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What I liked : The poetry seems dark and emotional like the author is searching for peace within herself. You did a great job with the descriptions and flow of the poetry. It made me reflect.
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : You are very talented and it shows in your ability to keep me interested through each line. The poetry has meaning and sadness. Thanks for sharing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your rendition of a conversation with new technology left me laughing. How true this story could be!!
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your held my interest as I envisioned the salesman screaming at the machine. You did a great job. Thanks for sharing this story and congratulations on the new ribbon!
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
"So in the morning of my first day in the field I got handed a list"
Seems like a wordy sentence; I suggest trying:
"On the morning of my first day in the field, I was handed a list"
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your short story grabbed my attention in the first paragraph and held me, spellbound, until the end. Your talent is evident in being able to tell a story form the tin soldier point of view. Great job!
PLOT THOUGHTS: There was love and emotion and a little humor wrapped in each descriptive word. Thanks so much for sharing such a delightful story!
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What an awesome expression of love you have written in this story. I, too, had a special love for my grandmother and her favorite flower was a yellow rose. I don't have one like your birthday rose but I do have pictures of her in her rose garden with thousands of blooming bushes.
PLOT THOUGHTS: I believe that things happen that cannot be explained. This is one of those times. I believe that rose bush blooms just for you and I think she smiles down on you. It's almost like having an extra guardian angel.
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"age of 93 five years ago in May"; may need a comma after '93'
FAVORITE PART: "My Granny's loving gift to me. " Pictures of that are worth more than money could ever buy!
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Hi dlee
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FIRST IMPRESSION: There was suspense as the letter was written to the next victim friend. The drama unfolded nicely and held my attention. I honestly wasn't sure, though subtle clues were written in your story, what he did to her. Did he break up with her or end it forever?
PLOT THOUGHTS: My only wish is that I could have seen the picture that prompted this story!
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART:
Date: 08/27/2007
Time: 04:35:27 a.m.
To: Angela86@doitnow.com
From: CharleyM268@gbcc.com
Subject: I did it. . . .
This gave a big clue and told of an online romance!
SUGGESTIONS: Your talent shows in your writing and I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing.
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As I read your rendition of your mother's first trip, I can relate so well to her. The noise and the lights have a way of grabbing your attention much like your story does to your readers. Your humor tells a marvelous tale and I could visually picture your mother chasing you out of the casino with old women spending their retirement checks screaming at you. Your awesome use of descriptives lends a sense of excitement to your story. Don't ever take her to Vegas!
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First Impression: Your awesome talent explodes in this flash fiction. It's obvious why you sport a red ribbon!
Spelling and Grammar: No spelling or grammar errors and no suggestions for improvement.
Additional Comments: It is difficult to write flash fiction and give such vivid description. This is heartwrenching and full of a vast array of emotion. Thanks for sharing your imagination!
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First Impression: There is a sadness embedded in this poetry of love and longing. The emotion shows in each word. Yes, if we could only make time stand still; if only in our dreams.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Flow: Your poetry was deep but easy to follow. The rhythm was great and I enjoyed it very much!
Additional Comments: Thanks for sharing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your writing and descriptions of your emotions show great talent. I often find that writing my feelings down help with the pain. It also helps me become a better writer.
PLOT THOUGHTS: I could feel the sadness in your story. The one thing I did learn is that your heart is still alive and that block of ice can be melted.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: Your ability to pull your reader into the story. You kept my interest from the first paragraph.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: If we could all look at our lives this way, the world would be a better place. Your talent shows in the way you have made me stop and think about the things we take for granted each day!
PLOT THOUGHTS: Thanks for the reminder that today is the best day of my life. The poem flowed well and was an easy read with a good tempo.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors.
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What I liked : I love your awesome ability to whisk me away with that wind of change. This poetry includes the emotions that are sure to follow change of any kind.
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : Your talent shows in your colorful description as you tell a story of change as relating to the wind and the season. You did a great job. Thanks for sharing!
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What I liked : Your memories of such an awesome occasion are written with a true mother's love. This story will serve as a reminder for years to come of the emotions felt during this loving evening.
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : Your immense talent shows in your portrayal of this engagement. You show a sense of humor while telling an emotional story. Thanks for sharing a part of your life with us.
