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#3986039

Review of THE LOST SOULS OF EIBERGEN

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Rated: 13+

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"THE LOST SOULS OF EIBERGEN"

DRSmith

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As I read through this item, I couldn't help but want to rush over and ask you all sorts of questions about the armoire but first, I had to go back up and check the details of the story. Yep, it was fiction. This is written so very well, that I just knew this was a true story and a piece of history that needed shared. This just goes to show what great talent as a writer you have.

You hear of people who claim that these atrocities never happened, but I actually ran into one of these people first hand. They claim that this was all a hoax and none of this ever happened. HOW can anyone be so removed as to believe this? History is doomed to repeat if we do not educate ourselves and share the stories of the world. How can we learn from mistakes of the past if we don't know the stories?

Now I am in no way claiming that this was part of a "mistake", but I am referring to History is doomed to repeat itself when those of the current time are uninformed and complacent to the past. That in itself is a mistake.

This piece of writing is very moving. I was brought to tears as I read through the paragraphs at the loss each family suffered. The victory that resulted in the finding of the photos and documents lead to the stories being told and the truth learned of each family. It helped to document what happened for the future and shares the story of a life.

I haven't noticed any technical issues in this writing, or the other three I recently read either. All of these are fine tuned and ready for print.

This is a great piece of writing that depicts horrors and atrocities of mankind. Thank you for sharing a piece on such a delicate topic. It brings to life the events of that time and open the eyes of readers to images of the past that even if this is fiction, similar actions DID happen and the world needs to remember.

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#3986033

Review of DEUX-MILLE MÉMOIRES

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Rated: 13+

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"DEUX-MILLE MÉMOIRES"

DRSmith

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Ok, they say a picture is worth a thousand words, and the memories they bring back are priceless, but I must say, it was the picture, and the picture alone that had me stopping to read this.

What special memories this picture must bring to recollection. To have raised an animal from a baby, and to be able to have it do something so out of the normal like this is unique. My husband actually came over and looked at the picture with his mouth hung open. Of course the hunter in him was surely drawing up a bullseye target in his mind, but he was amazed at this picture and the rack on this moose.

Truthfully, there was one part in here that had me thinking you had the wrong image up. The fifth paragraph mentions, "here’s a snapshot of my Great-Aunt Amelia". I kept looking up and asking, which one is aunt Amelia? Only when I got to the end of the story, did I see why this picture was chosen.

If it were up to me, I would include a picture of Aunt Amelia either at the top, or the bottom of this page. Having two pictures is just as acceptable as one and that would make the above statement ring true.

Those were the days when kin were close, foods were wholesome and pure...
Have you ever tried to capture the taste of one of those meals through creation of your own? I have. Mom used to make fried chicken, mashed potatoes and gravy with corn, on Sundays. Do you think for one moment mine ever tasted as good as mom's did? Not in a million years. But I will always remember those dinners around the table with her and my stepdad and my sister, eating and talking about the last week.

This is once again a wonderful piece of writing. Your eloquent words and your talent for spinning a tale that captures the reader's attention and holds them captive throughout the ordeal, mesmerized and hanging on your every word is something to be proud of.

This walk down memory lane shares bits and pieces of your heritage and also reminds me of times back when. Thank you for sharing.

"Auction Of Wings"

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"The Treasure Chest"

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#3986025

Review of TWELVE LABORS of HERCULES

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Rated: ASR

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"TWELVE LABORS of HERCULES"

DRSmith

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As you can see, I am chugging along and on to number two.
With keyboard poised, and chirping frog noise, I am continuing my review.
Not as good as you, with Hercules, but story to be told,
I will prevail and not derail and my reviewing words unfold.

Ok, that is about as good as it gets for now, but look what you sparked.

I must say that this is one fine piece and I would love to see it entered for consideration into the "2018 WDC Anthology Information"

this year.

