"Congratulations on being spotlighted on the Center Stage"
What I liked : What a splendid way to remind us how grateful we all should be for each and every blessing. We all become so wrapped up sometimes, we forget there are those who are MUCH less fortunate than us.
Thanks for this reminder!
Grammar/Spelling/Suggestions :
" and saw it fit to invite me to join "; should the word "it" be included
(and do you know how hard I had to look to find anything to even question?)
Overall impressions : You already know how talented I think you are and this piece is no exception!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
Hi Thundergirl
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Welcome to WDC!
I see that you have already learned to add some color magic to your poetry! Your emotions and hurt are evident as you pen these lines. You did a great job showing your readers the pain felt as you went through the breakup. Writing is great therapy for your soul. Thanks for sharing a part of that with us.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi Tamasina
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Welcome to WDC.....
FIRST IMPRESSION: What an awesome piece of poetry. Each line flows well to turn a tale of sadness in a lost youth..
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your words ring true to so many. Your advice should be welcomed. Your talent shows in your ability to put your "advice and reflections" into a beautiful poem.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
"To fearful to fly."; should be Too
FAVORITE PART:
Today I am old,
As I tell you this tale.
No longer a child,
But a bit worn and frail.
Great job and thanks for sharing it!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi Pass it on
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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a great idea and full of imagination. Any activity that captures many participants is helpful in the WDC community.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: Your directions/guidelines were concise. Rewards/perks and participation instruction were easy to understand. The overall appearance of the Reviewer's Club site was colorful and appealing.
FAVORITE PART: I GET TO PARTICIPATE
FINAL THOUGHTS: This is an awesome idea that will generate interest among people who enjoy reviewing and from people who just need reviews. Your foresight in helping the WDC community shines in this idea!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi K. Nicole
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FIRST IMPRESSION: I am still laughing at this! Your awesome talent shows in your ability to write song lyrics from a prompt! How delightful..
FAVORITE PART: "Eyed me with his good eye"
SUGGESTIONS: check this line; not sure if spelling is what you intended:
"The only good thing about his is he can’t run away."
Your comedy and talent are a great mix. Having fun while doing something you love and being able to produce writing like this should make you proud of yourself. I look forward to more of your work!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi lacey jane
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To dream is to be! This poem says so much about what we want to be; about our aspirations and goals. You did a great job portraying all the things you are that make you the person people see. All those things that are hidden but have impact on your personality. You are a very talented writer and I thank you for sharing your work.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi schroeder206
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FIRST IMPRESSION: If you wrote this when you were 12, I can hardly wait to read your work now. This is an awesome piece of writing. Not only were you able to leave us with a moral, you also drew emotions and connected us with your characters.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your poem flows well and is easy to read. I really enjoyed the old man and the plot behind the story.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: The last line was a surprise but I don't want to give it away. Hopefully this review will spark the interest; it's worth the read.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi Mandy Reign
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It's very difficult to write a story in only 55 words. You did a great job with that. It had characters and a plot. Your talent is stretched when you are given a prompt or conditions and rules in which to write. I think it sparks our imagination or I know it does mine. I like the story! Thanks for sharing it.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What a delightful poem. Even though it is "warped and twisted", your talent shows in your ability to take us on a journey in your mind.
THOUGHTS: First of all, welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy it here as much as I do. I like the title, am glad you used the rating and genres for your first item. You did a great job!
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: Sorry, I do have a few suggestions but they are all punctuation....
"Eyes are open hands are fisted"; comma between 'open' and 'hands'
"Too many whens and too many why's"; no apostrophe on 'whys'
"Nobody's special nobody's gifted"; comma between 'special' and 'nobody's'
FINAL THOUGHTS: Your talent shows in your ability to express yourself. I hope you will continue to add items to your port. Thanks for sharing a piece of you with us, your new readers!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Port Raid Review!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What an awesome job you did with this poem. Your correlation to a teen and drowning is on the mark. Your talent shows as the writer tries to save her from herself.
PLOT THOUGHTS: This sounds like a prelude to "tough love". Thanks for sharing a part of it.
FINAL THOUGHTS: As each stanza lends another saving grace and each is rejected, I feel pain for both characters. Being a teen is tough!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi Sophy,
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What a great rendition of the gathering of WDC personalities. I read the story with delight as I looked for people that I have had contact with in my few short months here. You did a great job depicting their characters by writing about their conversations and their actions. Thanks so much for sharing this with those of us who may never see a WDC convention!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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What a wonderful tribute to your grandmother. To be able to reflect on happy times spent with her and doing things that made memories, tells a lot about who she was. You were able to take your reader on a trip down memory lane to the craft show! I commend you for sharing your talent and your memories.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your talented remembrance of your sister is touching. Your words create a sadness that touches any heart. How great that you still see that smile of her old self.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Aging is difficult. My dad says, "Gettin' old ain't fer sissies"
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: None noted
FAVORITE PART: "I know that the light still shines"
SUGGESTIONS: Your pain is shown in your writing. Thanks for sharing.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Well, the sleep demon has us both. Here I sit, reading your life in comparison with mine. They are much the same and relating to this story does bring back long ago buried memories.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your ability to relive this era of your life does seem to bring you some comfort and strength; at least, they tell me it should.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: None noted
FINAL THOUGHTS: I enjoyed the unique remembrances of youth. This story touched my heart and made me glad those days are gone. Hopefully I am a stronger person for it.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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"Congratulations on being spotlighted on the Center Stage"
What I liked : I wasn't sure whether to feel sorry for Rob or Dave. You did a great job with characterization. We've all been in this situation; either too long at the bar or a bad date!