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What I liked : You have been such an inspiration to me since the first day I joined WDC. You were never too busy to say a kind word or help me find my way. As I read this story, I am inspired to help others as you do. You always find the good, the hope, the passion in all that you do.
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : Not only are you an inspiration but your talent oozes out of everything you write. Thanks for all you do!
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"Congratulations on being spotlighted on the Center Stage"
What I liked : Oh my heavens, this is the funniest thing I have read in so long! Your addictive family plot is hilarious. This really shows talent and imagination. Great job!!
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : Your vivid imagination shines in this story. Keep up the comedy, you are very good at it!
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Your vivid imagination tells a story of someone who is afraid of flying. It's a dark plot but with interesting details and characterization. She thinks she's the only one alive but then the questions of whether she really is arise. Your talent shows in keeping my interest with poetic verses but a storylike plot. Great job!
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What I liked : Your willingness to share pieces of yourself shows that you are secure in who you are. You're a unique individual and it shows in your writing style.
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling /grammar errors noted
Overall impressions : Thank you for sharing this part of you with your readers.
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What I liked : I learned more from this than anything I've read about "points of view". I could actually relate my writing to the grilled cheese sandwich. Thanks for putting it in terms we could understand with a little comedy for good measure!
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : Your talent is obvious in the things you write to encourage others. Thanks for all you do!
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This is a wonderful tribute to WDC. Your thankfulness shows in your writing. It is an awesome place and I'm proud to be a member of such a wonderful community. I want to publicly thank you for all you do to make this place special. Sometimes, you seem to go unnoticed and taken for granted. We do notice and want to thank you for your encouragement as we learn and grow. Thank you for all you do!
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This is a wonderful tribute to WDC and I applaud you for taking the time to honor them. I am participating in the Mod Blitz so that I can take the opportunity to thank you for all you do. Your writing is a constant encouragement to each of us. I, too, have found more than I bargained for when joining WDC. This tribute lists a few of the many wonderful things that this great place can do. You are a great asset to the WDC community and I'm proud to be a part of that. Thank you for all you do.
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I love acrostics! You were able to portray to your readers the feelings that are brought forth by a "keyboard". The poetry flows nicely and uses uncommon words to paint the pictures of your subject. You did a great job!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your use of the prompt showed great talent. The story captured my attention and brought a few giggles as I read about the two characters and their surprise.
PLOT THOUGHTS: This was a fun story and followed the prompt well. I enjoyed seeing the use of the different genres but still having a story plot. Great job, Kiya, as always!
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling or grammar errors noted.
FAVORITE PART: My favorite part was where they realized they both had writing accounts.
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This item shows your continued efforts to bring something to everyone on WDC. As I read each of your guidelines, I learned something new. My favorite was the "Do you speak English?", though I picked up something in each entry. I never knew there were so many differences in the language. I have seen words that I thought were misspelled then later realized that the Brit spelling was different. Thank you for all you do to keep us informed and on a constant learning endeavor.
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FIRST IMPRESSION: As a mother who raised a son alone, this story touched my heart in many ways. Your talent shows, as always, in your descriptions of your characters and setting.
PLOT THOUGHTS: You did an awesome job in making your reader feel the emotion, hurt and pain in this mother's world. The happiness of her son's actions were a great ending!
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
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: Your poem flows nicely and sheds some light on the subject of depression. I was seldom distracted or left wondering what you meant or what rhythm I was supposed to feel. You’ve paid good attention to the composition of words.
: Depression is a sad subject and your poetry depicts the many feelings and emotions involved. You did a great job with this and I thank your for sharing it!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Emotions make a great start of poetry with immense feeling. Your poetry is full of that emotion and was very enjoyable to read
PLOT THOUGHTS: Poetry based on love and things of the heart always bring great happiness or sadness. 
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling or grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: "Keep your heart locked away,"
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First Impression: Your awesome talent explodes in this flash fiction. It's obvious why you sport a red ribbon!
Spelling and Grammar: No spelling or grammar errors and no suggestions for improvement.
Additional Comments: It is difficult to write flash fiction and give such vivid description. This is heartwrenching and full of a vast array of emotion. Thanks for sharing your imagination!
Flow: Your poetry was deep but easy to follow. The rhythm was great and I enjoyed it very much!