When reading this, the voice of the poem, complete with rhythm and rhyme, rolled right off of the tongue with ease. I didn't have to read through this a few times to find the pattern, it came naturally. This doesn't always happen with poetry, and that is what makes this all the more special. Usually I have to read through it a time or two to find the pace and then I can fully understand. With this poem however, it was one time through and all was clear.

I do have one suggestion, that is usually a standard suggestion with poetry such as this, but I am up at arms and conflicted this time. Here is what I usually think:
Not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.

HOWEVER: I can't decide which it would fit better as. It reads fine as it stands, but would it be even more daunting if centered? I think perhaps I would have to see it visually to know. I will leave that suggestion to the wind.

Overall my friend another great piece of writing. I would however love to see either this piece, or the previous one I read, entered for consideration. I know I said it before, but I am serious and ready to put my GPs where my mouth is if that be the case. Hugs my friend.

"Auction Of Wings"

"What’s the Buzzzz?!"

"The Treasure Chest"

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#3986024

Review of THEMS THAT WALK AMONG US

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Rated: 13+

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"THEMS THAT WALK AMONG US"

DRSmith

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I am stopping in your port today because it has been ages it seems since I last did a review for you my friend. Where does the time go?

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.

What better way to cheer you up than with a review or two from a friend. Well honestly, I can think of many more ways to cheer a friend, but for now, a review will have to do.

I always get a good laugh when I read this. I have read this many times in the past and always get pulled away before I can create that review. One of the first things that I always think of when stopping on this item is the assumptions people make in life, without getting to the truth of the story or incident. Would this fall under common sense, or practicality? Who is to say?

Any great observer would get a kick out of how this story starts. It tells a lot about the events. I found myself laughing right from the beginning. From the clever image you chose to help illustrate the piece, to the drinking to cope with the interesting potential buyers, this comedy was a hit. Sadly though, I believe it was also true. What does that say about some of society today?

It is kind of like the guy at the store who thinks he is funny and winks and jokes and asks for discounts. So when you tell him you will charge him double and take off half, he genuinely gets angry and hostile. No amount of explaining will resolve the solution. You just bid him farewell and rush him out the door. Only your poor wife had to deal with a barrage of people like this and I can't blame her one bit for throwing in the towel.

Overall a well written piece. Witty and full of charm, this had me smiling and laughing the whole way through, as is often the case with your writings. I was thoroughly entertained. Thank you.

"Auction Of Wings"

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"The Treasure Chest"

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#3984688

Review of The Thornton Mascot

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Rated: E

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"The Thornton Mascot"

Hello DyrHearte writes

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I am stopping in your port today, because I saw that you had a new item up for review. I know this because you were kind enough to let us know in your newsfeed. That to me was very helpful.

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention.

I liked this heart warming story of a friendship that goes beyond the normal realms. This is the friendship between a boy and his dog and a bond that can not be explained.

~ with his fishing gear with the intention
The repeated use of the word with is distracting in this sentence. I would suggest altering the sentence. Here is how I would try it:
Fishing gear in hand, David walked outside and put everything in the truck bed, then turned around. Something was missing. Arthur was nowhere in sight.

A few technical issues:
~ communityassociated (add a space between the words)

~ infact (actually two words)

~Arhtur was (spelling of Arthur changed)

~walded back home (perhaps waddled)

Overall I enjoyed this piece. It was heartwarming and ended with me reaching down and petting my Fred. Fred and Arthur must have been close friends.

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#3984481

Review of Harold's Darkside

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Rated: 18+

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"Harold's Darkside"

DyrHearte writes

This is review #3 of 6 for "Simply Positive Review Forum "

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I am stopping in your port today, because I was rewarding the "King's Landing updating "

and came across your name in the forum. I recognized it from many years past, and new we had not been in contact for many moons. I decided to take a quick peak, then rush back to reviewing...and then it happened...that red little number popped up in my notifications bell. I had to go see what that was about. I mean after all, I only had 4 pages of forum posts to go to in order to credit them all and place them on the board. It is not like I was busy or sleep deprived as it was. I had to go back and take another look. When I did, I stumbled upon this great poem.

