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FIRST IMPRESSION: This story is full of emotion and hope and love. Your words tell of a connection between two people that is found only once in a lifetime. Damian knew more than mama did about feelings and what was right!
PLOT THOUGHTS: This story grabs my attention from the first paragraph. It's a human interest story but gives hope to all who read it. Sometimes life gives us bad so we appreciate the good. You have found that love is Mel.
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
"Atleast there were one"; need a space between "at" and "least"
FAVORITE PART: Of course was Damain's little trick with the belly!
SUGGESTIONS: Write more short stories. I enjoy your reflections of tiny bits of your life. Thanks for sharing them!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
FIRST IMPRESSION: Your words paint a vivid picture of lost souls. It's sadness makes my heart heavy. You did a great job portraying the emotion in your words.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART:
"So when you hear the howling winds, don't cover up your ears
It maybe all the long lost souls crying for yesteryears."
SUGGESTIONS:
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi Nada!
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Your awesome talent in putting into words the things your heart is feeling simply amazes me. You are able to draw a person into your story and make them feel your happiness, your sadness and your tears. When you were sitting on those steps, I wanted to reach out and hug you! This story is full of hope! Maybe your words of assurance and unwavering support of your son will give other parents hope in their battle. Thanks for all you do, Nada. You are a special lady!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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What I liked This drew me in with the emotion and feeling behind it. I can relate to the plot of this poetry. I like the correlation between finding the "light" and finding that someone.
Grammar/Spelling No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions You painted a vivid picture of loneliness in this short poetry. Your emotion was well written into it.
Final Thoughts
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Your poetry just flowed with each line. It has a quick beat and is an easy read with a hint of humor. I found no misspellings or grammar errors! The subject, of course was one near and dear to my heart. WDC is an awesome community of writers and teachers and friends. You did a great justice to honor them with your words.
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What I liked I enjoyed the humor in your rendition of your first day. I'm sure the "score" was evened up many times over.
Grammar/Spelling No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions Your zest for life and quick wit shows in your writing. You kept me interested without boring me with too many details but gave enough for me to get a feel for the characters.
Final Thoughts
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
SouthernDiva If you happen by my port, please stop and say hello
What I liked My favorite part of the story is the comparison of the dark clouds with unhappiness and the tears with rain.
Grammar/Spelling/Suggestions My only suggestion would be to break your awesome story into a few paragraphs. Old eyes such as mine have a hard time reading when there are no line breaks.
Overall impressions Your talent is evident in your description and ability to paint vivid images for your readers.
Final Thoughts
keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
SouthernDiva If you happen by my port, please stop and say hello
FIRST IMPRESSION: I am not a critic for poetry where "correct" is concerned but I can tell you how this poetry made me feel. There was a lot of emotion in this heartfelt writing. I especially liked the correlation between reflection and lifeless ocean. These words seem to flow from you with ease.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: "I'm drowning in the sweet shards of my mirror's lifeless ocean."
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I always enjoy reading things that you've written. This piece on reviewing is no different. It gives some great pointers and advice to those of us who are new at writing and reviewing. As I read the different essays and articles on reviewing and writing, I feel myself becoming a better reviewer. Thanks so much for all that you do to make the WDC community a special learning experience for me!
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First Impression: Wow! You really pulled me into this story. The characters were believable and the "unbelievable world" surprised me! Great job and convincing writing!
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors noted
Additional Comments: This story shows tremendous talent on your part. You are able to use vivid imagination to turn the tables, so to speak! Great job and thanks for sharing your work. I enjoyed it immensely.
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"Congratulations on being spotlighted on the Center Stage"
What I liked : Your vivid imagery painted magnificent pictures of tranquility in my mind. I felt at peace just reading your words. It's easy to see why this was chosen for publication. Your talent shines in your witness to Him.
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : Thank you for sharing such an awesome dream with us in such detail.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
FIRST IMPRESSION: Your story held my attention from the first paragraph throughout the story. Your writing is descriptive and I enjoyed reading this immensely. The comedy made me laugh!
PLOT THOUGHTS: I didn't figure out what Vittles was until toward the end of the story. You could almost hear his mother scolding him.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART:
"A woman was screaming something about the devil coming to visit."
SUGGESTIONS:
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First Impression: What a humble and heartfelt piece of writing. How awesome that you can relate the comfort of your marriage to apple pie spice. Your talent shows in your writing.