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : This story did make me smile and feel sorry for the guys. My favorite part was Rob "ignoring" the tab.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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First Impression: This is by far my favorite. Your wishes are expressed so deeply. What you don't realize is that you can, "in a dance with words, express the joy of life."
Flow: The flow was excellent. I am normally not a reviewer of poetry; however, I do know what I enjoy reading and this was full of imagery with a happy beat.
Additional Comments: Thanks so much for your bid on my donation in the Rising Star Auction. It has been an honor to review your writing. You are an awesome individual with talent beyond words and it shows especially in your poetry.
Keep Writing so I may keep reading and reviewing
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Review #4
FIRST IMPRESSION: Your sadness is evident in this poem of desperate days.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your touching emotions are ones in which I can relate. When reading, I can almost feel the gray mist. It's as though the "gray" has meaning for life and the mist.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No spelling/grammar errors noted.
FINAL NOTES: I think you've touched on a powerful set of emotions. You feel it so deeply within yourself you have the backing of experience to echo that emotion in poetry
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
Hi Maria
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First Impression: This is a new form of poetry for me. You did a great job telling so much with so little. Great job.
Additional Comments: So much description, so much force, in so few words. Your awesome talent is depicted in this cinquain. I actually had to look up the word and do research to be able to review this. Thanks for making me use my brain and learn the different patterns.
Keep Writing so I may keep reading and reviewing
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First Impression:This poem made me laugh partially because I don't ride anything without a brake or a steering wheel. I could almost see how happy you were to be at the stable. You depicted well the feeling one should have for the love of horses and riding.
Spelling and Grammar:No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Flow: The poem flows well and read with little effort. I enjoyed the read and have no suggestions for improvement.
Additional Comments: Your description was awesome as you describe your elation with the mare. Great job! (only a motorcycle gives me this feeling)
Keep Writing so I may keep reading and reviewing
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What comedy lies within your journal. It's easy to see how this entry earned you a prize in the contest. I imagine you do see some strange happenings. Children do things we cannot imagine. I'm well into my 40's and my mom still tells the stories about the pinto bean up the nose and the fake pearl in the ear! Don't ask! Anyway, your journal is refreshing and the entry brought a much needed smile. Thanks for sharing!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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What I liked : Your creative ability to portray in words a graceful and exciting dance! I can't say too much because I don't want to give it away.
Grammar/Spelling : Just a suggestion:
"pleasures to be discovered to be savored"; I would add a semicolon between 'discovered to' or maybe a conjunction like 'and'
Also, because of some of the wording, I'm not sure I wouldn't rate this "13+" to be on the safe side. I know it isn't sexual but it does elude to that; but it is ONLY an opinion!
Overall impressions : This poem is amazing and kept me interested throughout. It captured my attention and made me yearn to hear more about the "love of your life"
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
Hi BlackWillow
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FIRST IMPRESSION: There is a bit of a morals lesson in this story. It shows love is more important than things.
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your characters were believable and their actions were spoke volumes about the actions of people.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors; however, I would check punctuation rules for commas. There seems to be a lot of them throughout the story. The only thing I remember from English is that it's a pause.
FAVORITE PART:
"grieving because of all the mistakes that can’t be undone-" We've all been there!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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"Invalid Item" by A Guest Visitor
FIRST IMPRESSION: So many of us have felt this way when our muse left the building. We stare out the window, we play in chat, we email our friends.
PLOT THOUGHTS: You did a great job portraying in poetry the feeling of sitting at that typewriter...
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART:
"No coffee, no cigarettes
No endless short breaks
No time for excuses
No hiding in chat"
Have you ever noticed that we "find" things to distract us???
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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First Impression: You stayed with the prompt and included the number repeatedly. The surprise ending caught me off guard. I can usually pick up hints to the ending but missed this one completely.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors and no suggestions for improvement.
Additional Comments: Your intense images paint awesome pictures for your readers. You are able to capture the attention of your audience with these images. Great job!
Keep Writing so I may keep reading and reviewing
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"The Lone Tear"
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This is a story in which many can relate. In most every family, there is some kind of discord. These situations usually are most prevalent during holidays. You told so much in such short order. Each character was depicted with emotion. To end on a happy note was great writing. Thanks for sharing another of your masterpieces.
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"The Lone Tear"
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FIRST IMPRESSION: What an awesome piece of poetry. Each line flows well to turn a tale of sadness in a lost youth..
PLOT THOUGHTS: Your words ring true to so many. Your advice should be welcomed. Your talent shows in your ability to put your "advice and reflections" into a beautiful poem.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
FINAL THOUGHTS: This is an awesome idea that will generate interest among people who enjoy reviewing and from people who just need reviews. Your foresight in helping the WDC community shines in this idea! 
First Impression: This is by far my favorite. Your wishes are expressed so deeply. What you don't realize is that you can, "in a dance with words, express the joy of life."
Flow: The flow was excellent. I am normally not a reviewer of poetry; however, I do know what I enjoy reading and this was full of imagery with a happy beat. 
Additional Comments: Thanks so much for your bid on my donation in the Rising Star Auction. It has been an honor to review your writing. You are an awesome individual with talent beyond words and it shows especially in your poetry.
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Spelling and Grammar:No obvious spelling/grammar errors