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.

With an alternate rhyming pattern, the poem cascades down the page in a tale of sinister plot and daring escapades. I like that I was unable to detect an exact syllable count, this was as if reading the thoughts of the stalker, though they did rhyme. I myself do not write poetry with a specific syllable count per line and I find this more natural. Of course, if there were a pattern, please forgive this overtired reviewer.

In verse one and two we have a stranger looking in on a beauty. As verse three arrives, we find that their is some familiarity between the two, for at such a distance, the color of her eyes is known. This is the only true hint that their may be some sort of a relationship between the two characters.

I was pleasantly surprised with the ending and liked it so much I had to come back and read it a few more times. Now that I have put off my rewarding to do this review, I must get back to work. Thank you for this nice distraction and this wonderful poem.

"Auction Of Wings"

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"The Treasure Chest"

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#3984238

Review of Pick me - I love you!

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Rated: 13+

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Dear Mitchopolis

This is review #2 of 6 for "Simply Positive Review Forum "

After a crazy sleepless night preempted by a crazy day at home, I needed some distraction. I don't recall the path I took to get here, WAIT, I seem to recall somewhere seeing a comment or something you left in a notification, that prompted me to come look for something to read.

Stumbling around in your port, I came across

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#1872403 by Mitchopolis

. The name of the item, accompanied by the fact I had just read a few of your blogging entries, as well as your handle, brought me to the conclusion that this might be a piece of writing that I would have a fun time reading. I wanted something to make me smile, if not laugh out loud. Though I didn't laugh, I was grinning by the time I finished reading this.

The grin started when you described the contest you would be entering. You, as in the voice of the this short piece, not you as in Mitchopolis

. My first thought was of tongue twisters and saying that title three times fast. Of course, you couldn't be outdone, so you came up with a contest title of your own, which turned the grin almost into a chuckle.

Not having hosted many writing contests, I must say that I have come across a few entrants and submissions that seem to emulate this exact situation, or it APPEARS IN MY MIND that this might be their thought process. That fact alone had me grinning more.

I guess what I am trying to say is that I found this rather humorous and it was exactly the remedy I needed for the morning.

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#3983302

Review of One by One

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Rated: E

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"One by One"

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

gummyhearts

This is review #5 of 6 for "Simply Positive Review Forum "

You have been selected as one of the lucky authors to be spotlighted by me for a review in conjunction with "Simply Positive Review Forum "

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I am stopping in your port today, because I found you in a new authors list. I was eager to see what you had in your port and this caught my eye.

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.
I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your port. It is a pleasure surfing through your port, trying to decide what to review.

An interesting poem that eludes me no matter how many times I read it. The voice of the poem isn't speaking to me, but maybe that is because I just took some Nyquil and am feeling the effects already.

If I had but one small editing point for this it would be to take lines one and two and split them up into four separate lines. The rhyming pattern will still fit and the poem works much smoother for me when doing this.

Not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.

Overall a nice poem. I would personally center it and then change the first two verses so that they were four. I would also alter it a bit so that the rhyming words would be similar but not the same.

"Auction Of Wings"

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"The Treasure Chest"

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#3983300

Review of Me and Daddy

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Rated: 18+

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"Me and Daddy"

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

fruitbasket

This is review #4 of 6 for "Simply Positive Review Forum "

You have been selected as one of the lucky authors to be spotlighted by me for a review in conjunction with "Simply Positive Review Forum "

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I am stopping in your port today, because I found you in a new authors list. I was eager to see what you had in your port and this caught my eye.

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.
I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your port. It is a pleasure surfing through your port, trying to decide what to review.

A sad tale of loss and suffering that invades a family when the mother passes away. The pain runs deep and all aspects of life change as new traditions are formed and family ties are rekindled.

One of the first things that stood out for me was that this is rated 13+. To be perfectly honest, due to the violence, I feel it should probably be 18+ since death does result due to the violence, and that can be perceived as extreme violence. I feel it is better to err on the side of caution than to have someone else change the rating for you. If you have any questions you can always refer to "Content Rating System (CRS)"

~was a wreck for what seemed like forever
this implies that Daddy gets better and is not only misleading, but also not true with the storyline.

