Interesting poem. Taking the lure of the wide open spaces for some and turning into a negative context. At least on the part of the speaker.
Just another way to write the ending of a relationship, with at least one side not able to admit to themselves and only calling it a break to see how things go. Nice work.
That was good. The characters were well plotted and I can picture the scene. He's so determined not to be caught long term he is able to recognise the danger signs and break free before he can't do it. It could make the reader inagine what would happen if he did fall hard, or consider what kind of relationship suited him. Nice work.
That was an interesting story. I liked how it came together at the end, with points of observation throughout that held back from being a definate clue. That is until re-reading and things were much clearer. It's also good in giving the flow at the end, showing one battle over, but the war is still on. Very nice.
This was a really good response to a problem that can become annoying. It made me smile. On occasion I've been tempted to write back in a similar way instead of hitting the delete button. I can imagine that they replied in super quick time or more likely - probably not.
Oh yes, that was really great. I can just imagine it even though I've never experienced an older brother. Sounds like he holds all the cards, at least how he sees it. Could be very interesting to read more on what happened. Whether his plan was enough, or if she was right and it was a stupid idea that would go nowhere. Great work.
Interestign story. Before I get to the things I noticed, minor typo's. I thought it was good. interesting subject and characters. I did wonder about the master. Perhaps some reference could be made to him. Was he someone who had trained her? Or wanted to train her and she resisted?
"Stop or I will shot."
I think this should be - Stop or I'll shoot.'
Brenda set the paper down and sighed. She hoped they would found out that he was the serial killer.....
She hoped they would find out - or - She hoped the would have found out........
That was a good story highlighting the reactions of the cancer victim and her family and how they cope and deal with things from diagnosis to remission and recurrance. I had wondered if they would try for the bone marrow transplant, but instead it seemed to move to her bone. That was an interesting twist. About to go read the second story.
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