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Additional Comments: Your descriptions of your guests, your presents and your mom made me feel as though I were sitting in that room. Great job!
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Gosh, I've been so remiss in my duties. Yes, I am one of the ones who hasn't rated and reviewed. My humble apologies and without further ado....
The Talent Pond is a great idea and you guys have put forth a wonderful amount of effort to assure it's success.
Fishing for talent, catching prizes, writing contests all encourage our wonderful WDC family. Keep up the good work. I'm honored to be part of such a grand group!
What I liked : Your imagination and the ability to describe each scene is awesome. As you described each groove in the brain, it was almost as though I was on the trip with you!
Grammar/Spelling : No obvious spelling/grammar errors
Overall impressions : What a unique way to analyze a disagreement and make the man like he ought to be! Great writing!
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
It's me again!
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Another Port Raid Review!
Oh, if we could only have this happen in today's world of chatrooms and online dating! Again, the ending was a surprise. That must be part of your talent; the surprise endings. Your kept my interest from the first paragraph. I read intently as the genii appeared and talked to Garza. This story was full of realism and fantasy. You did a great job intertwining the two.
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Hi David McClain
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Your surprise ending got me again. Your talent continues to amaze me. I am honored to be able to read your work as you describe in such vivid images, your characters and their surroundings.
PLOT THOUGHTS: I thought the "mulligan" idea in the plot was awesome. This is surely a "publish it" story.
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
FAVORITE PART: There are too many parts and too many twists for me to pick a favorite. This, by far, is my favorite story that I've read in your port.
SUGGESTIONS: Just this:
keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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Isn't it funny how things affect us as a child. Something so small as a butterfly that leaves such a lasting impression. Isn't it strange how our feelings about things change as we mature. Your writing shows emotion and humor and anger about the same thing. How talented you are to be able to create these emotions in your reader. I learned much from my brief visit to your port. Thanks for sharing these things!
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Hi GirlsNGlasses
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As someone who is fairly new to reviewing, I welcome any and all suggestions and comments. Your article gives me a place to start and to trigger my mind as I read an item to review. I have been writing for a while but only reviewing a few months, so I still don't have my own reviewing style honed. Thank you for sharing your list of things that you look for in an item. Your outline is like a map to those of us who are somewhat "lost". Thanks for sharing!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Oh, this is a bittersweet memory of Gracie. Being a catlover, I could almost picture her head butting your hands as you tried to type.
PLOT THOUGHTS: I'm glad you shared Gracie's little antics to give us a smile. I hope it helped the healing. Cat's are strange creatures but you know when they love you. They make sure of that!
SUGGESTIONS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No obvious spelling/grammar errors
SUGGESTIONS:
Please keep writing so I can keep reading and reviewing!
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What a great reminder of things that we all fuss at others about doing but never get around to doing for ourselves. You did a great job with the gentle reminder. The poetry lends a niceness when you really should be shouting from the roof tops. I hope every woman who reads this will schedule that mamo or checkup today! Thanks for the reminders!!
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Hi Victoria
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I am laughing so hard, I almost wet MY Depends.... Your writing is hysterical. I can relate so well to wanting to "ignore" the symptoms of aging. If it were only so easy as to put off having your eyes checked, there are a lot of us who would be canceling eye exams. Welcome to our world, honey!
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FIRST IMPRESSION: This story is full of emotion and hope and love. Your words tell of a connection between two people that is found only once in a lifetime. Damian knew more than mama did about feelings and what was right! 
PLOT THOUGHTS: This story grabs my attention from the first paragraph. It's a human interest story but gives hope to all who read it. Sometimes life gives us bad so we appreciate the good. You have found that love is Mel. 
ERRORS/GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
FAVORITE PART: Of course was Damain's little trick with the belly! 
SUGGESTIONS: Write more short stories. I enjoy your reflections of tiny bits of your life. Thanks for sharing them!
First Impression: Wow! You really pulled me into this story. The characters were believable and the "unbelievable world" surprised me! Great job and convincing writing!
Spelling and Grammar: No obvious spelling/grammar errors noted
Additional Comments: This story shows tremendous talent on your part. You are able to use vivid imagination to turn the tables, so to speak! Great job and thanks for sharing your work. I enjoyed it immensely.
Great writing!