A few technical issues:
~tossing on me my bed. (pink word not currently in sentence)
~Mary-Ann came in the kitchen wearing...
~and her eyed start eyes started to water...

Overall this was an interesting piece to read. I liked the viewpoint this was told in and found myself following along quite well. There were a few technicalities that detracted from the story, but I am sure they will be cleared up in no time.

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#3982713

Review of Threads in the Tapestry

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Rated: 13+

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"Invalid Entry"

Escape Artist

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I am stopping in your port today, because after reading the prologue and the first chapter, I had to continue on with the novel. The hard part is stopping along the way to do a review in between each delectable treat.

Thoughts and expectations from the title:

A clever title that doesn't give anything away about the chapter, and only comes into play once you have read the piece. Only then did I go "Aha, how appropriate".

How do I feel about the main protagonist?

At age nine, Merci appears to almost be fearless. She appears to me as one of those that are driven and once the path is chosen, nothing stands in their way. For Merci, even a worthy opponent was no match due to her preparation and motivation.

What impact do the secondary characters have?

I did not in any way feel that Merci was doing this to fight for her father's attention. To me, she was doing this for herself. Her spirit is one that must be free and her sense of accomplishment and satisfaction comes from action and self motivation. She has trained for this day, studied for it, and now that it is here, it isn't something to be pondered.

Her father's role was that of mentor, teacher and nurturer, though I don't feel he had to coddle her in any way. I feel he prepared her for life and what it holds, both the good and the bad. He taught her to access the situation and take from it what you will need to survive, whether metaphorically in the work force, or in reality in the jungle.

How do I feel about the pace, did it fit the genre?

I feel that the tempo with which this story is moving is needed to keep up with the character who is a driven force. This isn't some rich country club silver spoon brat sitting around the pool all day. This is a force to be reckoned with. Merci will take no prisoners. Though she herself may need a knight in shining armor before this is all through.

My overall thoughts:

Overall this is a story well under way. The descriptions bring the story to life through the eloquent wording and the fast paced action. The time jump back is done in such a way that is easy for the reader to follow and makes perfect sense. It helps to show the character building of Merci and lets us the reader know just a little more about her and what makes her tick. It also shows to what lengths she has gone to find out what these spells are and what she can do about them. I look forward to the next chapter.

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"Auction Of Wings"

"The Treasure Chest"

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#3982076

Review of Threads in the Tapestry

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"Merci"

Escape Artist

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I am stopping in your port today, because I read part of the prologue in the past week or so and had ventured in to read more, but didn't have the time to give this my full attention, so I saved this to come back to.

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.
I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing.

I was not very happy with you when I sat down at break today. I opened this chapter and read the first couple of paragraphs and had to immediately put it down. I knew that if I continued reading, I would lose all track of time and get into trouble at work for being late coming back from break. So all I was left with was a teaser. These first few paragraphs stayed with me for the next two hours until I could get away for lunch and read this chapter. How dare you write something so descriptive and enticing to the reader that they can't put it down. That wasn't very nice of you to introduce me to a book like this. ONE I DON'T WANT TO PUT DOWN.

I read this chapter at lunch and wanted to read more, but was out of time. Now that I am at home and can write a review, I see you have edited this already today. So I will re-read this once again. OH DARN.

One of the things that stands out for me while reading this is just how true the description of the setting is. I am not far from Bainbridge Island and Seattle. The skyline, the traffic, the sounds and the smells all come alive in this well written chapter. I felt as if I were looking out a window seeing it all, rather than reading about it on a page. Seeing the traffic start to pick up and then increase until it is an artery of lights flowing through the city like blood through the veins is mesmerizing. I like the metaphors used and the contrast that brings the city to life in this chapter.

I only found one small technical issue to comment upon and that was the omission of one letter, which changed the sentence. You will find that directly below here:
~to wander even father farther out into the world...

