What I liked: The sadness concerning the war shows in your words. You did a great job with the emotion.
Grammar/Spelling: One little suggestion; "Where’s everybody’s faith gone then?". Too many apostrophes... try" Where has everyone's faith gone then?
Overall impressions: You are very talented and should continue to write and practice. Thanks for sharing.
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What I liked: You have a great start to a rant. There a many broken sentences that need punctuation or that aren't sentences at all. You might try a word processing program that will help with that.
Overall impressions: You are very talented and I see a lot of potential in your words and your story. Please let me know if you get these things corrected. I'd love to read it when you're done.
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What I liked: This is really beautiful. I am not normally a reviewer of poetry but I couldn't resist. The flow is easy to read; I enjoyed it tremendously.
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors.
Overall impressions: You are very talented and I hope you will find time for yourself to write. Writing is good therapy for the soul!
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What I liked: This was a very informative article. I had often wondered about "writing software". Now that I know to draw on life experiences, I'm ready.
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: It was obvious that you did your homework before writing this article. Great job and thanks for sharing your knowledge.
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What I liked: Your words show the sadness that takes place each day as our heroes grow older. How sad for life to end this way. Your writing can almost make me feel like I'm walking down one of those halls at the nursing home.....
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: I hope that I can someday transfer thoughts to fingers the way you do; to engulf the readers with words that bring passion and emotion. Thanks for sharing.
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What I liked: This was a great reminder to all of us what the constitution is about and what it should mean to us!
Overall impressions: You did a great job portraying the feelings of the men who wrote the constitution. I gained a lot of knowledge from reading this piece. Thanks for sharing!
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What I liked: This poem is full of emotion and pain and it shows in your writing. How sad that a love that strong was never fully realized. Your writing depicts the characters heartbreak!
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: I enjoyed reading this and feel that you have talent at expressing your thoughts! Thanks for sharing!
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What I liked: Finally, the answer! This is a cute story and a different take on the missing sock theory!
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: You are very talented. I hope that someday with practice I can bring a smile to my reader's lips the way you did with me! Thanks for sharing!
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What I liked: You truly captured my feelings about writing.com. I have made so many wonderful friends and learned so much in the short time I've been here!
Overall impressions: This was a unique way of telling people of our new obsession! Thanks for sharing it!
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THINKS:
Your talent and humor complete me everyday! You truly are my mentor and I applaud you for this comic piece of writing. With practice, I hope that I can someday bring smiles and worship each day! Through everything you do, His praise is heard! Thanks for that!!
PLEASE KEEP WRITING SO I CAN KEEP READING AND REVIEWING!
SouthernDiva "And if you happen by my port, Stop and say hello"
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What I liked: The subject of this poem and the mystery as to who you were talking about is the greatest! I had to laugh! My son is 28 and I still question my decision.
Grammar/Spelling: 4th paragraph: And is a very picky eater; is a fragment sentence, consider revising it.
Overall impressions: I loved this story and could so relate to the mixed emotions of motherhood! Thank you for sharing your story and a smile!
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First Impression: Wow, your talent shows in your words and your emotion. Great job! This would make a great song; now we just need a musician... 
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Flow: I can almost feel the beat! 
Additional Comments: You did a great job; I even like the title! 
PLOT THOUGHTS: You stayed on track and listed all the things you wanted to get done or go back to work on. Great job!
ERRORS: No suggestions or errors noted