BD Mitchell
I review six items a week for the aforementioned group. Sometimes, I review more. Having already filled my quota for the week, I came upon this title, and simply could not resist entering another review.
First of all, let me Thank You, for allowing me to review your work. Remember that reviews are the opinions of those reading, and ultimately, the choice is yours on whether or not you choose to alter your item based on the input of others.
In the realm of wizards and magic, ghostly apparitions often take to haunting houses. Normally this isn't a huge problem, unless you come upon a cantankerous ghost who is beginning to do harm to others.
This is a story of a wizard whose mission is to dispel a ghost from an abandoned house. Can he succeed, and if so, will he be harmed in the process?
Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but, or, and , creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. These three words are coordinate conjunctions used to join sentences or part of sentences that have the same grammatical status. Avoid beginning a new sentence with a coordinating conjunction (for,and,nor,but,or,yet,so). Coordinating conjunctions should be used for connecting between items of the same class within a sentence. In formal or academic writing situations, in particular, they should not be used to introduce a new sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have now come across two main circumstances where this happens repeatedly. The first is when the writer is putting to print exactly as they speak, and the other is with addressing or speaking to or for a younger audience.
One question bothered me, if the house was condemned and overdue for demolition, who cared if a ghost lived in it and haunted it. There is no real reason given, as to why it was important that the ghost be dispelled from the premises. How was he harming others? Or was simply his presence enough of a distraction that it drew others like him? I am not convinced there was ample reason to get rid of him, unless all ghosts must go...in which case more needs said on the subject of WHY this must take place.
I liked how the house is personified with voice and action. The way this is told, is somewhat believable for a fantasy piece and this makes it all the more appealing. I can imagine the squeaking and the creaking as being sounds of communication from a house, or ghost.
My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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