When reading this earlier, I thought I came across the word angst twice, not far apart. At the time, the second use of the word I thought should be something else. HOWEVER, I can't seem to locate that this time around, though perhaps I am over searching and thus missing it.

I was able to envision myself as the character Merci. Our choice of guns, our location, I was able to draw on similarities to put me in her shoes. Her mentality state seems a bit shaken at the moment after going through this episode. Though a lot is revealed in this chapter, there is still enough mystery and intrigue that the reader must continue on.

Overall this is a well written chapter. Right from the get go I knew that I was in for an adventure that would change me. I knew this was going to be a book I wanted to read front to back and am having a hard time stopping to include a review. I don't know if I will stop after the next chapter to do a reivew, I might just read the story all the way through. We will see where the story takes me.

There have been few authors who can submerge me in a world that takes over my life. In other words, when I start reading the story, all else around me disappears and it takes VERY LOUD sound or physical motion to break me away from the story. This is one of those stories and apparently you may be one of those authors.

I look forward to reading more of the story. I am hooked and will continue on.

"What’s the Buzzzz?!"

"Auction Of Wings"

"The Treasure Chest"

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#3980905

Review of free write

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Rated: E

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"free write"

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

NoraTheGreat

This is review #3 of 6 for "Simply Positive Review Forum "

You have been selected as one of the lucky authors to be spotlighted by me for a review in conjunction with "Simply Positive Review Forum "

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I am stopping in your port today, because I found you in a new authors list. I was eager to see what you had in your port and this caught my eye.

I hope you find the review useful, if only to find out how well this particular item is received. Sit back and enjoy the feedback and attention. You deserve it.
I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your port. It is a pleasure surfing through your port, trying to decide what to review.

An exercise in writing that transports the reader back to give them an idea of where it all started. Sense of smell can be a very powerful memory trigger and the writer uses that sensory to create a setting for this short piece.

Just a few technical issues to point out :
~Sentence two has repetitive wording. I would substitute one of the mixture for combination. This keeps the wording true and in conjunction with the rest of the sentence.

~The third sentence is incomplete.

~Add an extra line of spacing between paragraphs to make it easier on the reader's eyes.

This short piece leaves the reader wondering if the focus is of the school and the smells, or if it is the relationship and how it is falling apart. Ask yourself what the message or plot of the story is, and answer the questions to support the who what when and why of that.

If the main purpose is to show the broken relationship and how it stemmed from the high school, then bring the story full circle to show that. You start out strong, but mention "no matter how many times"...does this mean you have returned to the school...why are you there....You can answer this right after your last sentence with Now, I am back in high school, walking down the same halls where it all started, smelling that same odoriferous concoction that you can only find in an enclosed high school hallway, heading to the principals office to pick up our daughter." Something like that, to tie it all in. We have a great start, and middle, but no ending to round it out.

Overall this is a great beginning, and I look forward to seeing more. I like the start of this and how you bring the sense of smell to help draw an image for the reader.

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Review of IDEAS

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"IDEAS"

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

SandraLynn Team Florent!

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I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your port. It is a pleasure surfing through your port, trying to decide what to review.

A very creative poem on writing, or rather the ideas behind what to write. This was a fun rhyming poem. At first I thought this might be constructed using couplets, but then re-visited the definition of a couplet, and each line would have to have the same meter in order for a couplet to exist. Since I am not schooled in poetic forms, that left me with a rhyming poem, that has perfect matches that roll off the tongue. There was one exception, but it was close enough to not be an issue, and could rhyme, depending on your accent and that was the pair urgent and intent.

Overall I liked the voice of the poem. It was fun and light-hearted, poking fun and also seemed playful. This made for a joyous read.

Something to consider is that not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count or spacing, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.

I did notice one formatting flaw and if you look at the poem, you will see you have an open tag for one of the leftinstructions which appears like left} . That is an easy fix. You did well with this fun poem.

