What I liked: I liked the twist. Sometimes good memories are clouded with life.... You did a great job portraying the little boy's feelings and emotion.
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: I enjoyed this cute story. I felt happiness and sadness for the little boy. Great job!
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I'm the first to rate and review your beautiful guestbook! I feel honored! I love the image that you used! It's so appropriate! I hope you will have many friends that drop in to say hello.
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What I liked: I'll bet Char is delighted to see so many things written about the A-1 Academy Birthday Bash! I have so enjoyed it and I so enjoyed your story. I could fell the little girl's fascination and excitement.
Overall impressions: Thanks so much for sharing this. It was a great read and you did a great job!
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First Impression: Wow, what a tear jerker! There's a lot of emotion and pain in this story and it shows in your writing.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors but a suggestion; how about a few paragraphs instead of one. My old eyes had a hard time reading.
Additional Comments: Writing is good therapy for the soul! Keep putting those thoughts down!
What I liked: The pain and emotion in your writing made me want to research this disease more. Thank God for your quilting group and your writing.
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: You are very talented and it shows in your portrayal of this disease. You are in my prayers and I hope this impacted others as it has me.
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First Impression:What a powerful message in such a short poem! You did a great job depicting the thoughts of most people about not wanting to get involved.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors.
Additional Comments: Thanks for sharing this. If it makes one person stop and think; it was worth the time. Your talent shows and I look forward to reading more of your writing.
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Keeping me in suspense, are ya????? Ok, I'll be back! Can't wait to see if my intuition is correct! You do a great job with the mysterious....
What I liked: The air of mystery between these two is my favorite part. I'm going on to Part II now to find some answers....
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: You have talent especially in using different descriptions that make the reader see what you are writing. Thanks for sharing this!
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What I liked: I always enjoying reading your work and this was no different. I could put myself in the writer's place as she needed sleep so desperately.
Grammar/Spelling: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions: You are a very talented writer. Thanks for sharing your work..... And I'll be back, I promise....
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You did a great job.... Your spelling and grammar errors were corrected and the sentences and paragraphs make sense. I have no problem changing this rating! Keep up the good work and keep speaking your mind!
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What I liked: I loved the total honesty in this writing. This could hit home to a lot of young girls. It's sad but a reality. Thanks for sharing it.
Grammar/Spelling: I'd try some punctuation. There are a few fragmented sentences.
Overall impressions: I enjoyed reading this and it made me think. The next time I see a girl on the street corner, I will not automatically think the worst.
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The changes you made are excellent. This was a great story and I would recommend it to any reader. You captured the characters and plot in a sensational manner. I gladly raise my rating and hope that you will continue to strive for greatness.
You have talent and it shows in your writing. Of course, the last paragraph is still my favorite.
What I liked The subject and the description were excellent.
Grammar/Spelling No obvious spelling/grammar errors; however, a break somewhere would be nicer (and easier on hold eyes) and might help with the flow. Also, "They were as black as night, and as dull as grey." There's a contradiction here but I'm not sure how to fix it.
Overall impressions You are very talented and I thank you for sharing this poem.
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What I liked You did some excellent research on this subject. You discussed the main items of dispute while giving documentation for that opinion.
Grammar/Spelling No obvious spelling or grammar errors found.
Overall impressions Though I do not agree with some of these facts, I commend you for bringing this issue and your research here for us to read. I did learn a few things and feel I am better for it. Thanks for sharing!
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You did a great job portraying the little boy's feelings and emotion.
First Impression: Your description of the goat with his "whiskered face topped with a pair of crusty horns" was my favorite part. 
Spelling and Grammar :No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Additional Comments : You did a great job with the prompt. I'm glad you had fun with it. It shows in your writing. Great Job!
Flow : The poem flows along. Read it aloud and you can feel the rythum.