the prank with the shoes. Interesting idea that one.
That was amusing to read, good for a smile. I liked how you had selected part of a saying to title it with, nicely accurate. Rachel's solution at the end was really fun. She'd have had a bit of amusement setting it up I bet. It ties in nicely with how the reader can imagine the couple going on with their relationship after fixing that complex. Good work.
This was a great idea for a folder. The way you'd laid it out with the names and descriptions of all the birds under a photo of a number of parrots was great. Introducing them all before moving on to images and other items was helpful. You have quite a collection, very nice.
Neat story, it brought back memories for me at rescuing an abandoned week old parrot chick from my aviary. It was from a young pair, first time parents. After a mad dash to find something to feed her, settled on babyfood and eyedropper. Did real well on it.
Anyway, your parrot sounds really cute. Very nice colouring from the sound of it.
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