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#3977351

Review of Knee Problems

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Rated: E

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"Knee Problems"

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Rose Keeley

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I consider it an honor to have found your port and this great piece of writing. Thank you for taking the time to submit writing into your port. It is a pleasure surfing through your port, trying to decide what to review.

I too will be visiting the orthopedist on the 17th, not the surgeon yet, but for an unrelated issue. Actually I get to see them twice this week. Once for a finger, and the other for a shoulder. Two different ones each time.

After reading this I had a few questions for you. One, have you already been so that you know surgery is the only answer? This can be very invasive and take possibly 6 weeks or more to heal. Depending on when the surgery is preformed, could this effect your wedding? Then again maybe if you got it done right away, you will only be in a knee brace by then and that will be a better alternative to what you are going through now.

~Starting a sentence with a conjunction, but, or, and , creates an incomplete sentence for the reader. These three words are coordinate conjunctions used to join sentences or part of sentences that have the same grammatical status. Avoid beginning a new sentence with a coordinating conjunction (for,and,nor,but,or,yet,so). Coordinating conjunctions should be used for connecting between items of the same class within a sentence. In formal or academic writing situations, in particular, they should not be used to introduce a new sentence. Though the use of conjunctions to start sentences is becoming more of a norm in today's writings, it is still frowned upon in many writing circles. When used with slang terminology, the use of conjunctions to start sentences is a commonality. I have now come across two main circumstances where this happens repeatedly. The first is when the writer is putting to print exactly as they speak, and the other is with addressing or speaking to or for a younger audience.

~ i'm (always capitalize I and I'm a rule to remember is that "I am important so I should always be capitalized.)

Overall this is a well written piece. I only noticed a few technical issues to address. This would be a good piece to enter into a blog here. If blogging is your cup of tea, here is a group that helps with that process "Blog City ~ Every Blogger's Paradise"

. I would be interested in following to see your progress. I wish you a wonderful marriage and a safe surgery, if that be the course you decide to go with.

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#3976137

Review of ♥Streets of Dingle♥

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

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♥Hooves♥

You have been selected as one of the lucky authors chosen by me, for participation in the Symposium Community College Challenge. This means that I am reviewing you as part of a reviewing raid for "Invalid Item"

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#1979965 by ♥Hooves♥

It has been quite some time since I have visited your port my friend, so I am very pleased that you had three items on the list for me to review on the community college board. I wanted to start out strong and what better way to do that then with a review for a friend.

I remember the dream I had to go to Ireland, and though I don't know if I truly will ever visit, It is great to see photos and read of it through the eyes of others. In poetic form we are transported to a far away land. There we get a taste of the beer, the view of the land and a sense of the sites and sounds.

The rhyming format used for this great poem was spot on. I didn't have to force anything and the voice of the poem rang out loud and boisterous like the culture of the area. This great poem took me down the streets showing me the life of the part one Christmas past as I visited Ireland through the words of another.

I think the centered format, with the shamrocks above and below, helped to add to the tapestry of illustration the poem gave.

The added explanation at the bottom of the poem takes it to a whole new level. I say that, because poetry is often left to interpretation. What a poet writes, and the visual a reader gets, is often two different ideas completely. For instance, before reading the below inscription of explanation, I originally viewed this as a walk from pub to pub in celebration, spanning a few cities. What I was missing, was this was more than a walk. By adding details below outside of the rhyme and format, we are able to view the poetic vision as you have created for us an eloquent scene of winter's delight as you walked the streets, visited a perfume shop, stopped for a bite to eat and more.

I think the added explanation gives a better insight to not only the poem, but also to the author as well.

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Review of Hasty Lives

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Rated: E

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Storm Writer

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passing without a breath of meaning
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a very creative poem that the form used and the layout of the displayed poem all work to serve as a metaphor for people moving through life without the interaction from those around them. Though they are part of the community, they are separated by space.

A well written poem, however the lack of capitalization was a question for me. Was that on purpose to further illustrate the lack of cohesion or was there another reason for it? I understood no punctuation, that simply does not fit for this piece.

Overall well written and beautifully displayed.

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Review of Highway of Life

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Rated: E

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Highway of Life

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Entry for the ABC's Poetry Challenge
#1096073 by Dave

It has been a while since I have visited with you my friend and I am glad to have this opportunity to review something new.

Fate, chance and destiny, what happened to free will or is this all a map we are following. If so, do we get to take a detour and if so, is that predetermined as well. I like this thought provoking poem and how it eloquently weaves a tale for us to follow.

I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to notate. This was well written and a joy to read.

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Review of Love

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Rated: 13+

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Liam

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Love

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A mixed bag of contradictions - Cavatina
#1978822 by Liam

As you can see I am a bit behind in my reviewing and just catching up. I do hope you plan on entering this new round of contests and look forward to what you bring.

Love is about contradictions and I feel this poem touched on that in many ways. The heart as we describe it may be an organ, but coupled with emotion it is a strong and powerful tool in our existence. When love is brought into the equation, there is no set formula and I feel that this poem delivers that message quite well.

Though originally unfamiliar with the form used, I was able to detect it quite easily since this is written so very well. I didn't notice any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors to comment upon. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Unrequited

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Rated: E

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🌕 HuntersMoon

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Unrequited

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To bare my heart is asking for more pain. (Form: English Sonnet)
#1977339 by 🌕 HuntersMoon

I must admit, I got behind in my reviewing and the judging for this round is already over. However, I did vow to read and review each one so that is what will happen here.

It is always a pleasure to run across one of your poems. They are written from the heart and seem to float off of the page effortlessly. A traditional format is used, and then illustrated at the end so that those who are unaware of the form can learn from this artistic poem.

I could find no fault with this poem, it is eloquent and spoke from the heart. I felt as if I was transported in time and place to somewhere of tall grass, beautiful skies and a young man, watching a woman from afar. She doesn't know he is there, but he is pouring his heart out to her as he watches her walk through her garden. They have been friends since childhood, and now that they are adults, he sees that she has not the feelings that he has for her. To where his emotions and feelings have grown in a more intimate direction, she still sees him as the life long childhood friend. Thus the romance is not for it is not revealed to her, as he sees her fall for another. This true friend, though in love with her, recognizes her happiness and remains in the shadows.

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#3973113

Review of CACODEMON

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A great poem written as the silent watcher offering the assistance when the time is needed. Standing off in the shadowed abyss they see the dangers, the demons and their accomplice the coward and know that help is needed so they offer assistance when it is needed. A great poem !

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Review of CACODEMON

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This is a great poem that has a rhyming pattern which is easy to find.The voice of the poem speaks to you with clarity and sincerity offering assistance in a time of need.

The only thing I see that needs altering would be the subtext under the title. It says that the coward is the one making a pact with a monster and yet the poem is about an entity of unnamed offering help to the innocent. There is nothing in the poem to show that this is of a coward and a monster, though it is mentioned they work together, that is not the subject of the poem. The poem is about the aid that is being offered.

The poem in and of itself is great. It is clear and well written. Simply alter the subtext under the title and you have a completed piece. Now keep in mind, this is merely my humble opinion and I mean no harm, only to help and give you the view of a reader as I see it.

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#3973037

Review of CACODEMON

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Rated: E

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This is a very confusing poem, but only due to the last verse. For me the first two verses were very well written. The story, the rhyme, they both fit together in a cohesive unit that provide an excellent view for the reader. Let me explain.

Verse one: We have the four, liars, cheats, theives and monsters, who will push you into an abyss that now pain becomes part of your existence.

Verse two builds on this stating that cowards are part of the crowd that run with the above four mentioned demons and are perhaps the worst of them all.

Verse three brings you back to the abyss where the four have cast you, the inflicted, there is states that "we are always there to help you"...who is the we?

It isn't clear that the poem is being told in the voice of the coward offering assistance to the demons. It reads as if the demons have pushed the individual into the abyss, and someone is offering help out of the abyss.

Keep in mind these are only my opinions. I mean no harm. I feel if that the part of the darkened hole was changed so that the four resided in the abyss not the individual being pushed down into the hole, then this might ring more with the subtext on the cowards being the help.

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#3972344

Review of My Poetry

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Rated: E

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Dear piewhackett1 ,
I will be reviewing "My Poetry "

for you today. I hope you can gather some useful information from the review, even if it is just to find out whether or not I enjoyed reading this poem. Remember, I am but the reader, the poem is yours and you alone can decide if anything should be altered. I can merely offer my advice and opinions on what I am reading. My intentions are pure, to never do harm, only offer my opinions and views on what I am reading.

How did I come across your piece?

I am reviewing your poem because I hit review, and that is the first item to pop onto my screen. I am ever so lucky.

Thoughts and expectations from the title:

From the title, I was expecting a holding place for lots of poems. What I didn't expect to find was a great lesson in writing poetry. The title does capture the essence of the writing exercise quite well. If I had paid more attention to the subtext, I would have had a better image of what to expect.

How do I feel about the pace and flow?

This was a very fluid piece. From point A to Point F we are guided in such a way that we are at first unaware of what is going on. The "Surroundings" and "mood" were both written in such a way that either could have been taken as prose, but in fact, were the foundation for the poem.

Thoughts on emotion and imagery:

If I hadn't seen how you came up with the poem, I would have been mesmerized with the beauty of the poem. As it is, I am excited about the method you used and find it a wonderful tool. I am torn between the lesson and the end results.

Both to me were poetic and I am happy with the end result.

My overall thoughts:

Overall this was a joy to read. It gave me a peaceful image of serenity and joy.

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#3970174

Review of The Bathhouse

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Rated: E

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Simply wonderful my friend. I read through this twice, and there were only two places that I stopped and that was due to grammar, something you don't wish to be bothered by with this review, however I do want to tell you the first one is in the opening sentence and made me stop. She doesn't wrap things in her, but around her.

The content is well written. It held my attention and lured me in so that I am left wanting to know more of the story. A great piece of writing.

The descriptions had my teeth chattering as I shared with the voice of the story the thoughts of the cold and the trek back to the apartment.

I can't wait to read more.

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#3968440

Review of 2018 WDC Anthology Information

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Rated: E

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fyn

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You have taken on another grand task this year and I am ever so anxious to share the news. Through this public review, I hope to spread the news about another WDC Anthology in the works, and how people can submit their entries in order to become eligible as one of the many authors to be in print for the 2014 version.

First of all, let me Thank You, for allowing me to review your work. Remember that reviews are the opinions of those reading, and ultimately, the choice is yours on whether or not you choose to alter your item based on the input of others.

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2018 WDC Anthology Information

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All you need to know to submit to the 2018 WdC Anthology- DEADLINE 7-31-18
#1935520 by fyn

The first thing I notice is that the artwork for the cover looks to be done. Choosing red this year instead of green. I like that it makes it original so that each year is easy to distinguish.

Each member can submit as many entries as they want, as long as they pay the fee of 10k for each submission. Wow. As one of the committee for the 2012 edition where there was a limit of three items, I can say this is sure to bring you in many more items to select from than the previous edition. I must say that those selecting the finalists sure have their work cut out for them.

If someone forgets to put a line count or word count in the submission form, will their entry be disqualified? I filled out the form and didn't see a slot to enter this information. Should that information then be included in the original work of art?

I am letting you know beforehand that I have sufficient interest in purchasing 3 copies of the hardcover for this edition and simply await for instructions as to where to send payment when we come closer to publication.

The survey form is the same one used for the previous edition in 2012 so I am unable to review that one. I will leave a link to that in this review for those skimming through the review page who would like to stop in and make a submission.

"2018 WDC Anthology Item Submission Form"

This is a well thought out endeavor. I look forward to receiving my copies of this book. I hope I am also on the panel of judges again this year, though that will be a lot of reading, at least I know what I am getting myself into.

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